• Member Since 24th Jun, 2017
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Bronyxy


Pony fan inspired by great writers such as Pen Stroke and Conner Cogwork

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Fluttershy has an out of body experience and discovers what it means to have magic.

For MidnightMoe

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“What’s wrong?” enquired the dapper draconequus sat opposite her on a green sofa. He held a cup of tea in his right paw and in his left claw a teaspoon which he held still as the cup span itself in circles, stirring itself for him.

“Span”

God my warming settings came on when I was reading

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Never met a draconequus that wasn't magic ...

:pinkiehappy:

Behind them, a fish on roller skates followed along carrying a marmalade sandwich on a silver platter.

:rainbowlaugh: Of course. Really cool story!

Great to see you again, and thanks for your kind words!
There's only one Discord ...

:pinkiegasp::rainbowlaugh:

This story is funny and thought provoking at the same time. Well done!

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Thank you!
I really enjoyed writing Discord's kind of randomness and also showing how much he cares for Fluttershy.

:yay:

Here have an upvote.
I enjoyed it :twilightsmile:

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Thank you - always appreciated :pinkiehappy: Hope to see you again soon!

It was really different how instead of just having Discord switch their bodies, Fluttershy had to control things inside a cockpit with the use of a joystick and colorful buttons - very unexpected, and quite chaotic. :trixieshiftright:

I will say though, that despite this having been written rather nicely, you do seem to consistently make certain grammatical errors, so I'll be sending you a PM to address those - but your story was still coherent regardless, so that's good. :pinkiesmile:

It makes sense that Fluttershy would want to use great power to simply help creatures more effectively, and perhaps even on a grander scale. One criticism I will voice however, is that the moral Discord succeeds in teaching Fluttershy: that magical power can end up causing more harm than good, is rendered sort of moot by the fact that he fixes everything she messed up by using his magic. :twilightsheepish:

I'm not saying I'd like this to be a tragedy, but the moral and the conclusion are definitely at odds with one another. Additionally, everything Fluttershy did could just as easily have happened without the use of magic, since she helps injured animals all the time. :unsuresweetie:

Still, this was an enjoyable read with some cute Discord/Fluttershy friendshipping. I encourage you to keep writing and developing your talents, and I thank you for sharing this story with us. :twilightsmile:

I'm just gonna leave this here for the people who don't get the 'Ministry of Silly Walks' reference. :twilightsheepish:

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