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Book one of the De Raptura Chronicles

Ditzy "Derpy" Doo, once a humble mail mare, was elevated to godhood in a last, desperate act by Celestia moments before she and the entire royal family disappeared. Now the newly crowned Princess De Raptura must contend with the machinations of a court completely alien to her, reconcile with her daughter, make peace with Twilight Sparkle and learn how to control the sun.

And she's fairly sure she still has a package to deliver.


The story continues in To See The Light


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"This story differentiates itself from other 'bad things happen to Equestria' stories with its smart character work and realistic, powerful emotion. We need more stories like this." -Pre-reader who likes sky pirates

Short description borrowed stolen from FanOfMostEverything.

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 156 )

Written after a conversation that went a little odd... I'm fully prepared for this to be seen as many things and I won't complain if nobody likes it. I just had to write it otherwise the damn thing would have haunted my head forever.

I feel better now.

Wow....This is freaking amazing in my opinion, execution of it could have been alil more smooth but other than that it is perfect:derpytongue2:dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Derpy_Hooves.png :heart:

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No fear about not liking it. I do. (Also, GO, TEAM VENTURE!!!!)

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My execution could always be better. I'm glad you liked it. :pinkiehappy:

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yes! Go team veeennture! /Dr Orpheus

Great idea, average execution. It wholeheartedly deserves its favorite, though. :twilightsmile:

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Only average? :pinkiegasp: oh gosh, I'm worse than terrible. I'm... Middling! Mediocre! Pedestrian!

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No no, not at all. Average compared to, say Stephan King, but still pretty amazing compared to, say, me.

This... this was brilliant. You are a very talented writer, friend. Much props to you.

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That can't be right, I've read you. You're nifty.

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You're nifty-er, then.

I really enjoyed this, as a thought experiment if nothing else. And, yeah, editing stuff, but I just don't give a damn.
I just told a friend last night how I thought immortality was the cruelest of curses, and the fact that the Princesses were capable of dealing with it in good spirits was testament enough to the fictional nature of Equestria. Given the immortality, I am a bit interested to know why Luna and Celestia died, but if I had to guess, I'd say the strain and heartbreak of living over hundreds and hundreds of generations finally caught up to them. Frankly, I don't think Derpy deserves that kind of pain, but with her good heart, she may just be the only one who can take it.
I'm really starting to like these short fics that explore a single theme. If I could add anything, it would probably be a short coda at the end showing how she has to simply go on in the face of her personal grief, because the world depends on her, but that might actually give a little too much of a hopeless vibe.

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One question, when you wrote "And her light went out" does that mean she died?:fluttercry:

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Derpy didn't die. She just wishes she had.

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I wanted to leave the story as open as possible this time. Normally when I write I fall into the tempting trap of trying to explain every last thing that happened before and after the point I'm focussed on, which leads to unfinished epics. I could have written the entire story of [strike]Derpy's[/strike] De Raptura's reign from end to end, but I think it would have taken away the impact of this single moment.

Course I might still do it anyway... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Derpy_Hooves.png

Lets say Derpy has a great heart. She'll overcome. :derpytongue2:

1186990 Wow...:fluttercry: that's so sad...still an excellent story...

Ditzy (or Derpy) is princess?

I love the idea! I am looking forward to future chapters. :twilightsmile:

Write on!

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I hadn't planned future chapters just yet, but if you think it has potential then maybe I should do something. :pinkiehappy:

I most definitely think that the story can be expanded upon.

The reason is that the world you set up is unique. While it seems like it could be a tragic, I can see a sequel delving into the mind of the new and hopeful queen of Equestria.

So I was convinced to add more to this by, lets say, circumstance. There's no firm update schedule. No firm order of the story. Nothing firm at all, in fact... but it's nice to have something to dip in and out of while I write my daft and overlong epics.

More light-hearted stuff will follow.

Well....This has gotta bite for Twilight. Not only have her beloved older brother, beloved foalsitter and beloved mentor vanished for reasons that she'll never know:pinkiegasp::fluttershysad:, she's gotta teach the last pony she expected to take the job:derpyderp2::derpytongue2::derpyderp1: to be Princess because she wasn't were she was supposed to be. No wonder Amethyst Star is peeved right now.

I have to see the next Day and the Days after that.

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Heh, my bad. I had thought, when I first read it, that it was an incomplete story. :twilightblush:

I was surprised that the update came out so fast! Not a problem, though. :twilightsmile:

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It was! But the more I thought about it, the more ideas I started getting, and now it's just sort of ballooning in my head. C'est la vie eh? :twilightsheepish:

I must watch out for spelling mistakes though.

A little more delicious backstory. EpicGuy likey.

This, in all honesty, was very nice though. I personally didn't spot any mistakes. :derpytongue2:

Hmmm....it looks like it's going to take a longish while for everypony to get used to all of this....and longer still for Sparkler to stop hating Twilight.

I definitely approve of this story. I also approve of the (unintentional, maybe?) Snagglepuss reference at the very beginning of the story.

Chaos. Pandemonium, even!

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this... this is brilliant. please update again soon. I'm really enjoying this!

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My ego thanks you. :raritywink:

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There's the horn of the dilemma. Twilight can't do right for doing wrong in this situation, but I'll say no more because it'll be a spoiler, and I've not written it yet. :derpytongue2:

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I look forward to seeing said dilemma's solution.

Neither the princess nor the former student seem to be able to catch a break.

Hopefully, a balance can be found and peace can be shared.

This is getting good! I feel sorry for Twilight, though. She can't seem to get past Sparkler without earning a slap to the jaw. :twilightoops:

Just for the record, Ditzy's bits are meant to be a little confused. She's really not thinking straight. At all.

Also I'm seriously writing this pretty much as I go right now. I've never written this way before and it may result in a sudden crashing plot collapse. :pinkiegasp:

But I hope not.

And I probably won't be updating quite so fast after this...

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I should say that she isn't; apotheosis tends to do a number on the pony/person suffering from it.

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Oh well, I accidentally unpublished one of the chapters, so since you're all expecting to see something new, here's something new.

Oh, my. This is going to be rather uncomfortable for Blueblood. Ah, well. At least Sparkler and Dinky will be well taken care of.

this story is interesting. was there a story before this that went into derpy's backstory

1338004 another great update!

1339821 Thank you very much :pinkiehappy:

1339835 no problem Dr. V *erutneV maet oG*

Wow. You seem to have a keen understanding of the sort of ramblings that go on in the Pit. I need to refresh myself on this subject. :twilightblush:

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IIRC, he's vanished off to wherever the rest of the Royal House vanished to.

Is good heartfelt story.

...That having been said:

Large package, wouldn’t fit in mailbox. Left behind horizon. Will try again tomorrow.

XD I have to stop drinking things when I read Stories with Derpy in them. They will be the death of me when I come across lines like that...

1500198 She'll always be a mail mare to meeeeee :derpytongue2:

Did any of these arcane geniuses think to just tell Dinky what happened?

Yea a new chapter, I hope to see another one soon

Hmmmm......I think that they don't know what they're in for with De Raptura.

...Holy BUCK!
Derpy as an ali?!
...:trollestia: Celes-I mean, :derpytongue2: Derp-
...Aw, crap...
(TOTALLY a read later!!!:twilightsmile:)

The apotheosis of best pony? Yes please.

I'm loving this story. Interpersonal tensions, the political maneuvering, the way Ditzy De Raptura is altering Canterlot politics like a cinderblock thrown through a stained glass window... what's not to like?

And the God Tier Derp was just icing on the cake. Let's just hope the new princess doesn't do something similar on a cosmic scale... :twilightsheepish:

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