Follow the life of Nitpick Bittersweet, a whinny, insensitive, reckless and prideful teenager that over-thinks life with poetic nonsense. Along the way, he'll forge new allies, rekindle with old friends, and create new enemies. With each mistake he makes, a new problem arises for him. With each lesson learned, he becomes a better person... but will it be too late when all is said and done?
This is his story... and it's not a very good one.
Notes:
-Each chapter has a different story telling method. Some are from a first person perspective with a certain character in particular and others are from a third person perspective exploring multiple characters at the same time.
-The pacing of this story is slower than a snail. If you are a not a fan of long novels, then don't read unless you want to give it a shot. This is my first fanfic and the first several chapters clearly shows.
-Any constructive comment is welcomed on the comment section.
AHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHa..haha......haha..hm..lol
6638778 I dont know if you are laughing because I made a good chapter or it was so bad that it was good, but thanks for your insight. :)
When everyone yells, no one is...
6638778 Well, you can yell and be sane. It means that you are probably very angry.
It feels like a big clash of ideals and beliefs.... but which ones will prevail?
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The one with the better reason will win! And who that may be? Who knows, it´s still a secret for the time being. Thanks for your comment.
This is just a huge run-on sentence.
Lifestyle is one word
Why is Magic of Friendship in quotes?
Change comma to a period, capitalize the e in everything, change semi-colon into a colon.
Delete space between the last period and capitalize until.
That's all I noticed but hopefully it helps.
He's going to crack sooner or later...
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I appreciate your insights and I have made proper corrections to those points. Now that I am a little more experienced in writting, I completly rewrote the long sentence you mentioned. Thanks for your help
The universe is out to get him now....
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The universe loves to hate him.
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Especially since he's bringing it on himself!
Nitpick partnering with Gilda?
Better go get his grave ready....
Dash got played....
Nope. Not now, and not ever.
There is no peace with you Nitpick...No peace...EVER! XD LOL
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It's karma...
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...Don't you feel sorry for him?
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Ehh..... I'm a little on the fence.
I'd like to feel a little sympathy, but he's kind of bringing this on himself because of his attitude.
So honestly, he's just getting exactly what he deserves right now. I'm just waiting for something in him to crack.
I'd be careful around those three...
6715324 LET ME JUST TELL YOU. I'm Most Confusing mare you will ever see in your life, if you keep making me go mad with these chapters, because I will have different reactions to this story.
I think "hero" may be stretching things a bit....
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I hope I make you mad in the right way and not go in a violent rampage destroying my story XD Anyway, thanks for the comment
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That's why the quotations are there
! Wheter you like my him or hate him, as long as this story is enjoyable to you, then that's good enough for me. The pace is slow so please forgive me if you don't get your wish of him losing his mind anytime soon.
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The story's interesting already, so don't worry.
It'll just be all the sweeter when he finally snaps.
6764173 I was "Mad" meaning going crazy because this Is a Great story...One That I would always like to reread probably when its finish.
Also Keep up the good work!....
THE ACTUAL COMMENT:
Love the background story DANG NITPICK YOU ARE THE MIND FOR REAL LIFE PEOPLE HA!!! :)
Thats right Flutterz! TAke your ground KILL HIM..KILLLLLL HIIMMM AAAAAAARRRGGGGHHH! I Mean LOve You NItpick
...NOT REALLY ASSHOLE 
That picture at the end is so memeable.
I LOVE IT!
Shall we just mark his paper with an F and move on?
Also, he should consider finding another private place, because his usual spot's not very private at this point!
Rainbow Dash: If she can't do it right, she'll just brazen it out. If she can!
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You truly enjoy his suffering... You are evil!
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Thank you! I poured a small portion of my frustrations of my college years in this drawing, Glad to see it gave someone a moment of entertainment.
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I am truly grateful for your comments... but the point of this chapter was for everybody to see how humane is Fluttershy! My readers already know my OC is somewhat...uh, 'special' in dealing with people
You have to wonder whether Nitpick is at fault for all of this or not....
I have to give credit where it's due. This chapter is one of my favorites and Nitpick has the best 'What just happened?!' Faces. Seriously good job on the art.
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It all depends on your morale!
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Great Chapter! Keep up the good work!
Great Chapter! You did great using Big Mac!
Nitpick doesn't seem to strike me as idealistic.
And in a world like this, that's not a good sign....
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Tinted glasses are dangerous when they removed them from someone's eyes. It makes staring at the sun far more painful than usual.
Soon...
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Something tells me that those tinted glasses aren't going to be gently removed.... but ripped right off his eyes.
Should be fun to watch.
I'll be over here digging your grave, Nitpick.
I love the fact that Nitpick just charmed AJ and he didn't even knew it XD.
After all thw books I've read through this is prabably my Favorite like out of all time! you can really see there might be a change in nitpicks heart.. I think it about to grow 3 times as big XD LOL.. I also like the other characters Personal development with their character. great job!
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Evil...
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His nightmare is just getting started! Still need to build momentum...
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Your words of approval make me feel little birds in my stomach.
6799332 Aw..It the truth!
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He should know better than to tempt fate.