AU in where Twilight is a dragon but still is Princess Celestia's student. Twilight has a more logical head on her shoulders and takes her job as a caretaker to Spike more seriously than canon.
motherly!Twilight, manipulative!Celestia
Idea sparked from Winter Quill's stories Growing Up With Scales and Sparkles and Scales
Cover art courtesy of Majestickfire9
Not Beta'ed, all mistakes my own. Don't like? Don't read. Cross-posted on ff.net under PlutoMilo
Now being rewritten: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/533926/the-element-of-magic
Chapters (1)
I always love tricks like this, how did it happen this time,
Okay, I feel a description of Spike would help, and you misspelled 'Acres', but overall very good!
You have met the Village Idiot.
I'm happy to see my stories have inspired you to write your own! I like what you have so far, so I'll have to keep reading :)
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O.o holy crap the Winter Quill has seen my fic
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I'm just sitting here laughing in disbelief
Off to an interesting start. I will continue this story with much interest and anticipation. No major thoughts so far but I will endeavor to include my future notes and ideas for your perusal.
Keep up the good work,
Shadow Quill, Messenger of the Moon.
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Or the village idiot just came in the town?
I feel a description of twilight and spike would of been more helpful, like how tall exactly is twilight? Does she look like the cover photo? Does she stand on 2 or 4 legs? Is her neck long? Does she have a mane? And is spike a filly or a fully grown stallion? What was is his hair styled? How did twilight get a hold of him?
this is really good so far
interesting
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That's a good question. I thought this version of Twilight was as big as a T-Rex, but because of how she entered the door, it left me with confusion.
Give me wings and as I'm taking off I'm either doing a deranged dragon roar or
I don't seem to see any mention of Spikes phenotype. Pegasus seems slightly unlikely given Twilight lowered herself so he could climb on but is he a Unicorn or an Earth Pony?
This whole story will be a long read...
I wonder how far I’ll get to
Let’s goooooo!
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around Celestina's size maybe?
If you ever need an OC for this story, I will gladly offer my services through what some call a Private Message.
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The Nazguls sound like a woman's scream from tv's black and whight days.
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I have a few questions about Twilight.
1. How tall is she?
2. Does she walk on 2 or legs?
3. This is not about Twilight but are you still working on this story?
Well this already makes me not want to send Celestia and Twilight's family to the moon so that's an improvement.
This story, as well as the Twilight Sparkle Dragon concept itself, has one problem. Spike is ABSOLUTELY USELESS in this story. He can't do anything that Sparkle or her friends can't, he's not needed to send messages, he's not needed as a flamethrower and in general a dragon. He is a useless and superfluous character here, which is very, very sad, but Spike as a pony could have huge potential, he could be extremely useful, but for this you need to weaken the Spark itself and strengthen Spike, for example, by making the future ambassador of friendship a unicorn master of fire magic and leave him the ability to send letters.
And it was also necessary to make Spike a kind of ambassador for Twilight Sparkle, so that he would prepare the pony for her appearance and actively help in interacting with the pony. After all, Sparkle is a huge dragon and she must have huge problems interacting with other ponies, and if Sparkle makes friends with the whole of Ponyville in one day, and this story will develop in much the same way as the canonical one, then I will be very disappointed.