• Member Since 24th Jun, 2017
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Bronyxy


Pony fan inspired by great writers such as Pen Stroke and Conner Cogwork

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This story takes place during Season 4.

Twilight makes a rare find in an antiques shop and travels off in search of a lost town; a town that holds the best kept secret in all of Equestria.

Her shocking discovery puts her on a collision course with Celestia and Luna who have been sharing a dark secret since the founding of Equestria.

Chapters (5)
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Comments ( 23 )

I'm curious how you can keep such a premise E rated.

9707843
You do raise a good point - I have steered clear of any violence or romantic involvement and introduced only mild peril in the hope that it can be enjoyed by everyone without worry of stumbling across something age inappropriate. I hope you think I've met these aims.

Although a bit fast paced, it’s a great story, you deserve more followers

9707858
Thank you - you're very kind. I'm pleased you enjoyed it!

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Did Twilight get immortal? It was a great story

This was an.... interesting story.

That was................................................ wasteful.

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Thank you - so pleased you enjoyed it!
I can't see her turning it down, especially if Celestia and Luna are counting on her ...

:twilightsmile:

I don't comment often, but I wanted to say I really liked this! Glad I happened to click on it by chance. A fav and a follow! Planning to see some of your other works when I have time. Will there be more, or is it a sort of ambiguous end? Either way, wanted to say I love how descriptive the writing is (something I LOVE when reading) and the story was very well done overall! Hooked me in quick and I raced through it to see more.

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Wow - thank you for all the kind words and for the follow too!
Of course you're most welcome go have a look through my past stories; I hope you find more that you like.
As for Twilight, the status of her immortality has been debated in the fandom, so the end is kind of self-fulfilling, but I can't see her turning down a challenge especially when the Royal sisters (all three of them!) need her.
Look forward to seeing you again soon!

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9711234
Thank you - stay with it, there's going to be some startling revelations as the story develops!

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9711319
Thank you for your kind words!
Corona has a fiery personality and you certainly wouldn't want to cross her, but she isn't evil like Daybreaker, just hotheaded. Deep down, she's good, like her sisters, but has serious anger management issues. Perhaps in time she'll be welcomed back ...

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It's little things like the ticket booth scene that make a story world alive

I see some wasted opportunity for drama here.
Your Twilight shifts her beliefs very rapidly based on a single book, in contrast to the series Twilight, who so idolised the princess that she literally went crazy at a thought of missing an assignment. A book would make her question things, but she'd likely look for more evidence, or more probably, asked the princess directly.

On the other hoof, I love the hair color thing. As a fellow conspiray theory writer, I can't help but smile at what you came up with.

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Thank you - we've all met clerks like him!

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Glad you like the mane color theory - that was the principal idea behind the story! The more you think about it, the more it just doesn't seem to fit right.
I kinda see your point about a single source book, but she's got no reason to doubt the authenticity of this centuries old untouched time capsule. She did stay up all night too, so I'm pretty sure she would have found some corroborating evidence as Princess Corona would have been so much a routine part of life at that time.
Thanks for your comments, and I am glad you enjoyed it!

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Thank you - I'm so pleased you enjoyed it!
No plans for a sequel yet, but I'll bear it in mind; thank you for your support.

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I do agree this needs one in my eyes

9707843
probably cause the secret is silly? idk...just now reading it

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Thank you for adding this story to your favorites :twilightsmile:

9867004
was an interesting idea. :)

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