A prodigal child is born once more with a strange condition that makes her uniquely gifted in a lost magical art. Unfortunately for the child, that art is soul magic and Celestia does not tolerate the manipulation of a soul under any circumstances.
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I considered breaking the chapter apart, given how long it is. But there wasnt a good spot to split it in half. Let me know what you think. Should I have cut it in half? Is it fine this way? What did you think of it!
I'd have told him to go apologize before he can rest.
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To who? They were gone.
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In the afterlife.
Rainbow didn't want you to know she is a Manga Fan.
This was a really enjoyable chapter,the right about of bitter and sweet. Look forward to more!
All that screaming and shouting in a town graveyard, I'm amazed that nopony heard that.
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its a good thing they were really far away from everyone.
How many chapters long will this story be?
Well I like how long it was and I didn’t see any problems with the length
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Alot.
Brace yourself for some new readers. Your story has been featured.
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Lol its been featured every single time I've updated.
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Noooo! Jest was aware of this phenomenon. There goes my plans of trying to exploit it to try and get more chapters posted sooner.
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Lol good luck with that. These chapters already take forever.
Great chapter!
While long, I agree that there was no really good place to put an end without having to post both together.
Nice to know that, even though they are a part of Celetia's cult, they are still caring. Even if it is their beliefs that more or less killed the kid, the guy honestly thought it would heal the kid, and that it was his concern the entire time.
This was chapter was awesome, sweet and sad can't wait for the next one. Btw seriously who else was ready for someone to joke about twilight after being in the body dump "graveyard"
Yeah I think leaving this one whole is better; cliffhanging something of this emotional weight class would have just been frustrating.
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Yeah I know the feel.
Hnnnnng, that last part. Spiderbelle and Spike
Also this was quite a good adventure, and I kinda feel sorry for the preacher ghost at the end. Comes back from the dead just to go back feeling guilty.
Dirge was cool too. It was good meeting him.
Breaking it up would stop its flow I say keep it as one.
This was realy well written. I’m glad Rarity got some closure even if it wasn’t the type she was looking for.
The standard is set! Now all future chapters should average around 18,000 words. I think
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Nope! Dont you dare jinx it! If people start expecting that I am gonna be so pissed!
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no bad pony no jinxy, every word spent on this is a word not spent on infestation, poor jest only has so many hours in the day!
and i love both stories i dont wana have to pick between them!
That was a good chapter, it only it had no impact on the story.
gödrzræmbgryzrüḧr. i think this one broke my brain trying to pronounce it. XD
I've been keeping up with this for months now, and can't help but notice how it feels that there are three distinct story arcs. One with Twilight, which is getting the bulk of the attention, one with Sunset Shimmer, which makes sense so far, and the third with Shining Armor, which just feels neglected. I feel that you could develop the Shining Armor story arc of him starting out as the runt, at the back of the pack, and through determination and effort, becomming the shining example of a guard, pardon the pun. Then inevitably being reunited with Twilight, which would comopletely undermine his motivation, and would allow for a really nice emotional payoff.
That's not to say what you have here isn't good, because it is truly a wonderful story, completely turning the entire show on its head, while still sticking to many of its themes. I'm not saying that you need to change anything, though Shining Armor feels neglected as the story sits currently.
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He wont always be, but for now we got other stuff to focus on.
Spike x Spider Sweetie Belle? I ship it.
I like the story, but I have to say: finally some actual necromancy! I have been waiting for necromancy to happen since the beginning, and although this still is really basic it's at least something
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This story is a slow burn, but expect necromancy to come up in just about every chapter here on out.
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Nice!
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You dont/cant know that.
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Heck if i know, you the one writing it.
And i don't "see" future, I'm searching for guns. Decorative ones. No need to be grumpy.
But in all honesty, not that much, you already at 85% to that.
Three weeks later, editor still hasn't found this mistake in the first sentence.
*you're
When you see someone spend over an hour adding over a hundred of your stories to a folder named 'disliked' then hop on his alt and spend another half hour adding every single story to another folder labeled 'do not like'.
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I am very glad that in the end the priest hadn't deliberately killed the colt. And it struck me how his last admonition for Rarity was how ignorance and fear are the greatest evils. It sounded like that was the thing he had become that he despised. And also like he would have been angry if he ever learned the truth about Celestia. It also seemed odd that he died so young, only 26.
Closure didn't bring the relief Rarity wanted, but at least this may in time help her move forward. Learning that it was all a misunderstanding must hurt, but at the same time it does also mean she can let go of the anger that has festered ever since witnessing her parents' deaths.
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This chapter is definitely better as a cohesive whole.
So will this story get its monthly update soon?
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Update was double sized last month so there wont be one untill later this month.
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Ah ok
...she forgot she doesn’t need to breath, didn’t she? Meaning she doesn’t need to smell.
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I mean even if you dont breathe, but still have the ability to smell, your gonna stuff. Also, Twilight is still struggling with her new mostly undead body.
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Ah, but for one to smell, one has to breath though their nose.
Something I can longer do...smell, that is. I can breath through nose, but have no sense of smell.
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Not technically, air can simply waft into your nose and you can get blasted with some funky smell even if your a mouth breather.
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Oh...well...thank you for clarifying. As I said, I have no sense of smell, so I wouldn’t know.
I have a question on pony life cycles, in the early chapters we read that Velvet was about 42 when she was killed, but then here in this chapter Rarity thought Dirge was about 23 when see saw him yet he complained about his old age, and mister Proclamation was listed as being 26 on his head stone.
Now I don't know if somewhere there was some sort of mix up, or if in my sleep deprived mind from reading this story late into the night I misread it, but in all I'd just like some clarification.
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Nah dirge is just whiny. Pony life spans are generally equivalent to human ones. If slightly less.
I'm not sure what the plural of arachne is, but it's definitely not arachne's. Arachne or arachni or arachnes maybe.
This was a great chapter.
And the Spike X Sweetiebelle was cute.