A writer of many accounts. I've done writing before so I'm perfectly confident that I can bring wonderful stories to anyone who will take the time to read them.
Meet Lisa, the slender woman. After being sent to Equestria by a weird course of events, well, lets just say there's a new monster in the Everfree. What adventures could possibly unfold as Lisa embraces what she has become? A savior, that looks like a demon.
Hey everyone! I'M WRITING A NEW STORY!!! Reason? Well, you'll find out. I will say that this story will be heavily connected with A Displaced Machine and A Displaced Dragon.
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I loved it, can't wait to see the next chapter
Also, first comment, yay!
interesting story. I will give it a chance despite the common low standard many displaced-stories have these days, due to everyone just writing them without thinking about what they are writing.
You have gotten my attention good sir! Please me by providing another. Seriously good job so far. Plus I am the second.
Oh, goodie. Another fucking LoHAV.
Because there aren't too many of those.
Especially ones that turn them into Slenderman.
Nobody's ever done that one.
6274639, as I've said for others, if you have nothing nice to say, then, unless you can say it in a helpful manner as feedback, don't comment at all. I don't care what others have done. It's my own story, so I don't care if slenderman has been used already. And besides, I don't think Slender Woman has ever been used.
6274689 Dude, if your idea of making a unique character is adding a vagina, that's really kinda sad.
6274698 it's not. I'm just saying, I would prefer if everyone kept to good comments or helpful feed back.
And yet, only a few paragraphs ago:
Something a Slender can barely fend off... A Rake?
while i hoped that she would start a bit more acting sad, or being a bit more mysterious, it is better than your Metal Sonic story.
I hope you don´t end up needing to much time for an update, for every story, i mean i saw it already that someone had started to many storys, and he couldn´t really handle that much.
i haven´t seen all of your Displaced storys, but i think this one could be one of your best, or the best story.
However since you had written "Monster, or Savoior", i kind of expected Twilight, or some of the others to be a bit hostile at first, i don´t expected her to be friends with the main Chars so fast.
Anyway, you managed to make this chapter enjoyable.
You get a thumb up, and if you continue the good job, this maybe can be a favourite story.
I DEMAND MORE!
6274826 Apple Jack thought she was hallucinating, I mean, wouldn't you?
6274848 PM me if you really want to know the answer. I'm not saying yes or no, but if you want to know, PM me.
6274916 One, thank you for the helpful feedback. Two, it wont be too much because of what'll happen later on. Three, one word, betrayal.
6275032 THEN YOU WILL GET MORE!!!
6275085 THANK YOU KIND SIR!
6275090 YOU ARE WELCOME!
6275109 VERY WELL THEN!
6275082 .
i am very curious what this has to do with everything, but i guess i undestand it if i see it, i don´t want to force you to give me a spoiler for this point.
I am curious about what you are trying to do, i wait and see for now.
I am not good with my english grammar, and i don´t know how good i am with writing a full story, but maybe i try again later, i am kind of curious to try at least a Displaced one.
Does everyone read the writers guide? I mean how much is really necessary?, i think last time i tried, i was a bit overhelmed by the different informations, since english is just a second language for me.
I learn very easily about english, and i have much fantasy, but i am not sure about my grammar, i guess a proofreader, and an editor will help.
If i start to write to, i guess i only try one story at first, since i don´t think i can only focuse on writing if i have to many.
I just get really hyped again, since i started to really like Satsuki Kiryūin from kill la kill.
Do you know the feeling if you see a character that you don´t like at first, but after a few scenes, and a bit thinking you start to like it suddenly? Well if i finish the anime, maybe Manga an understand enough i probably try to write a story, but i don´t promise anything, i just need to get motivated enough.
6275122 I totally get that feeling. Thanks again for the helpful feedback!
more plz
6275498 nope, you'll only get it if you read my other two displaced stories because they first meet him/her there.
"I have powerful friends,"
I get that reference...if it's a reference at all.
6275524 NOPE!
slender-woman. havnt hard of that one before.
more please!
Zalgo? One of Zalgo's proxies? One of Slenderman's proxies? Some other creepypasta I don't know about?
6275856 Rule 63: "For any given male character, there is a female version of that character."
6276005 Just wait and see. Clue: It's one of my OCs
6276018 ...I may have forgotten about that.
6276025 Hmmm... Do you have a Deviantart account?
6276054 NOPE! Well, I do but there's nothing on it. Why?
6276084 Darnit. I could've used it to figure out which OC the mystery OC is!
6276126
i can´t decide if she should do it that often, it is kind of personal after all.
Soooo it maybe would have been nice if they would actually have to take care of her, and the healing would not happen so fast, but i don´t care enough right now, so nice chapter.
You seems to like to make your character invincible in a certain way, probably should be carefull with that, this time it is the fast healing factor, it could even help him in a fight if he is hiding long enough to activate it, since it seems to work pretty fast.
Mostly i just would have liked a nice scene in which they have to help her.
I've been waiting so long for something like this thank you
6276740 they will take care of her while she unconscious. The healing takes much longer to heal her innards, it can just do her skin fast to stop bleeding. Also, it only starts healing her once she is safe, so she can easily die.
6276823 you're very welcome.
a rake a mother f***ing rake?!
6277321 the agents that the merchant sends against my displaced have to been from their genera or world. A rake just seemed to be a good match.
6277328
G man make it happen
Now we just need a Bunyip to be living in the swamp.
Hmm, didn´t know Rakes could talk. All I remember is Steam trying its hardest to sell me a crappy game where you are a cryptozoologist trying to find a Rake.
As for who the mysterious friend is, my money is on Alduin.
6277490
Ah hell no! Ever since that one film from my childhood were a Bunyip (which you never saw, just heard by the way) chased a couple o´kiddies through the Outback, I am deadly affraid of those beasties.
6277520 I suggested it BECAUSE I'm an Aussie.
But if you won't have one of them, how abut a Yowie?
Basically the Australian version of a yeti or Big-foot, but much more aggressive.
If it's a displaced too, at some point it could shout, "I'm not a bloody sasquatch! I'm a Yowie, you mug!"
6277532
Ah, okay.
Hehe, that sounds hillarious in fact. Dammit, why to other countries allways have cooler Cryptids than us?
Oh, this is gonna be good.
6277664 Well, ours are cooler because we have that many fewer.
I like this, MORE!!! Also, for a moment I thought that that thing was a Wendigo