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Metroid Prime


Currently doing: Denial of Cosmos/Pruning Lostbelts.

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Based on the Transformers Prime: Rage of the Dinobots comics and Fall of cybertron


Arc 1 summery (chapters 1-5)

After helping all the remaining Autobots escape Cybertron, the Dinobots are the last Autobots on their home planet, they must leave but when they do so an accident puts them in stasis for thousands of years, motionless until a cretin sonic rainboom wakes Grimlock up. Now the Autobots must learn to survive on this new world. however the Decepticons soon arrive and start to make problems for the ponies while keeping their existence a secret.

Arc 2 summery (chapters 6-11)
The cybertronians are no longer a secret, now they must locate the fabled Allspark, the source of all cybertronian life while battling a new enemy, Thunderwing who has a mysterious agenda of his own.

Arc 3 Summery (chapters 11-20)

Unicron has awakened, and the Autobots and ponies must work together if they have a chance of defeating him, will they succeed, or fail? The final chapters in this mind blowing story will end in a way it began.

Wiki page for this story right here.

Chapters (20)
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Comments ( 116 )

after 3 weeks of writing i have final posted chapter 1 the others will come soon:ajsleepy::ajsleepy::derpyderp1::derpyderp2::derpytongue2::moustache:

Comment posted by Metroid Prime deleted Jan 16th, 2013

Dude, I like the story, but you REALLY need to get an Editor and some proofreaders. It would make the story 20% more awsome.

Apart from a few grammar errors the story is good so far, I like the idea of Grimlock becoming a prime. Can't wait for more.

Sorry about the errors I'm new at this

I didn't know Metroplex could transform into a ship! :pinkiegasp: And now he's on Equestria! :rainbowkiss: Awesome!

Amalgamous Prime......interesting..... :pinkiehappy:

Metroplex could transform when the dinobots gave him a blueprint for a ship and he is gonna break out later by the way guess who Amalgamous Prime is a member of?

YAY another update, will read later me tired :ajsleepy:

Still pretty choppy, you should get a (or better) editor.

Did Shockwave just go to Skylanders or whatever it is called?

yes:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:and i can bet you can guess what he did to them

my next chapter will be longer than the others SPOILER: someplace is gonna get blown sky high in that chapter

Here come the Autobots!!! :pinkiegasp:


Yes the tide of the war is turning!!!:rainbowkiss:1535053

My story is no longer on hiatus! Starting soon look for new rewritten versions of chapters 5 and 6 which will feature a more darker tone of cybertronian action this new direction will forever change the fate of equestria the ponies Twilight and the ponies and most importantly unlock Gromlocks true potential and achieve his ultimate destiny:pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss:

I see a lot of mistakes and typos. You also need to add some more detail, like a lot more detail.

1595468aren't you the guy who wrote the Elements of Nature trilogy?:rainbowhuh:

Okay... grammar really needs a heck of a lot of work. Most of the sentences are missing capitals or punctuation marks.

The other issues I can see in this... Metroplex sacrificed himself to give the Arc enough energy to launch and he turns into a city not a ship. If you want an Autobot big enough to carry the others and able to take a spaceship as an alt form, try Omega Supreme, but make sure you give some reason for his resurrection given if this is following the Transformers Cybertron games that came out recently, Megatron and a few others pretty much corrupted and/or killed Omega.

1644498 okay this is fan fiction so we can write what ever we want, in other means JDPrime resurrected both omega and Metroplex in his story, and second metroplex is a cybertronian so like all transformers he can scan an alt mode in this case a spaceship, I put Sigma Supreme into the story becuase omega is in statis, finally metroplex will play a roll in getting the autobots of equestria, and i made him the support of canterlot city so that both worlds will be more intertwined woth another:ajsmug:

You killed ponies, you destroyed the crystal heart, and now freaking Sigma Supreme is here?! :pinkiegasp:
What the fuck?! :pinkiecrazy: :rainbowderp:

You know how decepticons are besides I've been wanting to destroy that crystal empire since the day it was reveled
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I really loved how you had Grimlock and Thunderwing fight in Ponyville, really let all the ponies see the mighty Dinobot for the first time! :pinkiehappy:
I'm still pretty sad that you killed off Fluttershy's animals just like that :fluttercry: Fluttershy will kill Grimlock for that. :flutterrage:
In other ideals, did I just see Rainbow Dash steal the line from MY Transformer story into yours? :trixieshiftright:
I got no problem with that. :twilightsmile:
Keep up the good work! :coolphoto:

2006028i wouldn't say steal more like inspired me besides how else would rainbow das react to something unusual falling from the sky

I'm surprised all of Equestria wasn't put on full alert after Grimlock's arrival to Ponyville. But it's still a good story. :twilightsmile:

GRIMLOCKE LIKE CHALLENGE!

-Grimlocke, the Dinobot everyone wanted for Christmas/Chanukah.

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"Kthxbai"

K-Thx-Bai

'Kay-Thanks-Bye

Okay-Thank You-Good Bye

I meant it in jest. :3

AWSOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
btw: im kinda a fast reader :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy:

Was that...the allspark?:pinkiegasp:

holy primus the allspark ho great that means that megs hasto be comming soon and great chapter by the way :pinkiegasp:

Unicron created Equestria? :derpyderp1:

Epic. :yay:

2097487 technically the planet is called Arion, Equestria is just a country but he did create the ponies, he just failed to watch over them.

"Ha, that trick only work with G1 Optimus"

"What?" Scattershot said


:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:
It make me Laugh a minuates!

"And do you #@$%ing ponies think we give a @#$%!" Brawl said"
Damn Brawl you scary! :rainbowderp:
Also I really hoped you would explain things instead of using SO many youtube videos in your story.

2135171sorry I was up late writing this. A YouTube video was faster . I'll try to make a description later. Will that make you happy?

who who who who who wait metroplex has just come and did Brawl just say some sewar words???????????
other that that this chapter was awsome :pinkiehappy:

1595468>>1644498>>1364401 i have rewritten chapter one with a new intro and erased a section, i also corrected some spelling errors, so comment to tell me what you think:pinkiehappy:

Finally Broadside gets introduced! :rainbowdetermined2:

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