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Well it looks like they be having at least one foal soon. Now I wonder what tribe it will be?
north might be a little shy but when shes going she is GOING.
also poor silver, hes's going to sleep for the next week xD
The sex is Nice and all but I didn't follow the story to have every single chapter be about sex. Couple this with the fact that we know almost nothing about north and silver. The story has really lost me
"By the gods Tim, I still have a cock! I haven't seen him in a month, can you imagine it? How're you doing, big guy? (to his penis, obviously)"
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While there's been a lot of sex in the story as of late that's not what the story is about.
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Name any charecter development after Silvers duel
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Citrus & Tim off the top of my head. Particularly about herd dynamics & gender roles. Things are explained, Tim's viewpoint is considered even integrated instead of the "this is how it's always been and how it's going to be" attitude as before. I guess that can apply to the herd as a whole. They're not just assuming things anymore. It's only recently in-story that Tim has been able to see the herd's finances for example. Twilight has had a bit as well. She's no longer the 'pining princess'. She's earned her place and she's learned the herd loves her for her and nothing else. I would like to see some more about North Point though. I haven't read this chapter yet but given what we know of regarding the last "supply run" I'm sure we'll be seeing more about Silverwing and all that is implied there in the future. I'm looking forward to it. Them foals are going to feel like the most beloved foals in all of Equestria.
In short, I don't mind all the sex recently. The herd's been through the wringer and they've made a lot of strides. Knowing Sparky et. al., they've probably got something planned just around the corner. I'm sure it'll scratch the storytelling itch whether there's more sex (yes, please, but that's just me) or not I'm looking forward to the rest of the ride.
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Fair point but I would like to see a non sex chapter to break the all the sex
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The increased rate of sex is primarily due to heat. I've built up quite a bit of story lore into this time of the year for the herd, bonding regarding activities in the bedroom. That being said, yes, the story has been sex heavy for a bit of time though I think it's related to the story. But as I was writing this chapter, I was thinking whelp that's enough sex on screen for a while. So at least for the next few chapters, I'm planning on advancing the story, and I'm planning on a couple surprises and the herd is going to be busy, with a foal on the way, gonna see how a pregnant mare can be. Story is the primary goal of this story, with sex to make it spicy. So, no worries, more story is on the way. I have the next chapter written, it is available now on patreon. Along with my other stories. Hope you all enjoy.
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That is good news at least to me anyway
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Agreed.
Especially since some interesting plot points that could have been used for character development were instead just used to Point Plots.
The two that spring to mind are Silver and his silver work. Almost no development of his background apart from "While he was away getting silver for his thing that he does, the human got laid".
The big one though was with North rediscovering the importance of her Mark. There could have been some really nice stuff involving Tim and North, and perhaps the rest of the Herd, going off on a little adventure so that North could really get back in touch with her Mark. They could have done a little orienteering, a little camping, some romance by the fire with Smores, etc.
Would have been cute.
Instead we got (paraphrased) "Hey, you helped me realise why I was miserable at work. LET'S BANG!"
Now, before anyone thinks I'm being harsh here, I get it, this is a rampant Clopfic. Sex is gonna be the main theme. Personally, I just feel that it's a little unfortunate that good character relations moments (romance) got bypassed for a quick fix.
That said, the arc with the falling out was pretty well done, and I did like the resolution for that (Silver teaching Tim how things work). Some more Herd Dynamics would be cool to see.
I'll be glad when the Heat arc is done though.
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Wow, thanks for some ideas. Some of that has been discussed during previous story discussions between Kalash, and a couple others with me. Some of those are already in future plans.
I am also glad to have heat written. And there are plenty of things to go on in future story arcs.
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Yeah, sorry if I came across as overly Critical. I'm not good with people words.
Heavy Clopfics aren't really my speed. I'm mostly reading this because I'm a huge fan of Dust on the Wind, and The Desert Prince (and hoping you'll get back to Epsilon someday). It's a good story, and I'm sure many are thoroughly enjoying it.
I just personally feel it could take a little more inspiration from Xenophilia and the like, and have a few more sexless chapters that revolve around building the characters.
Example scenarios:
Various members of the Herd enquiring about Tim, and his family, what he did before Equestria, his world, etc. I KNOW every other fic goes over this all the time (usually giving the Human a *Insert Tragic Backstory*), but it still helps to build the relationships between the characters. Probably not necessary, but would help build an understanding of him for the Herd.
Citrus Blush, and her situation with her parent Herd. Her shop, and how she makes all her products. A Herd trip to acquire more ingredients perhaps, or find out why one of her suppliers is being problematic.
Cayenne and a possible drama with her restaurant, perhaps a food critic that is judging her for her choice in Stallions, rather than the quality of her food. Although she has the upcoming Foal Arc.
North Point, I've already covered, but there are other options too. More about her parents/family? Perhaps an annoying younger sibling, etc.
Silverwing and his Silver Work. How he became a skilled Duellist. It'd be nice to see him come into his own a bit. Also, why he was working at the.... Butcher's Shop, IIRC? I'll have to re-read, as I've been through a lot of stories lately, and can't remember all that happened in this one. Griffin the Griffin was a fun one.
Once again, not trying to be negative here. It's a good story, just not my preferred style. These are just some ideas I can recall thinking of from the first read through. Use them or not as you wish.
I was finally able to read the chapter. I like how it shown here how sex during estrus is supposed to work. Yes, there's some basic instincts kicking in but there is still deference paid to each other. I bet TF spell must be fascinating to watch assuming the light from the active spell isn't too bright. A little bit of world building regarding TF, estrus and as well as proper diet and hydration too. Then there's the care and love displayed. Citrus and Twilight seem to be getting closer and Spike making sure no one is "fucked to death". That made me chuckle and d'awww. I really like that last conversation between Tim & North (Tim's trolling aside.) I think it helps reiterate that they all know what's expected now, they are all still themselves just a lot hornier. Yeah, this feels like a good culmination of the "Heat" arc. I do feel for Silver though. I hope he's doing ok. Thanks for the update.
Off-topic and season 9 spoilered:
It kind hurt to see a Sombra-fied Citrus and Cayenne laying down Anti-air suppression in the season premiere.
I've enjoyed the debate about this chapter and the discuss on "the right amount of sex in a story."
I'm agreeing with ClosetBrony here. I think there is plenty of world building, but we (the readers) knew what was coming (this sex heavy chapter) because "heat preparations" was the focus last chapter.
I personally like clop in my world building stories. And I enjoyed this chapter.
The only thing I think the author could have done better is say "this chapter is 95% clop, skip if you want" to appease the readers who prefer not to read it.
Oh dayum, somehow my heart also popped a stiffy today. Great chapter, very saucy 👌
Horse nooky!
Awww.....im glad Twi is part of Herd Blush now and she really does seem to have learned her lesson and her place in the herd too
Or kneels and bobs.
Lol sorry.... I couldnt help it
Great story again Spark. One thing i liked is that there wasnt emphasis on Citrus and Twi having large breasts in their human forms....it was implied but wasnt like shoved in your face.....personally i happen to love small breasts and 1 thing i will never understand is why almost all clop w anthro or humanized ponies has to have huge breasts that wouldnt even exist on humans irl wout breast implants....my motto is more than a handful is just a waste.....and i like how North didnt want to transform this time and also how she was just able sit and enjoy some tea w Tim despite being in the midst of estrus.
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I kinda agree w you Dude3.....clop is great in stories w serious plot and world building.....and as readers we all knew that a seriously clop heavy chapter was coming bc of all the emphasis on estrus and preparations for it.....but there might be other ppl who might want to just skip the clop and an authors note at the beginning would be helpful to them....also there are times i just wanna read something thats not clop heavy.....one thing ive noticed a lot of other authors do is the chapters that are pure clop they mark w * so that if you dont want the clop at that moment you can skip it but you also know which chapter it was so you can come back to it later if you want
mare's only have one set of nether lips.