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Wilmont, New York: A city torn by rough economic times, a high crime rate driven by anarchist gangs, and a newly elected mayor that seems to revel in stirring the pot of chaos.

This is the story about six seventeen-year old bronies: Carl, Ryan, James, Alex, Pete and Louis, and our six favorite cartoon ponies, who must work together to save this city from Discord.

Also the cover image is not made by me, I got it from the following source:
http://xthespot.blogspot.com/2011/06/behind-one-side-of-riot-mask.html

*******NOTE: This story is the edited version of what I posted onto this site before. I already posted it on this site a while ago and am now in the process of editing the story into shorter chapters (As well as improving the writing overall), which I will upload as I finish editing them.**************************

Chapters (22)
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Comments ( 267 )

Don't worry I really LOVE this!

1.A slight idea could you gave more of how the MEOH(males element of harmony) view the other ponies not just part of the mane six but outside as well?

2.Curies about Lisa and Annie's favorite character.

3.Maybe on one part Discord puts on a mean trick and puts Carl into a dream when he wakes up and finds out the entire story with him meeting the Mane Six and finding out about the MEOH where a dream. Which it was not but that was the hole point of Discard's plane.

Oh and James' nothing is wrong with having a crush on a fiction character well I don't fall in love as much as others I do get fiction crushes every now and then.

Hey Man
It's great your writing your first novel, I commend you on this.
Just be mindful though that there's already a published novel titled The Wilmont Chronicles.
I guess my advice is checkout it's website at www.thewilmontchronicles.com, to ascertain your story is going to be different from this.

All the best
Gelfling

517001

Oh wow, haha. I didn't even know about that. I probably should just change the name to "Wilmont" then, or "The Human Elements".

And it is different from what I saw. If you want to check, I have a few more chapters on fanfiction. The only similarity is that it involves teenagers.

Yeah thanks for letting me know about that. I appreciate it.

MOAR MOAR write MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Tennessee like a god damn boss that is were i live born and raised

MOAR MOAR KEEP WRITING MOAR

manly tears were shed manly tears were shed here :fluttercry: :raritycry:

597839

:rainbowderp: Wow that's a lot of reviews haha.

Glad to see you're liking it so far. Thanks for the reviews :pinkiehappy:

oh shit run for the hills and dont look back

641983

Oh there will be more soon, lol.

MOAR MOAR MOAR I NEED MOAR

Well...I was depressed. Impossible not to especially with a chapter like this,but...

Man,you're good. A lot of fics have things all smoothly sailing for them,but dude,here you've taken the readers' emotions for a roller coaster ride,just like Coal Buck's 'My Second Life' and a couple of others which I'm tracking (And I don't anyhow track stories,only good ones,and I'm tracking yours).

Keep those chapters coming mate.

ok i like this story and im been sticking with you through the darkness just like i did with J.K and Harry...but:trixieshiftright:......please tell me that this is the start of the upturn of the story???!?!?!?!?!

651780

thanks for the comment man, glad your liking it. :pinkiehappy:
And actually I do owe "My Second Life" for some inspiration in writing this, it was a very good story.

652624

don't worry, it does get less depressing. Eventually depressing will be replaced by action.
Yeah I can't write overly depressing things for too long without some sort of optimistic turn down the line.

ok good that all i needed :pinkiehappy:

well all i have to say is ( clears throat ) MOAR MOAR DAMN IT MOAR!!!!!

655656

I love your enthusiasm :rainbowlaugh:

655702 also i love how you mentioned TN in it so HELLZ YA TENNESSEE FOR LIFE

so this deserves a song by one of my friends

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UFXVLWpvGk8

ok we are officially now getting there keep it up:ajsmug:....
....but i do have to correct you on one thing....

GO COWBOYS!!!!!!!!

What the...dude you also visit those RP FB pages? LOL ME TOO!!! ...err...brohoof mate? :pinkiehappy:

657624

Could be worse, you could be an Eagles fan. :rainbowlaugh:

658195

/) brohoof lol :twilightsmile:

...or more worse a raiders fan:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

659762

I live in an area surrounded by Bills fans so.....yeah :rainbowlaugh:

And this would be the end of the second act if this story were broken up into three acts.

Now there will be more action, which should be more interesting to read.

Hope you're enjoying the story so far, and please let me know what you think.

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

And, as usual...Go Giants!! Go Rainbow Dash!!

im getting excited!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

A suggestion: Mate you should seriously re-read it twice. Check for errors. I spotted one or two.

667628

Yeah my bad man, sorry. I'm probably going to go back and edit past chapters to make them sound better. Thanks for the heads up.

Also just a heads up I will be editing past chapters to make the writing flow better because I'm looking back and...yeah improvements should be made.

Just a heads up. Thanks for reading so far. :pinkiehappy:

I found a rather...curious mistake in the story. I'm sorry I can't point it out cos I'm using my phone here,but I think you should be able to see it. And the elements...stolen? AW HELL NAW:flutterrage:

very good sir keep it up:ajsmug::ajsmug:

FOOTBALL TALK FTW

WOOOOOOOOOOOOOO:pinkiegasp:HOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO


great fic btw

theres 1 thing i dont like about this

680873

Unfortunately. But perhaps someday.

Thanks for the compliment :pinkiehappy:

I hope that I did manage to fill in some gaps from earlier with Carl's questions and Twilight's answers.

And I also would like to thank this source: (http://mlpforums.com/topic/5928-teleportation/) for giving me ideas on the theories of teleportation that could be used, as it is never explained in the show (that I know of)

Anyway, please let me know what you think, and give me a heads up if there are any errors. Thank you :pinkiehappy:

SO. F@%KING. EPIC. I WANT SOME F#&KING MOAR!!! :flutterrage: Btw,good depiction. Poor girls...

Aww yeah another chapter. :rainbowdetermined2: honestly one of my favorite stories to read currently. Can't wait for more chapters to come. :eeyup:

why is zis not on equestria daily?:rainbowhuh:

mein goodness

706511

I don't think they'd accept it since it has humans (who are bronies) in it meeting the mane six. Besides, I wanted to see how popular it would get here on fimfiction first.

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