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King of Madness


Life may be limited, but Love is eternal.

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Derpy is a devoted mother to her kids, Sparkler and Dinky. She loves them with all her heart and would do anything for them. However, there are many things that she has kept from Dinky. Many lies that she has fed her little muffin.

When Derpy learns that her parents are coming to visit, she decides it's time Dinky knew the truth.

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Well, I would put Derpy's parents into jail for that! Derpy makes a good mother for Dinky, I always believed in that. The little unicorn is my favorite filly.

The pony had his child with him, a little white unicorn filly with funny hair that was rocking out to her dad's music

That filly can only be Vinyl Scratch.

This isn't the first time I've read fics where the eldest sibling becomes the parent to the younger siblings. I can't believe Derpy's parents are named Self Serve and Self Love and they seem to be on the same level as Spoiled Bitch. I know something's wrong with Derpy when her eyes focus, dilate and underp themselves. This is also the first time I've seen Derpy make a physical beatdown on a pony, especially since those unlucky ponies are the shmucks that call themselves her "parents".

8082967 I always figured that Derpy was actually Dinky's big sister since she's the same age as Rarity and Dinky is only a little younger than Sweetie Belle. And Sparkler made the mom thing even more confusing. This is my take on the whole thing.

Self Serve and Self Love are kinda the polar opposite of Spoiled Rich. Spoiled Rich wants to control Diamond Tiara's life and live her own life through her. Self Serve and Self Love are hedonists that only care about their own lives and never wanted their daughters to be in it (until Derpy did something that could help them climb the social ladder).

Completely different. Equally bad.

8083218 Oh. What's the point of rich people having kids again?

8083223 Self Serve and Self Love aren't even that rich. They just like to pretend that they are.

8083240 I say that Self Love and Self Serve are on the same level as Spoiled Bitch only for the reason that they want to climb the social ladder. I'd hafta say that being among nobility is not worth it, because Fancy's new money and Twilight's parents might be retired civil servants or something along those lines.

The mare pushed a fucking building back into place. She destroys buildings with her butt ALONE.

Who the FUCK thought it was a good idea to piss her off?

8084915 Well, Self Serve and Self Love ARE idiots, so...

I personally prefer Derpy being Sparkler's and Dinky's mother, but this was certainly an interesting take on their relationship.
And I mean that in a good way.

8087778 Derpy IS their mother. She may not of gave birth to them, but she's still their mother.

Hay, that was the message of the story. Were you even paying attention? :ajbemused:

Oh, well. Glad you enjoyed the story, and thanks for the favorite. :twilightsmile:

8087862 I meant "birth mother".
Probably should have made that clear, oops. :twilightblush:

8087875 Well, as I explained in another comment, it just made more sense to me for her to be their big sister.

8087882 And that's a fair interpretation of their relationship that I've seen before.

8087885 Interestingly, I have never seen this interpretation anywhere else. Perhaps, I didn't look hard enough. :unsuresweetie:

Well, in any case, you have your headcanon and I have mine.

8087896 Well, this IS the only story I've seen where Derpy's the one to have raised the three of them.
There are stories where the three of them are sisters, though.

8087906 Well, in other stories, they didn't have Self Serve and Self Love as (not)parents.

Fun fact: I was legit filled with anger when I was writing their parts in the story. :twilightangry2:

8087915 Makes sense.

I LOVE IT! BEST. STORY. EEEEVVVVEEEERRRRRRR!!!!!!!



aside from all ur other ones, they are also the best stories ever.

:derpytongue2:

8090935 :twilightblush: ...You are too much, my friend. Thank you SO very much! :pinkiehappy:

if I could like a story more than once, You would get 1000 likes for each story. from me ALONE! and then there's all the others who like it as well. so basically. U. Do. GREAT. STORIES! And I should know since my mum was an author once. unfortunately Self-Publishing authors don't get much...so she moved on to Conventions but ANYWAY! Enough about that, basically. U. Do. The. Best. Stories. Ever.

8091167 ... You are gonna make me cry, sister. :fluttercry:

I loved this story. It had a few spelling mistakes, and it felt that Derpy told Dinky she wasn't her mother too quickly. A bit of expansion on that part would be nice. But besides for that, the story flowed wonderfully. Went at a good pace, and gave emotion. Very heartwarming indeed. :heart:

8193489 Wait... There's still spelling mistakes?! But-But I-I-I checked over the fic multiple times! How did miss them?! :facehoof:

Anyway, if the reveal that Derpy isn't Dinky's birth mother went too quickly, it's because of two things:

1. I can only write fast-paced stories.

2. Derpy was in a situation where she had to tell the truth as quickly as possible.

Anyway, glad you liked it. :twilightsmile:

I know what it's like to read through a story so carefully, so many times, yet still find out there are mistakes. :twilightsheepish: There was even this one story I read, it had a proofreader and three good editors, yet a mistake still passed through. :derpytongue2:

But I now understand why the reveal was so quickly. You see, yesterday I didn't notice how they were coming in a few hours. I was exhausted, alright? :derpytongue2: I couldn't type BBCode, that's how tired I was. Now it makes sense why it came so quickly. Moves is farther up my list of top stories. Onto my user page is goes~


"...Oh, right." Derpy rubbed the back of her head. "Sometimes I forget how super smart you are. But the thing is... I'm not yourmom either."

Derpy sighed. "According to the letter, they should be here in a few hours. Why don't you and Dinky go see if Doctor Whooves needs any help with his gismos and stuff."

"Their our parents-"

"That is there names?" Self Serve asked.

8194464 Alright, the spelling mistakes are now fixed and, hopefully, that will be the last of it.

I'm glad you love it so much. :twilightsmile: Though, I check your user page and I didn't see it. I'm curious as to where it places...... Oh, by the way,

Moves is farther up my list of top stories. Onto my user page is goes~

'it', not 'is'. :trollestia:

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I don't check what the spell checker does if I just woke up. :rainbowwild: And I didn't have the time to add it since I was just, *ahem* brutally forced to go out into the boiling heat to go to the store. Some people *cough* siblings *cough* don't realize that while I may be the weird one, I don't want to go out into that heat. :facehoof: Anyways, I added your story to the list now, and it comes at #11. :yay:

8194695 Hmm, just under the top ten. I'd say that's pretty good! :pinkiehappy:

Huh... Judging from your favorites list, you seem to be into... a wide variety of stories. On one line, you have My Little Dashie, a heartwarming masterpiece about a man and his adoptive daughter that can make even the stoniest of men shed tears. And on another line, you have A Puppet to Her Fame, a big pile of senseless, depression-causing cruelty for the sake of senseless, depression-causing cruelty.

......Yep. Quite the variety.

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Yeah, I'm into quite a lot of stuff. Mostly heartwarming or depressing stories though. :derpytongue2: And now that I look at it, the order of some stories is completly wrong.... I thought I put MLD waaaayyy higher up. I'll have to get to reorganizing that later.

8194732 I fail to see why anyone would want to read, let alone write, something as cruel and depressing as A Puppet to Her Fame... But I'll be talking about that in a blog I'm going to write in a few minutes. :raritywink:

8194744
I'll be there for it. :yay:

8194749 Alright, it's ready. It's on my user page.

Alright so this is the story that you said was your proudest work and you wanted me to check it out.

Even though i think it's rather short. I can see why this would be among your best, a one-shot where Derpy becomes Supermare(metaphorically) for a moment and is forced to confront the demons of her past.

I'd say you handled the concept well, all things considered. A heartwarming short of an unconventional family.

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Apparently, the biggest flaw of my writing in general is how short my material is. :applejackunsure: It's not something I can help, you know. The length always depends on how much my brain gives and just doesn't give a lot. I ain't no Alex Warlorn, okay! The only long thing I've written is Saving the Siren; by some miracle, I've managed to keep each and every chapter above 2000 words and 3000 words. Hay, one of them is over 4000 words.

Besides, I like reading things that are short and to the point anyway, no doubt because of my concentration issues. It makes sense that I would write stories to appeal to myself.

But anyway, glad you liked it. :twilightsmile:

It is indeed one of my best works and I like how you described it.

I can see why this would be among your best, a one-shot where Derpy becomes Supermare(metaphorically) for a moment and is forced to confront the demons of her past.

Ironically, she confronts said demons (Self Serve and Self Love) in a physical sense rather than mental. :twilightsheepish:

8257443
Yeah, I'll admit that whenever i write. It tends to be rather short.

Can we have a torture fanfic involving those parents? I would like that very much :pinkiecrazy:

8300537
I'm not one for torture porns... But I think I can work something out here. :ajsmug:

8300545
That would be most excellent :moustache:

8300551
It probably won't be a Cupcakes-torture thing though. It'll be more of a 'Conga-line-of-extreme-bad-luck' type of torture.

8300557
That is fine by me. Thats more funny anyways :raritywink:

"It says that yesterday, Derpy saved a mare and her child from a burning building! And then, she stopped the building from falling on a bunch of ponies by pushing it back in place!" Fluttershy smiled sadly. "I wish I could be that brave."

...Fluttershy, dear, you talked down a flipping dragon. :facehoof:

"...Oh, right." Derpy rubbed the back of her head. "Sometimes I forget how super smart you are. But the thing is... I'm not your mom either."

Dinky's eyes widened. "What?!"

You and me both, Dinky. :rainbowderp:

"We cannot afford to have three kids under our roof, darling." The stallion told his wife.

"I am well aware of that, darling." The mare retorted. "I simply wasn't expecting this one to survive."

"Well, if you had not forgotten to take the pill... Oh, well. It does not matter now. We need to figure out how to get these kids out of our lives. They are costing us way too much money."

Wow. Yeah, totally say this type of crap RIGHT in front of your kids. They'll totally not repeat this to anyone, Sparkler in particular. Surprised social services didn't take care of them. :ajbemused:

Derpy and Sparkler watched as their parents drove off. They had left them in a little town called Ponyville. Derpy handed Dinky to Sparkler and set out to look for another job.

Derpy: :ajbemused:

Sparkler:...maybe I went a little too far? :rainbowderp:

Derpy: :facehoof:

"Oh, wait! I know! You sent them off and started taking care of yourself!" Self Serve stated as if it was obvious. "Ha ha! That's my girl!"

...sweet Celestia, how do these ponies function?!

Also, Self Serve? Self Love? Who the buck named those two?! No wonder they're such idiotic schmucks, their parents are probably the real problem here!

Fluttershy sat next to Derpy and put a wing around her. "I know what it's like to have a family member whose nothing but trouble."

Derpy gave Fluttershy a surprised look. "You do?"

"Yeah. My brother, Zephyr. But he was never as bad as those two."

I really, really, REALLY wanna say that Fluttershy is wrong here, but...ugh...yeah. At least HE grew and learned his lesson, I'll give him that much.

Anyways, this was a very sweet story all in all. :twilightsmile: Though I kinda wished this was a story of redemption for Derpy's parents, especially since I saw their reactions to Derpy's heroics coming, I understand that not all characters should be redeemed. But the real twist comes with the fact of everyone's relations in this whole thing; I've never seen a setting like that before...and yet that is also very adorable and sweet and I LOVE IT! KUDOS! :pinkiehappy:

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...Fluttershy, dear, you talked down a flipping dragon. :facehoof:

Fluttershy has the same problem Derpy has; nether of them think much of the heroic things they do. It's part of their charm.

You and me both, Dinky. :rainbowderp:

Well, as I mentioned in previous comments, it just made more sense to me for Derpy to be their sister. It's what brings the story together.

Wow. Yeah, totally say this type of crap RIGHT in front of your kids. They'll totally not repeat this to anyone, Sparkler in particular. Surprised social services didn't take care of them. :ajbemused:

Hedonism + Stupidity + Lack of Empathy = Self Love and Self Serve.

Derpy: :ajbemused:

Sparkler:...too much? :rainbowderp:

Derpy: :facehoof:

Well, they were gonna kick them out anyway. Sparkler just gave them an idea of how to do it. :applejackunsure:

...sweet Celestia, how do these ponies function?!

Also, Self Serve? Self Love? Who the buck named those two?! No wonder they're such idiotic schmucks, their parents are probably the real problem here!

I don't know how pony naming works in universe, I just named them that cause it fit. Maybe their parents wanted them to be confident or something? :applejackconfused:

I really, really, REALLY wanna say that Fluttershy is wrong here, but...ugh...yeah. At least HE grew and learned his lesson, I'll give him that much.

He also never recklessly endangered infants.

Anyways, this was a very sweet story all in all. :twilightsmile: Though I kinda wished this was a story of redemption for Derpy's parents, especially since I saw their reactions to Derpy's heroics coming, I understand that not all characters should be redeemed. But the real twist comes with the fact of everyone's relations in this whole thing; I've never seen a setting like that before...and yet that is also very adorable and sweet and I LOVE IT! KUDOS! :pinkiehappy:

Redemption? Self Serve and Self Love just wanted to use Derpy's heroics to climb the social ladder. They never actually gave a crap about her, if that's what you were thinking. And they are not Derpy's, anyone's, parents; Derpy was her own parent just as Sparkler said.

Anyway, glad you loved it. :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by King of Madness deleted Oct 31st, 2017

Nice little story. Is it wrong that I wanna get Discord involved to 'deal' with their parents? :rainbowlaugh:

Also always thought that Derpy is either a sister or cousin or maybe she adopted both Dinky and Sparkler, but not that she is their birth-mother, just makes no sense from the age difference :derpytongue2:

8350464
That's not wrong at all. :raritywink:

And yes, Derpy being their birth mother never made sense, which is why I made her their sister instead.

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