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AlwaysDressesInStyle


I know this is strange to ask, but how’s an adventure sound?

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This story is a sequel to Business Trip


Upon returning home to San Antonio from his Business Trip to New York City, Mr. Jones makes the decision to move to Equestria.

His journey takes longer than he expected, and whoever said 'getting there is half the fun' didn't have their teenage sister along for the ride...

Additional character tags: Snowcatcher, Rainbow Flash, Ploomette, Tex, Truly

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Ad2018 #2 · 1 week ago · · ·

Sweet. It continues. I was really hoping for more after the Mareiott

A charming continuation of its predecessor! I look forward to future stories set in this universe.

Charming and interesting, the visit to the Mareiott was as unexpected as it was welcome.
And if anything Ploomette was just too funny of a name :rainbowlaugh:

On that ending, "oh nice, first job experience as the first humans ever to work as massagists! Here, do work on the many times over world saving national heroes! I'm sure nothing bad can come out of this! :pinkiecrazy:
That's a level of insanity to make Pinkie proud :derpytongue2:

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Glad you liked it! :pinkiehappy:

I'd love to claim credit for naming Ploomette, but she's based on one of the toys:

https://derpibooru.org/145431

https://derpibooru.org/229981

Her official vector is a Fluttershy recolor. But her cutie mark certainly implies something a bit more royal, hence her title of duchess and why she's been appointed as a consul and representative to the UN. And since there's no official canon for her, I decided to make one.

As for the ending, it was tempting to have shenanigans ensue, but ultimately I decided against it. :raritywink: It was an admittedly risky proposition, but it looks like it may pay off for them. :raritywink: What could have resulted in :raritydespair: instead ended up as :raritystarry:

Also, thank you for using spoilers! I always appreciate that. :yay:

Well now, that worked out swimmingly. I look forward to seeing more of this world you have going, it's a fun one!

Emil #8 · 1 week ago · · ·

After a tough day at work, this was just want I needed.:pinkiesmile:

Excellent sequel. I love the serious world-building going on here. I like the addition of Samantha.
Your long description has a typo, "to move to" is repeated.
Also, Equestrian bureaucracy is pretty damn efficient if they can get a visa approved in one month...:pinkiegasp:

Awesome sequel. Hope to read a follow-up at some Point.

9972016

Thanks for that - fixed. Turns out it was in the short description too... :facehoof:

Given how efficint the hotel was at processing the two newbies, I wonder how many ponys there are actually SMILE operatives? :coolphoto:

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No problem. I made the same mistake on one of my story descriptions too.

You have to follow up, we need to see Pinkie's welcome party and him explore more of Ponyville.

I want to see more of this world. Also have a like and follow :twilightsmile:

Dan

I wonder if Dewdrop Dazzle is capable of bloodbending.

And indeed, upvoting and Favouriting this. :)

Rainbow Flash always dresses in style.


...why does everything blue suddenly taste like copper?

That went well. And was fun and adorable.

It also gives me ideas for humans running into this from the other side with aliens. Like, a couple of sought-after alien masseuses happened to be a couple of former office workers who met humans on a business trip, saw an opportunity, and decided to get in on the ground floor.

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I'm not planning on exploring that aspect of things, so if you want to write about ponies trading in office jobs for jobs massaging humans, go for it. It would fit in very well for Admiral Biscuit's not-a-contest that these stories were written for: https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/869870/story-notes-labor-day-plus-a-challenge-to-readers

If you want to set them in the same setting as Business Trip let me know. In the ~five minutes I've spent typing this reply I already have a rough outline of a plot that could work...

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