I can't think of a good bullshit quote that doesn't sound like a 12 year old wrote it. Have a Fluttershy as an apology. 
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991 years. That's how long it's been since Nightmare Moon took over Luna and was banished. Every single year, Celestia has tried and failed to abate her pain over the incident. Finally, she has had enough of the hole in her heart and seeks to fill it, even if only temporarily. Becoming a mother to six seems like the best course of action to that end, doesn't it?
A little idea I had that I hadn't seen done before. Proofread and reviewed by Azure5555.
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ok I cant wait for moar,
I wonder do they have they cutie mark yet?
is LM they real mom and if so dam that a lot of foal to care around she most have been huge, or did who ever LM just kidnap them form they family put them together for some odd reason,
also me think the Noble are about to have a hissy fit,
I can't wait to see what happens next to these 6 fillies, of course what about their real families, I mean we all know which families they belong to after all, not to mention what about Applebloom, Scootaloo and Sweetie-Belle, what will happen to them without their big sisters there?
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No, they don't have their cutie marks quite yet. That comes later. Also, what's Celestia's reaction to the note?
Interesting concept. I wonder if the Mane Six came from their canon families, or if they somehow sprang into being by Luna's magic in this AU (assuming LM stands for Luna Moon or something). And what's going to become of Spike? Is he even going to hatch?
The writing could use some fine-tuning. Remember, when a quote ends in a comma, the dialogue tag afterward starts with a lower case letter (unless it starts with a proper noun, of course).
Example:
“Relax, Twi, I’ll make it later,” came the laid-back reply of Rainbow Dash, lying around the lofts of the orphanage.
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I... actually didn't know that, and I don't think Azzy did either. I'll keep it that way, as not only does it make it easier (at least, for me) to distinguish between dialogue and description, I just prefer the way it looks. Thanks though.
Also, there will be six chapters. I'm fairly certain that if I skip Spike, people will actually try to kill me. Just wait until the second chapter, Azzy seriously said I should drown in hot sauce. It was hard to write, and according to him, it was hard to read. Also(again), ding ding ding! You get a cookie. LM does stand for Luna Moon. As for how? I'll leave that up to you.
Well I'll be damn... A new original story where the girls are sisters & Celestia is their mother!? You Army, my new friend have my full attention!
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Well thank you. It was just an idea I hadn't seen done before. Surprisingly so, since this seems like something that would have been done before long ago.
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Tell me about it, everyone mostly writes about Twilight (& only Twilight) being the only daughter of Celestia or Nightmare Moon, you however are sitting on a gold mine!
P.S. Happy 18th birthday!
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Thanks!
Only thing missing is an infant spike
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There is the possibility that you could wait and see what happens, isn't there? I'm not skipping Spike, people would genuinely try to kill me if I do.
ADORABLE I'M GONNA DIANOF CUTENESS OVERLOAD
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I take it you enjoyed the chapter then?
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That one line at the end especially, SO AMAZING
Oh my heart, it can't handle so much adorableness! This was an excellent job of the girl's goodbye to Sunny & their 1st day in their new home! I can't wait for adorableness!
TOO MUCH ADORABLE CAN'T HANDLE HNNNGGGG SQUEEEE *dies*
Must...resist...urge...to squee... SQUEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!
Resistance is futile.
*alarms going off all around in my head*
Megaphone speaker: warning, cuteness levels are hitting critcal! Cuteness over load will begin in mere moment. Estimate time 3 minuets! Only cure, read extremly dark and vilonet story, not enough time though.
Myself: oh shit! This is not good, all personel, be ready for immediate shut down. Stop all other jobs, and get ready to rebute my brain! This is not a drill i reapeat, this is not a drill.
*everyone scrabels to get ready but it is two late. Rainbows of death go around my brain and kill everything in sight. With that my brain stops working and i die do to cuteness over load*
Lol, seriously this was adorable.
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Damn right!
It ain’t MLP without that little guy!
I died, honest to god!
HNNNNNNNNNG!
This entire chapter was adorable.
Nice job with the dialog too - it looks better to my eyes with the commas instead of the periods.
On a more serious note, I wonder if there's a reason Celestia is so adamant about not wasting food. Maybe she and Luna struggled to put food on the table before they became the rulers of Equestria.
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I suppose it's just more of a moral thing really. Yeah, she can have as much food as she would ever wish for, but her needs, while important, don't overshadow that of Equestria as a whole. I can imagine that she would rather go hungry than see foals outside of the castle starve.
RIP Ailingstar: Died of Cuteness Overload
He died doing what he loved.
Well, it's too early to say anything for sure, but I'm liking what I'm seeing so far. This is an interesting concept, and you seem to be approaching it from the perspective of the early seasons when the show was still good an all the characters were relevant which is a major improvement over just about everything I see these days. There isn't a whole lot there yet so I'm not willing to pass judgement at this point, but you do have me curious to see where this goes.
To put this in context (since I like data), I just checked my favorites list to see how rare this actually is since it feels very rare at this point, and this the fourth story this year I have been genuinely curious to see develop. That said, only one other story was started this year with the other two being stories that started in 2014 and 2015, but they are ongoing and I only picked them up this year, so this is actually only the second new story this year that really got my attention.
That said, there is one tiny issue I noticed that I wanted to point out. It seems to me like you might not have put quite enough thought into what the change in setup would do to the girls. The example that made me notice this is AJ's accent which is very much a product of her upbringing (that is learned from family and community and is obviously not genetic) and thus shouldn't be present here, although that is minor enough and iconic enough that I can see why you would leave it. That said, it is interesting to note that this does not apply to Rarity because her accent (which I forget the name of) isn't actually something anyone uses (including the rest of her family) and is actually something some people deliberately learn to make themselves seem more fancy.
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I'm glad you like Sisters of Harmony! I can't truly say that this is the most interesting or the most original idea, since it seriously just amounts to the Mane 6 being adopted by Celestia. I'm much more surprised that no one thought to do it first, especially since it's so simple.
As for the accents, I think the tones and manners are just as much of a person as their personality is. Like Applejack, it's very hard to see her as Applejack without the distinct southern drawl. The same would go for Rarity, as while she may have grown up in an orphanage in this story, she's still largely the same pony with the same quirks. In this fic, I'm planning on keeping the Mane 6 virtually the same with some small changes here and there to more emphasize what growing up together did to them. You'll see more of that in the next couple chapters and especially the ending.
Thanks again for reading!
Can't find the danged meme but i have to say it.
You had my curiosity, now you got my attention.
Can't wait to see more.
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Yeah, that was my thinking on AJ as well. It just wouldn't feel right if she didn't have her accent. That said, the point does still stand as something you need to keep in mind, but it sounds like you are aware of it so hopefully things will go well.
Now to wait for those chapters to go live.
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Here's to hoping...
I must admit, I put of reading this for quite a while. Not just because I was wondering if more chapters would come it so I could get a better feel, but also because the concept seemed a little cheesy and a little far into AU for me. And indeed I almost quit for that exact reason at least once.
..... But holy frick that was cute
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Thanks for reading! Mind telling me what was so cheesy? I honestly haven't seen this style of AU done before, so that's why I am doing it. Also, what was your favorite part so far?
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This could just be a matter of the story having not developed yet, but as of right now there really isn't much conflict to speak of. Though I do understand that not all conflict is the same and not all stories necessarily need conflict, there was a point where it seemed like the story was just, "here's some happy ponies, and they stay happy".
What kept me going was what stories without real conflict need to have, good character interaction. You definitely found a new way to interpret the characters personalities into a new context, and that is what I liked about it. While I am thankful I stuck around to see that, there isn't much beyond the interesting premise to hook new readers. AU is tricky, some people don't like to be out of their comfort zone without good reason, and you are offroading pretty deep here.
From where you have gotten now I think you can keep going on the path you started and at very least keep the readers you already have. You have a style that is worth reading, so just take what I say as constructive criticism and keep the path you are on because my comment was meant as a compliment
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Thank you very much! Here's to hoping this story grows even more and gets better with time! Also, you didn't answer my second question. What's your favorite part of Sisters of Harmony so far?
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I think I kind of answered that in my first post but I suppose it needs context. Like I said, you created an interesting character dynamic, and then you paid off getting invested in that dynamic. Add to it the fact that we see it from the perspective of Celestia who is seeing it the same way we are, for the first time. Yeah, them all naturally coming together in the same bed, holy frick that's cute. And not necessary cheesy because you created characters we could believe would do that.
I just read your 2 chapters today and like it so far hope to read more soon.
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Thanks! As with the general theme with most here, was your favorite part the end of the chapter? Or did some other part grab your attention more? Thanks for reading!
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I kiled all of it it was cute and funny. But I got to ask is LM stand for Luna?
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Yes in fact, LM does stand for "Luna Moon." As for how, I'll leave that up to you. Also, sorry for taking so long to reply, my brother has been visiting recently.
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No worries and I do have some things come to mind when it comes to the how the main 6 came from Luna.
You could go by is if you are doing something similar as to what Polaris501 dose Heir of the Nightmare I stopped reading it because it got to a point that I didn't like where it was going. But still am a fan of Polaris501's other fanfic called In the Sun's Shadow which hasn't been updated in a long time compared to Heir of the Nightmare. But from what I can recall is that Luna gave birth to an alicorn Twilight and didn't tell Celestia about it. One day Luna tried Celestia but couldn't and when Luna went back to Twilight she finds Twilight was kidnaped by a group who is crazy about Celestia and said group tries to kill Twilight. Luna saves Twilight only to poison her with dark magic on that very night as she becomes Nightmare Moon. After Celestia sealed Nightmare Moon on the Moon Celestia finds Twilight dying and had no chose but to turn her into a unicorn to save Twilight's life only for her to go into a coma. Celestia puts Twilight in a cocoon that won't let her age and when Twilight wakes up a few years before Nightmare Moon comes back and Celestia gives her up to keep her safe.
You could have also mixed in the Chatterjoy fanfic Feather to Feather and Starlight Crusadir fanfic Twilight Sparkle: ORIGINS where Twilight is sent to the future.
There is also the fact that you could do what Stratocaster did with the fanfic called Starchildren where Nightmare Moon kidnaped Big Mac Shining Armor and Thunderlane and raised them as her own. All because Nightmare Moon finds out that the three have some type a link to the main 6.
Which if you got your idea's from them or similar fanfic's I got two idea's in my head on how you will go about it.
One Luna gave birth to all of them but before she became Nightmare Moon she sends them to the future for there safety and if they were alicorns themselves Luna did something to hid it in hopes that Celestia never finds out about them and never sees them. Which could be reviled when the main 6 get there cutie marks and Celestia freaks out and does a DNA test on them to find out that they are Luna's by blood.
Or Nightmare Moon finds out who they kidnap them and Luna for a moment gets back control and sends them back but can't send them home to there real families. And makes it look like they died on the Moon to throw Nightmare Moon off.
That is all I have as for the ideas as to how it could be, hope you have a good day.
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I mean... If that's what you want to believe, go ahead. This is going to be a loose thread at the end of the fic. I personally don't care how you think Luna got them, come up with some wild theories. I'll just be here, eating noodles and reading.
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Or were you jocking?
Um... I just did I just used the spoiler blackout because I brought up other fanfic's and I don't know how people would feel about that...?
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I'm being entirely serious.
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Okay
Sorry for bugging you but do you know when the next chapter will be posted?
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Here you go.
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Oh...Thank you for letting me know.
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Well if that's the case than I expect the next chapter out tomorrow
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Maybe. Maybe not. Read the latest blog post (which was today!).
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So you lied to us
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I found this really sweet. I hope you write more!