Son of Princess Luna. A Bat Pony Alicorn who's small for his age.
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So, Nightmare Moon has returned, and with the Elements of Harmony back on the tree, Twilight decides now is the best time to test her alicorn power, and defeat Nightmare Moon on her own.
She will soon realize she just made a childish mistake, and pay the price, in the cutest way possible. But she will also learn some interesting secrets about history, and herself.
Cover art belongs to Cuddlelamb on deviantart.
Rated teen for mentions of breastfeeding in future chapters.
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So you went the Darth Vader route? Well, I can't wait to see how Nightmare Moon is going to explain how she is Twilight's biological mother, and how Twilight Velvet and Luna are connected (outside of Velvet obviously being Twilight's foster mother).
7622549 Oh, trust me, all will be revealed next chapter. And I think you will be surprised.
Can't wait to next.
And some of you other story's
I know some Momma's that would have spanked Twily after they regressed her if she were their foal.
Hope the next chapter will come soon.
I can't wait to see what happens to twilight Its vary interesting to read keep up a good work update more soon
Very interesting start, I hope that next chapter'll come soon, I can't wait to see where you'll go with this.
ok i be watch and tracking,
7622895 So, is that a like, or a dislike?
Nice start :)
7622981 Thanks.
If celestia tries to turn me into a foal then she better not give me to blueblood because he will commit suicide if he is around me
7623188 Oh, Blueblood's already got a finishing punishment in this story. That will come out tomorrow.... I think.
7623204 ok but if celestia turns me into a foal she messed up because I have a friend that will kill her if it happens
7623228 But what if she turns you both into helpless foals? Besides, I don't think she will anyways. Lauren and Bonnie are already on her with how many bronies were truned into foals already... including me.
7623242 not the celestia I am talking about this one is more powerful than etheir of them and will turn anyone she wants into a foal that and I may have called her sun butt
7623256 and she may have already brought me to her equestria and is deciding what to do to me.
maybe Twilight Velvet is Nightmare Moon.
but more wounding who her father is?
7623265 Well, that's you fault not mine. I had my own reason she turned me foal.
7623268 Trust me, you'll be surprised of how Twilight Sparkle came to be.... I think.
7623280 i hope it not going be by mare casting spell into male or give something.
7623278 actulaly it was her fault because she woke me up from my nap and when that happens I am kind of cranky.
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7623493 yeah although she kind of learned not to wake me from my nap
7623505 oh and she kind of turned me into an alicorn although I kept my eye and hair color.
Interesting start, you got me wanting to read more. But dude, you need an editor.
7623581 Yeah, they seem to be in short supply, so I gave up looking. People tell me I need one, and I asked a few in return if they would be it, but then I'm met with "Nope, but good luck on your search."
So yeah, I gave up the hunt for editors a while back. I even sent a blog out when I first started writing stories to get an editor, and I was met with silence.
So yeah, unless you can find someone willing to edit my stories, I'll just keep writing the way I do. I'll send a blog out again, but I don't know what good it'll do.
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Yeah, been there.
7623607 I'd volunteer gladly if my life wasn't so busy rn.
This story has, in my opinion, quite a lot of potential. The only problems I saw from reading it once were with pacing. I'll probably give it a further reading to find any others.
does this story get a sad tag, or sad elements too? I mean because of her real mother, or do you plan to make it more funny? You can give me a private Mail if that should be a spoiler that you don't want to give everyone.
I still have to read it, but I enjoy the idea already.
This comic would be great for a future chapter.
7627145 That was..... disturbing.
good premise, but execution was quite rushed. I'll get back to you next week with an edited version that i hope will be okay for you
7628386 Thanks.
7623280 I say it discord or starswill the bearded or king what his name......
It was fine, too rushed though, but I somewhat enjoyed it.
Night mist you can use my oc meta wing a pyromaniac metal winged Pegasus in any of your stories
New chapter soon?
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Night-Mist you stole my idea!
due to Twilight being the element of magic she gets flung into the future to be reborn to twilight Velet
next time ask#random mustache 
Whens the next chapter!
7934417 Nope, this is my idea, and your idea is not even my idea. You'll find out when I have energy to post the next chapter.
7946290 fine but plz do have velvet be her biological mother as well as Luna and Moonie too many people go the adopted route to make it easier to work with but I believe you can make velvet be her biological mother as well if you work at it
7947079 Trust me. This will be a unique twist to Twilight's origins. I just need to wait til I get a good break from work to hash out some new chapters for a lot of my stories.
7947097 cool i have been looking for something unique with the idea
Question: Update?
I'd love to see an update for this, or have you abandoned it.