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"Burninating the countryside... burninating the peasants... burninating all the peoples... and their thatched-roof COTTAGES! THATCHED-ROOF COTTAGES!! And the Trogdor comes in the NIIIIGHT!!!"

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On the surface, Derpy Hooves is doing well. She has a comfortable home, a happy daughter, and a steady job.

Below the surface, things aren't adding up. The house needs fixing, Dinky needs sitters, and Derpy's hours are being cut back.

When the one pony who can really get under Derpy's skin pushes her toward a decision she can't make, everything threatens to come crashing to a halt.


Proofread by the redoubtable OnionPie.

Cover art stitched together from here and here and here using Inkscape.

This is my entry for the Outside contest.

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Comments ( 15 )

You're working, even if you income's dropped.

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6037391 Thank you sir/ma'am sir! It's been corrected.

That was a sweet story.

Thanks for your entry to the Outside contest in the group, Contests Of Equestria.

This is the last one I read so the results will be revealed asap

I like this story. It's sweet and deals with a serious issue that many parents face at one time or another when it comes to finances. If the story were to continue from that point on it might be interesting to see how Derpy deals with the continued financial issues, along with other social, medical and parental issues that go beyond the scope of this story.

There is one part where the word foals' is used and I think that you meant foal's because I think she's referring to one foal's interests and not multiple in that sentence. If I'm wrong though just disregard this comment.

Anyway, I liked it. Keep up the good work and I'll keep perusing your stuff!

Oh, and just one question, where do they post about these contests that various writers are entering?

6215083 Thank you! :pinkiehappy:

IMO, the best way to start finding contests is to check Bad Dragon's userpage from time to time. You might also want to join one or more groups dedicated to contests. But any group could start a contest at any time, and Bad Dragon usually updates his userpage with them within a few days.

I am working on doing an dramatic reading of the story of you don't mind

6905186 That sounds awesome, thank you! :pinkiehappy:

I enjoyed this. I really look forward to seeing more from you. :pinkiesmile:

Aww. This was really cute! :twilightsmile:

This certainly was sweet. I confess I have a soft spot for Derpymum stories like these. Of all the personalities "we" have created for her, I think this is my most favourite (certainly is the most consistent; there is a reason why Derpy dominates the "Equestria's Best Mother" tag on derpibooru).

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