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This story is a sequel to Leading the Blind Through Light


Rarity experiences an inspirational drought following the Fall Formal, one that Rainbow Dash relieves with the chance to design a new baseball uniform for her team. However, a series of strange encounters leave Rarity feeling attracted to Rainbow Dash, for all the wrong reasons.

And when one they know quite well disappears under tragic circumstances, she begins to question whether her future is worth struggling for...

Big thanks to Cynewulf, RazedRainbow and Azusa for pre-reading.

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 36 )

Nice little Slice of Life you got going on here.

Seems pretty solid, too.

This should be fun.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Same universe, huh? Are we gonna get any mentions of Sunset here?

Good to see it's finally out!

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In Chapter 2 and 3. It's essentially three long snapshots of what goes on between them.

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Cool. Am I right in assuming that Chapter 1 takes place before Sunset goes back to Equestria?

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Yes, Chapter 2 does as well, Chapter 3 pretty much deals with the 'aftermath'.

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Well, it's nice to know that Sunset is the farthest thing in their heads right now. Granted, Rarity and Applejack actually have decent excuses, but as for the other three...

...the small shop had its own charm of being one of South Canterlot’s only establishments to be run by a girl no older than seventeen.

I have to ask, what other such establishments are there? Because the way this is phrased indicates that Rarity isn't the only underage entrepreneur here.

In any case, you've got my attention. I look forward to more.

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I haven't really thought about it too much, just a minor detail to give some backstory. (And to set the fact that she's younger than Dash).

I'm not usually one for human pone fics, but the premise had me intrigued and I couldn't help but check it out.

This first chapter definitely held my attention, and I eagerly await the next chapter.

This is a very interesting set up you got going here. Curious to see how this all plays out. :raritystarry:
Also Rainbow Dash is older than Rarity? :unsuresweetie: I always thought that Rarity and Apple Jack might of been older. Either way now I wait for the next update. :raritywink:

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Well, it's mostly a plot point that added some extra depth to both of them that I liked. There's still no definite ruling on their ages, so I'm going to do what I like with that in the meantime.

As for the update, it may be a while, as this has always been my hobby story, the others are what I tend to focus on pushing out content for.

I like this story so far. Truly shows that both rarity and rainbow, have a connection and a soft side for each other. Very good, keep posting please

this is really awesome hope you continue soon :D :rainbowdetermined2:

I'm okay with this. Have a fave and like. :twilightsmile:

I really like this story, it's very cute how Rarity reacts. Nice cover art too, did you make it? cuz it's awesome! :twilightsmile:

Sooo... when will you post the next chapter?:rainbowhuh:

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It's written out, I'm still doing some polishing work and that. Shouldn't be too much longer, I hope.

Um...did I...did I miss something?

Wait... What? So Sunset killed herself because she wanted to be with Rarity again? I need more information!:raritydespair:

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Unfortunately, the way this plot developed means this story is technically the last of the three, so the big twist came well before I was ready to follow through with it. But rest assured I will try my best to get the other stories out as soon as I can.

Also, Twilight Sparkle Gets a Visit from Sunset Shimmer is a direct follow up to her side of the story.

Huh, well that was...talk about doing a 180 on the emotion scale. I went from happy to sad. :raritycry:
Really curious to see where this goes now. Poor Sunset :raritydespair::fluttercry:

There are no words to describe the feeling I have right now other than confusion. Not that I don't know what's happening but the fact that I can't wrap my head around the situation.
Very well written and emotionally confusing. You are a great writer. :fluttercry: :applejackconfused: :raritydespair: :rainbowderp:

This is a wonderful story :'D

So... many... love... triangles...

Haha! Say what you want but I don't feel bad for Sunset at ALL! The whole movie I wanted to stomp her face in. Still sad but no hurt feelings here.

HOLY SHIT, HOLY SHIT!

I feel sorry for rarity. It's always hard starting or owning a business.

I can't help but feel that this cheapened Twilight Sparkle Gets a Visit from Sunset Shimmer.
There, we see a Sunset Shimmer who had been given a second chance, but then the world just... withdrew from her. It became too much, and she tried to die.

Here, Sunset's behavior looks like she withdrew from the world as much as it did from her; her renewed interest in Rarity is unhealthy and there was nothing to suggest that Rarity would return it; her suicide was the result of simple heartbreak. Not the breaking of a great love or the result of a great betrayal, but seeing the person she broke up with months ago kiss someone else.

Her obsession certainly makes these worse than they would have been and depression puts the whole world under a painful pall, but her suicide, rather than a moment of tragedy and tears, rather than the emotional revelation in Twilight Sparkle Gets a Visit from Sunset Shimmer, becomes... petty. And the chapter manages to make it look like Sunset's own fault.

It also makes the romance tag a bit creepy, considering that Sunset just attempted suicide over love.

3496434 PLEASE FILL MY NEED FOR RARIDASH GOODNESS! No seriously, is this dead?

So first off I really love the setup up here. Can’t quite explain why but it’s really easy to imagine Rarity at this point. Your wording and vocabulary almost feel like the narrating is in her voice as well, almost like she’s written it herself.

“Having to use such poor writing in order to cut back on character usage made her cringe.” Just…absolutely amazing characterization.

I just admire how you describe what Rarity is doing. It’s just so accurate with her character. Even the smallest details when she goes from A to B

While it’s subtle, I’m loving the little quirks of romance Rarity gives off when she talks to Dash. They’re absolutely brilliant. I’m honestly kinda jealous.

“Rainbow Dash always finished her drinks.” “And there was only one reason as to why she would leave it.” This just hit me emotionally so well, I wanted to point it out.

Ok so part 1 of your story was fantastic. Lots of subtle character quirks, plenty of emotion. Rarity is absolutely adorable, and you write her so well! Was a great read. On to the next chapter!

*spoilers*
Ok so Rarity is waiting for Dash outside of her game. I was expecting like a hardcore hug, or an emotional rant, but a kiss? Wow, that was pleasantly unexpected. I also like how instead of it being some mutual moment, it’s kind of casually shrugged off.

So there are times where I can’t completely tell who’s talking, but maybe that’s me?

God I’m so caught up in the suspense of everything. You do a really good job of taking anticipation and running with it.

And again with an out of the blue kiss. I keep expecting like a long conversation or something.

Oh God Sunset! Oh that poor girl! Sorry, can’t think of feedback other than random comments that come into my brain.

Oh wow. You really know how to build a tense scene! I love how little time you need to paint a picture.

Ok I gotta beg for a chapter three! that was amazing! I love your writing style and your character dialogue.

Aw sad that it seems to end here. So much emotion.

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