Applejack's petrified about an operation her sister has tomorrow. Good thing Rainbow Dash has a deck of cards and time to spare. But will that be enough to save the farmpony from her worries?
A short story where I challenged myself to write two characters interacting without them ever saying a word.
Contains AppleDash.
It's rare that I read author-challenge fics, mostly because they end up being bad-quality because of the challenge set, which IMO means that author has failed. However, this story not only pulls the no-speech thing out of the bag, it does so without their mute behaviour seeming out of place, and it still has quality rivalling that of the
hall of shamefeature box.Now I want to write a fic without speech Where's my ice cream?
6144795 It's a fair gripe to have. The increase in difficulty due to a challenge means that less authors are going to be able to make it work.
It won't stop me from trying, but logic is logic.
Personally, though, I love challenges. It's rare I get the same level of satisfaction from something I didn't push myself on than something that I had to work hard to make work. No pain, no gain, I guess.
6144807 Next you'll be writing a story starring a red/black alicorn OC, but that people actually want to read.
... I just jinxed that, didn't I?
6144824 Nah, I'll probably never do that one. Everybody tries to do that one.
I was challenged by a guy once to do a romance where none of the characters ever meet or know who they are. I even had an idea for it, actually, but I have other projects that demand my attention in the meanwhile.
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First I was confused... then when I worked it out, I realised this is actually genius. Maybe someone with more free time would try and write that fanfic...
6145095 Heck, if you want to try it out, go ahead. If I ever get around to it, we can compare notes.
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That'd be my part, thanks. I mean, you've seen that Avatar ? It's so edgy !
This was good, really good. I was a little skeptical of how well it would work with absolutely zero dialogue, but you really captured the essence of both of them without either one speaking, which is quite the impressive feat in my opinion. Really nicely done.
6145342 Cheers. I'm quite happy with how it turned out myself.
Nicely done.
So... What's up with Apple Bloom? Routine surgery? Is it something common, or has Abby got something dangerous like Gigantism?
6146545 Nah, nothing dangerous. She'll be fine, but that doesn't stop Applejack from worrying.
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Getting her hair bow removed.
6147060 I don't blame her for being nervous. After all, that's how Diamond Tiara died IIRC.
6148275 Go ahead. It was pretty tricky, though.
Very nicely done! I'm very impressed with your technique and how you crafted a narrative from a series of actions only. I'm very glad I read this story, even though I generally avoid shipping.
6149440 Thanks a bunch. I'm glad you think it worked well!
Excellent job! Heh... I used to do times challenges and the like. I once participated in a challenge where I was given 2 days to write and edit a story 1000-2000 words long with flowers playing a large part in it. I ended up clocking in at exactly 2000 words XD
6149495 Sweet. This one was something I actually started writing on Friday, believe it or not. I was travelling and had a lot of spare time on the train.
Flowers, huh? What was it about?
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Friday, huh? You a speedy gai XD This is the flower story btw.
I'm not much of a talker myself so I can dig this type of story. You did a great job of keeping the story moving even without dialogue. I feel like this is definitely the kind of relationship these two would have. Not much said but everything understood. Definitely an interesting way to get through a good story.
Nice job
P.S.
What happened to little AB ?
6174633 Just a small operation. Originally I thought it'd be a dentist thing, but I decided more on some other, chest related... thing.
She'll be fine though, don't worry.
The fic was good, but I kept getting pulled out of it by the misuse of Blackjack terms. Every time you said a player folded it seemed like they quit the hand. Because that's what that means. What you should be using is stand not fold.
Fold is actually used more in poker then it is in blackjack.
6235086 Fair enough. I generally only ever play cards with my family, and we use words 'cause... well, we don't know better.
It's an easy fix, though. Just control+f fold, aaand... there.
Thanks a bunch!
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Ayeeeee!
I loved it!
7143533 Cheers! I'm quite happy with this one. Glad you enjoyed it.
Masterfully done.
7564408 Thanks. I'm rather proud of this one.
7564643 As you should be.
11149908 Cheers for the reading! I hope you enjoyed reading and narrating the story!
I guess it must have been a bit of a treat to not have to worry too much about voicing dialogue, right? : )
An oddball ghost happened across your fic and read it. Have a review!
Love this line. :D
How adorable as AJ and Rainbow played cards!