A prodigal child is born once more with a strange condition that makes her uniquely gifted in a lost magical art. Unfortunately for the child, that art is soul magic and Celestia does not tolerate the manipulation of a soul under any circumstances.
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I thought you said she lost her ability to rhyme?
I retract my earlier statement!
OK! Has she not lost the ability to rhyme, or has she?! I'm getting so many mixed signals here!
Is the towel bit a reference to Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy? The whole bit about a towel being "about the most massively useful thing an interstellar hitchhiker can have."? Because bravo if it is!
Might want to check all the you're you are using. A bunch should be your.
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Yeah I changed something in docs and instead of fixing one instance of a wrong your to you're it changed all of them. Fixing it right now.
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Yeah, it seems that while editing the chapter, some settings, uhh.. bucked up and it caused most of those like "you'reself"
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She has sort of lost the ability to ryhme. We will touch on more specifics of that later.
The towel referance was purposeful
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Eh mistakes happen and life happens we all move on.
It seems like all the "your" have been swapped with "you're". For example: "Oh I absolutely must make a note of you're colors. Anyways, keep going please.
UGH, why'd this chapter have to be good? Now I'm stuck waiting eagerly for the next one :P
This was a Great chapter though!
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On the very first line of the versoin of the story that your reading at the very top it stated
(I am aware of the you're issues, please ignore them as I am fixing them shortly)
By the time you finished reading it I had already updated the story with the fix. I also stated in the comments that it was a known problem and would be fixed.
twice.
I think you may have ment ‘Their’ In this context of the word.
I'm almost in tears, so many incorrect uses of "You're"
Good chapter. Loved it can’t wait for the castle
i am impressed, you had zecora giver her the basic definition of being a lich without using the word lich. still twilight shouldn't shy away from raising the dead, minion mastery could be very helpful with whats to come.
Another great chapter, can't wait for more.
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Jesus man, its just a few spelling errors, get a grip.
Further more most of it should be fixed by now. I also have my editor taking a looksie at it as we speak.
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I'd recommend using a search function to find all of the 'your' and 'you're's in the chapter and then read them aloud. It's easier to determine which should go where that way.
You somehow managed to swap all the your and you're around o.O
Also, then and than are swapped for some reason as well.
If you can fix those two issues, the chapter is pretty much free of fail.
your*
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That is litterly exactly what I just did.
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Thank you captain obvious #347. You are like a ray of sunshine during an already clear sunny afternoon.
I love the story, I really do. Fun adventures all around, and I am glad there's more progress being made.
Do you need help in the proper utilization of Then/Than and your/you're? I've noticed you get those mixed up frequently.
"your" and "you're" are easy, when you type "you're" instead type "you are" and if it doesn't make sense then type "your". "You're" is a contraction (which means a joining of two words) of "you are", you would use it to tell a "state of being".
"Then" and "Than" require a memorization of the meanings of the words. "Then" indicates a point of time or order in a list. "Than" is to be used in a comparison.
When you try to rely on speaking to determine which word you are using, you can still make a mistake based either on your accent or possibly just using the wrong word.
I know you've been getting this a lot, but it will stick I am sure. Keep at your practice and it is going to come together.
hmm i take it this gets irritating. I will point out if an author is going to open a commission at 10 per 1k words, they ought to be able to utilize "you, your, you're, then, and than" properly before publishing.
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i like the story so far, keep up the good work
Finally! The "payoff" so to speak weve been waiting for when it comes to Twilight condition. I woulda expected it to affect her more than it did, seeing as she essentially consumes life so to speak, but eh, everyone deals with undeath differently. And so we have the gang, mostly, headed off to see the wizard - i mean castle. Im betting Pinkie will charge in later, when righty finishes its quick heal Twilight kick started. Excited to see more!
Oh and please dont take the bunch of duplicate grammar comments to heart. Most people dont read the comments before posting their own. While there are still many errors, youve said you are fixing them and I say take your time.
Now we know the story between two sisters, but how Cadance mixed into this? Not to mention now she is working with Changeling of all being.
Great story so far, kept me reading till the end
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mastering a minion would need days if not months of practice and training to handle multiple sets of thoughts and orders in your head, otherwise your main body will freeze in the midst of combat while your mind is telling the other one what to do, rather than the seemingly simple multitasking that a regular necromancer has to contend with on a common basis.
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yes but liches are different, they emit a sort of aura about them that makes undead want to obey them, and it's only really supplanted by a stronger lich.
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It really depends on how the undead is created. as they take many forms. however the vast majority of the freshly created undead, have only the most basic of control schemes. like going back into the days of text based gaming. and having to parse out the commands from your own memory rather than a list conveniently pasted on the screen with an option for you to pick. More advanced control schemes would take a while for the budding necromancer or lich to develope.
The Elements are waking from their deep slumber...
I find it interesting that Twilight, who's whole thing these days is accidentally or unwittingly consuming life from plants and organic matter (the pie rotting to dust, pinkie's limb(?), decay of the house), heals people on contact without realizing it now.
I squee every time changelings are mentioned because I am a dweeb.
It was downright painful to read all the possessive and contraction swaps in this chapter...
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still i hope she doesn't rule it out because 'eww necromancy'
not all necromancers are evil just because they ressurect the dead to serve them.
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My preferred form of necromancy avoids calling upon the spirits of the dead, more so because of the waste of mana needed in order to keep the spirit under the necromancer's command.
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If that causes you physical pain, you really need to get over yourself.
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not talking about controlling spirits, that would be sorcery, necromancy is manipulating corpses.
Just binge read this whole thing! Love it, fav' d, when is the next chapter?! MOAR! I am so interested to see just what the heck is going on! Awww, why can't I travel to the future to see the whole finished thing already? but I guess the wait will be worth it!
It's been a while since we've had a chapter but this was really rushed.
You're constantly mixing up you're and your, and there are several grammar errors throughout. Really takes you out the story.
Looking forward to some dungeon delving!
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Thank you captain obvious #348. You are like a ray of sunshine during an already clear sunny afternoon.
Wolf like? I thought they were treelike?
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Some of the apple family are tree bound while others are more timberwolf like.
Another awesome chapter!!!
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Really? Cool!
So which way does applejack lean on?
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If you read the story you will see.
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Sweet. I hope it's more wolf. Xp
Follow the breadcrumbs Twilight.. find your way home.
Great update! Thanks for working so hard on it! I look forward to more whenever it’s ready.
Just pointing out that you need tp re-read this chapter. Multiple instances of "you're" when it should have been "your" and at least one instance of "your" when it should be "you're".
I am on cellphone but if I remember as soon as I get yo a pc I will try to point out the obes I notice.
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Thank you captain obvious #349. You are like a ray of sunshine during an already clear sunny afternoon.
Even the breifest of looks into the comments would show that not only are you the 12th person to say this but you would also discover that it is being worked on right now! Next time before you comment see if someone has already said littlerly the exact same thing you were planning on saying and hey this is good advice for any website!
Better luck next time!
Looks like Twilight may be unintentionally giving energy rather than draining it. Wonder how that will affect her appetite.