In the human world, colorful pastel ponies are just as commonplace as any other Earth equine. But one of them has a secret. An upstart rancher named Arthur is about to find out exactly what that is.
But he'll have to catch her first.
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this looks like it's going to be one awesome story
Near the end of the chapter. It was just too immersion breaking for me.
Interesting so far. Doesn't matter which way this goes I'll follow it.
The fact you placed this into the human harems group confuses me.
More!! plz...
Stop the AJ! Stop the AJ! Stop the AJ NOOOOOW!
But.. Incessant literally means does not cease
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I'm finding this weirdly fascinating and definitely looking forward to more!
in the first section break.
While I find Applejack's silence and quick warm up to Arthur disquieting, this story still has my attention.
6245407 It's tough, I know. I'm trying to balance the pacing without too much padding. It's important for events to come.
This has become one of those stories that I keep reading over and over... Love it!
the question is,if she can understand him,can he understand her?
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I guess we'll just have to wait and see...
Didn't catch anything this time.
I was too engrossed in the story. Again while Applejack's surrender to her fate feels quick, everything else more than makes up for it.
And the story took a turn for the worse. A whole month went by with no attempted communication, and you didn't even bother with an excuse.
Earlier when you said she was the same size has him, did you mean height or volume, because I thought height and that would make her much bigger then any wolf.
6248107 I'll flesh out the reasoning for her silence. And by the 'same size', I meant mass. Her legs are almost the same length as his, but the top of her head only comes up to his shoulders. I'll go back and fill that bit in too... it was a big wolf okay?
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6248181 This really would of been the right time to explain it, since you had her grieving over her family.
still waiting for when she finally says something and he tries to convince himself he's not crazy.
... I'm gonna need more popcorn for when that goes down.
Quick question: does she have the the face according to the show? Or a longer face, because I would imagine that it would be hard to take on the (bridel?) (the thing on the face!) if she had a small face...
6257630 Pop some popcorn for this weekend then... shhh! it's a secret!
6260467 Exhibit A:
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6264671 oh! Now I get it, much love
I have a question: on a scale between "cat-horse-human three-way-fusion resulting in marshmallowy semi-anthros with gigantic eyes" and "RL Equus Ferus", where do ponies sit appearance-wise? And where does AJ herself sit?
Also, I agree with 6245407, her passiveness is quite strange, as is her feral behaviour. All this time, I expected her to use her forelegs quite a bit to fumble with things, even if not as much as her mouth.
6248107 I agree. For the first day I could understand a numbed acceptance, but AJ is as prideful as she is stubborn. After a night's rest with a full belly, she WOULD have opened her gabber to chat it up with him, or more precisely complain. Being treated as a dumb animal, sleeping in a cell where others shit openly nearby, eating off a trough instead of a half decent dish or at least a paper or cloth wrap, all of it is downright humiliating.
This extended submission without justification is entirely unacceptable.
EDIT: Okay, this worked as a single day instead of many weeks is lots more plausible. That correction sure worked in your favor.
when he first wakes up from the concussion.
Call me a sap, but *squee*
I really enjoy situations like this.
Our AJ. Smooth under pressure.
I saw that joke coming, I saw that joke coming when the only other pony was a male. Unfortunately it wasn't funny. The only part that is mildly funny is ... uuuu his name isn't in the first couple paragraphs. I'm not willing to reread it right now but is his name used at all in this chapter? Anyway the human's awkwardness is amusing.
Your reason for Apple Jack not talking are week and so overused, plus it doesn't fit with her character. Apple Jack is stubborn and prideful, but in the beginning she is acting shy and flighty, it really doesn't fit with her. Then in a really confusing bit, in a matter of moments it douse a full 180, back to something rather fitting for her, but is so sudden it is shocking.
The guys infatuation with her douse have some potential, so at least all that wasn't for nothing.
6272436 She appears as she does in the show.
6272785 I'll go back and rework the timeline a bit so the events fit her character more appropriately.
6272806 You promise? Then I'll be waiting. This concept of marshmallow non-sapient ponies on Earth, like a reverse of the "Your Human and You"-verse, is too good to pass up, and I'm gonna keep my criticism in the chamber for this fic to be awesome.
When you mention scientists and Aj's dog and all about that... I was like "is that gonna happen?" Arthur saves Aj for the third time! It probably won't happen but, good chapter
Buck is sentient, Applejack would be sapient. :)
6273973 Give the guy a break, he's a rancher not a etymologist!
...yeah, yeah, I fixed it.
6272956 6272785
I tightened up the timeline. There isn't a need for you guys to go back and re-read everything so far. Suffice to say that each chapter is approximately a day in-story. So it's been about 3 days and two nights at the ranch at this point. Passage of time from here on will be clearly described to avoid confusion.
Heh... I was wondering when that would roll around. And loneliness doesn't get to you until you have someone... or somepony, to talk to.
6248022 A minor point, but when a creature comes down with rabies at the foaming mouth stage, they actually develop a fear of water. The disease can't progress in a pour water state. Its the only known illness to evolve that ability.
Still a great chapter.
6309716 That's true! I'll go back and amend the scene a little. I strive for realistic accuracy and I appreciate your effort to that end.
This story is looking very interesting!
Oooh this is getting good. I wonder what's in store for them next.
Wow! You're good! Please continue to write chapters for this story. There aren't enough pony on Earth stories, much less good pony on Earth stories.
Interesting story. Are you going to work on it more? It's been a bit of time and you have had other stories since so I'm curious.
7170818 Someday. My heart just hasn't been into this one. And I just don't want to go down the familiar 'my little Dashie' road for an ending. I do have a lot of other writing projects in the works right now. Perhaps I'll get back to this in the fall.
His fingers let go of the spoon and it stood straight up in the black beverage. It was ready.
now that is the kind of coffee I was razed on my grand parents hade a Kalamazoo cook stove with a old coffee pot just cooking all day you code float a egg on that stuff.
and I loved it. funny part is my parents ended up with the farm when they passed and now I am living there caring for my mother and the old cook stove is out in the garage and still works super good it just needs clean up a bit.
here is a photo of a stove so you all know what I am talking about.
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Colt .45
sounds like the old peace maker.
Shakespearicles this is defiantly a good story and I can see how you can go several different way wit this.
it is just a matter of finding the time and how you want to go and how long you want the story to grow in to.
7669929 nice!
after 15 months...
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Nice to see this continuing.
Woo, man, I needed this. A chapter from a well-loved story to rekindle my slightly dimmed-by-separation affection for MLP.
Replace "ponies" with "humans" and you'll get rid of 85% of the stupidity in most YHaY fics out there.
7741029 YUSH!