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so whos gonna be the first one with a foal my money is on north or citrus
Naughtylight is naughty!
such a sweet chapter / so much love.
it looks like the heard is coming it to really being bonded as a full family Spike brings the family together.
love how the chapter flows right in to the hole story grate job team.
I feel as if twlights forgetting shes not lead. she seems to be taking on citrus role without realising
Silver's nicknames for Tim are getting old.
9297460 I agree.
-Ru
But then it'll get cold!!
Really cute moment with Spike though, loved it
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yeah. i think id start kicking him in the dick every time he said somthing.
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Ooooh that is a tough choice!
I like it, it was certainly a very good chapter to read.
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Cayenne’s the one that’s ready for foals. Didn’t you read the last couple chapters?
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That's funny, because now Silver is using those as terms of endearment.
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the problem is that it does not come across as that. there is no context for it. you need to expain it. to me and everyone els hes just doing it to be a dick still. and in all honesty its not a good way for someone to know endearment. its like if i had a friend and they kept calling me fucknugget. id kick em in the dick and say show me some respect BOI!!
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i did but that doens't mean that the other won't get pregnant as well
I like this story. I do. But the inconsistent tenses are frustrating, going from present to past in the middle of most sentences...it’s jarring. And breaks the story flow.
I liked this chapter a great deal more because there was no sex. Sex is fine in writing, but when it goes over the top, it gets annoying. Eventually if feels like the author has run out of ideas and is just posting porn because they can. There is SO much more to relationships than seeing how many kinks you can throw in.
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I planned this story from the beginning to be clop with plot. Keeping a coherent story yet the characters are adults who have sex.
That being said, given the circumstances oncoming, there are going to be a few clop heavy chapters before things settle down for the summer (in the story) and more story progresses. Hope you enjoy why they have sex, more than the sex itself.
9302577 I do, and well spoken.
The first couple of paragraphs painted a beautiful picture in my mind. I'd love to wake under a pile of ponies. Seeing the girls all huddled together certainly dials the cuteness levels to 11. The "white mare" will likely fawn over the news. Citrus and the girls might not like the "bottom pinching" though. Unless they've all developed a familiarity with each other that they know it's nothing more than playfulness. The scene with Spike is also quite adorable. I guess he's kinda like the herd's first child then huh. He's going to be the most loved kid dragon in all of Equestria. I'm sure he'll learn a lot more recipes from Cayenne and Tim too. Just watch he get's into some differences of opinion with Silver over keeping house. It's good to see that North's cartography work is coming along. I can't imagine Silver wouldn't want to go on survey with her if she asked unless he's got some prior commitments. Could be a moot point if it turns into a family excursion as Twi suggests.
The discovery of Tim's laptop and the ensuing talk about technology is interesting to note. I kinda figured Twi would be involved in the reverse engineering of the jet engine. Something came to mind though. Bird strikes are not unheard of here. I shutter to think of a pegasus strike there. Is Equestria ready for these advancements? Silver's welcome home was fun to watch unfold. I'm sure the new 'Doormare' makes sense to him now. I'm glad he accepted Twi. Looks like they need to update the family crest. A joyous task to be sure. Oh! Maybe that's how Tim's clothier finds out. Come to think of it, does Twi joining make the herd nobility now? Would they get titles like Duke/Duchess? Crap, here come the bit-diggers and fame chasers. I'm sure the herd would recognize them coming a mile away though.
An excellent chapter showing a herd as they should be; loving and looking out for each other. Thanks Sparky et al. I loved it. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
I...NEED...MORE! I just found and binge read this awesome story. It is on my bookshelf and favorited and got a thumbs up! Keep up the epic work!
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Why thank you! I've got 3 chapters ready to go, first one to be posted in seven days. Hope you enjoy!
The electrician side of you shows in this chapter.
I have to say that this story is Ohm-mazing!
I always get a charge out of reading things like character development and cultural differences.
It really gets me amped up!
I volt for this story!
That was priceless how Silver gets welcomed home......even though you could see it coming from a mile away it was still great.
I also love how Silver finds out that his opinion really does matter....to Tim and Citrus and the other mares. Im glad that he could accept Twi.
I'm a bit confused about why Twilight is so excited about Tim's phone and laptop. Can't she go through the portal and time and buy a dozen of them? Along with technical manuals of all description? Or is the portal just not tech friendly?
I feel like there was some rather important information missing from the chapter.
Ya know, I've read into a couple of your other works before this one...and I've got to say this one tops them all. Your world building is great and although the beginning was a smidgen rocky I can't bring myself to complain about that because I suffer from the same with my own story. I love your take and in-depth version of herding and Tim's herd is greatly executed.
A definite 8/10 my man. I'm gonna keep up with this till it's finished
Here I am in the corner, "Why doesn't Tim hug Spike? The little guy deserves it."