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RitsuD95


Not a part of this fandom, but I do adore Equestria Girls films and shorts. Watch me weave fantastic tales based on them!

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When you try and use dark magic to take over Canterlot High, it never ends well.
The Dazzlings lost their powers and were thoroughly embarrassed by Sunset Shimmer, Princess Twilight, and company.

For Sonata, it didn't get much better. Fed up with her inherent ignorance, Adagio takes her frustrations out on Sonata, and kicks her out of the group. With nowhere to go, she winds up wandering the streets. Luckily for her, she wandered into the right place at the right time.

She'll be borrowing someone's kindness for a while.

Will Sonata be able to atone for her mistakes?
Will she be able to make friends?

Author's Note: Originally, I planned to entirely change this. But I realized this provides me with a beautiful opportunity. A chance to explore a world of what-ifs. Sonata being saved by Vinyl after the Battle of the Bands could change the entire timeline from here on out. Let's go.

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Comments ( 69 )

Keep it coming, that's a promising start so far.

I love this! Keep it up!

More Sonata? Yes, please.

No offense, but it looks like you... "Upped" Sonata's intelligence a bit. I might be wrong since I've only seen the sneak peeks, and I still have to see the full movie.

I still like this though.

5127537 Oh, don't worry, I do plan on keeping as well to her character as possible. But, I assume that, airheads included, most sentient creatures would react to certain things in a similar way. I do appreciate the fact you like this though.

Don't worry, her questionable intelligence will be utilized quite a bit later on.
Her first-thought honesty too.

As for the movie, she is quite air-headed, and the fandom seems to want to call her the other Pinkie~

5127643 I guess that's proper reasoning. And I really wanna see the full movie, since it seems better recieved than the first one.

5127667 It actually is all around far superior.
These villains were different, and they showed quite a bit of development for Sunset Shimmer. Personally, I really liked her BEFORE the movie. Now, she is without a doubt my favorite.

It also did the right thing by accenting the shortcomings of the Elements, and was all around a gripping tale.

I don't see a large margin of movies right away, but I think the right decision was made. I'll probably go see it again! :pinkiehappy:

Ow, ok, my feels hurt now.... :pinkiesad2:

Another side off Vinyl rarely seen

5127683 Argh... Why do I live in Holland... I don't wanna see the Dutch version with voice actors/actresses from Belgium... Uuuuuugggghhh...

5128177 It never aired here in Sweden. I'm suffering too.

This...this is just so nice.... :twilightsmile:

This is a very nice start so far. Please continue! :twilightsmile:

Interesting start! The other Dazzlings abandoning Sonata kinda rubs me the wrong way, honestly, (sure, they act like they hate each other throughout the film, but yet they've stuck together for however long? Plus, if they were really going to leave her after taking a fall, one would think they'd have done it right after being banished to the human world by Starswirl the Bearded.) but utilizing Vinyl in this (especially given her role in taking the sirens down) is an interesting twist on the concept. Looking forward to more! :twilightsmile:

5130496 It's called the "Silver Spoon Effect". Cute character among other meanies? Easily fixed by having one side quit being friends or disown one of their own family members.

It's the 'Remove the others through any method possible because there's no way cute girls can be bad because it's always the others who make them that way' fandom treatment. Get used to it, Silver to this day is STILL finding more convoluted ways to end her ties with Diamond or Diamond do exaggerated things to 'awaken' Silver's consciousness.

They will usually create anything and everything to ignore any canon to make their a cute character do whatever they actually want them to do in their story with the character that normally wouldn't make sense otherwise.

There are already a slew of those Sonata'Spoon fics out there. And they all begin with the same themes. xD

Are they all bad? Nah, people love redeeming 'bad guys' if they're personality is cute enough. Me and some friends joked about how Sonata was the new "Silver Spoon Clapped First" of Equestria Girls. Then the fics started pouring out about her and only made them laugh and facepalm with a "here we go again" :rainbowlaugh:

But let them tell their stories. It's just what they do with characters like Silver Spoon. Easier to just reinvent the wheel for some. Doesn't mean the story will be inherently bad because of it. Redemption stories just happen to roll that way. As you seem to agree. Just be glad that unlike some Silver Spoon Clapped First types, this author at least used the AU tag and isn't trying to claim 'Canon' on any events herein the fic. :twistnerd:

I can easily symaptise with Sonata. She's cute, but she's also oblivious and insecure. I liked that part when she asked Vinyl to tuck her in. It shows that she's really just a misled, insecure girl who only want someone to take care off her. It's really cute.

You know Sonata seems to be getting ALL the punishment lately.

THIS WILL NOT STAND!!!

(Transforms into Jubileus and approaches Aria and Adagio)

REPENT FOR YOUR SINS!!!

(Fires galaxies at the two, turning them into helpless 8-year old girls)

Now then, let me just give you your spankies before the spell wears off...

5131902

As annoying and predictable as it is, it may seem likely since both Adagio and Aria have more smarts than Sonata--and the stress and humiliation for being trapped forever in a strange world with no powers at all. If their destined to spend the rest of their lives as humans, they would want some of that stress removed by simply abandoning Sonata to the world.

That's just my theory anyway:applejackunsure:

so far, I'm loving this! Very good job. I am hoping the next chapter will be just as great as this!!!!!!!

Your story has just been clicked on by your equivilant of a god. Somepony who definitively knows what's right and wrong about fanfics cannon-wise. Consider me the most right critic of mlp you will ever be blessed to know about.:rainbowdetermined2:

so nice, for realzies :heart:

You... Passed... But only cause I don't know vynil well enough to know what she'd do here.

once you get a little more up, I plan on reading, so please don't stop

"Woah. Dude, that's fucked up." Vinyl shook her head.

GAARGH, YOU'RE KILLING ME WITH DA FEELS!!! :fluttercry:

so when do we get to see chapter 2? :trollestia:

more...thats right you heard me...MORE!!!!

this was my reaction to how badly sonata was being treated:

Yeah I hope Adagio and Aria die. That or some serious form of Black Karma strikes the holy hell out of them for their black hearted actions.

"It's not my-"

Use the em dash (—), not a hyphen. You did this a couple times.

"Not. Anymore."

If that's the sort of effect you wanna go for, you should make it, "Not. Any. More." Sounds much better.

Vinyl cut her off, you're

You accidentally a quotation mark.

Vinyl simple chuckled

*simply

And finally, your dialogue punctuation needs some work. Here's a handy guide on the subject:

Wrong:
✖ "Hi there," the pink pony grinned. (It should be a period: ‘grinned’ isn’t a ‘speaking’ verb.)
✖ "Hi there." The pink pony said. (This should be a comma; no capitalization should be used)
✖ "Hi there"! the pink pony shouted! (Punctuation of dialogue belongs inside the quotes.)
✖ "Hi there!" The pink pony shouted! (Don’t capitalize "the"; treat the "!" as a comma.)

Correct:
✔ "Hi there," the pink pony giggled. (She giggled while saying the words.)
✔ "Hi there." The pink pony giggled. (She said those words, then giggled.)
✔ "Hi there." The pink pony grinned. (The word 'grinned' isn't a 'speaking' verb.)
✔ "Hi there!" the pink pony shouted. (Exclamations and queries replace the comma.)

All that aside, it's interesting to see Vinyl as the one reaching out to Sonata.

Huh, what are the chances we both are making a fic about Sonata and Vinyl, heck they both even start similarly
We even started in about a week of each other, good show mate, I just hope our storys go differently just so people don't think we're copying each other :)
Still this is a good read so far

5472230 Perhaps we should PM then and see! XD

From the description

She'll be borrowing someone's kindest for a while.

Kindness?

5544727 Wow, of all the things I try to self-proofread, I miss that... Welp, thanks. XD

Pretty good chapter :twilightsmile: can't wait for the next one

5544740 Thanks! Wish I could always feel the writing vibe this well. ^^

Comment posted by CheerDaLee deleted Jan 24th, 2015

Yay! New chapter! I'm looking forward to when the next chapter comes out.

A sweet and cute story whit Vinyl and Sonata. :pinkiegasp:
Good realy good. :pinkiehappy:
Looking forward for the next chapter.

Ah, a new chapter!

Suri Polomare: I ALMOST had to wait for it!

Me: ...how the heck did you get in my review? *swats her*

Great chapter, I just hope AJ and Rainbow are okay with Sonata. After all, they gave Sunset another chance after her actions in the first movie so this shouldn't be any different. :twilightsmile:

So very glad to see this continue.

Nice chapter though the "confrontation" could have been drawn out a bit more but that's just nitpicking. Glad to see this update hope to see more from you.

Looks like all of the stuff I pointed out last chapter still applies, especially the bit about punctuation dialogue.

Also

Those ruffians need to learn manors

:rainbowwild:

5548803 You'd have to point out exactly where it still applies.

Lol, manors. XD

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