I am Twilight Sparkle. Newly crowned Princess of Equestria. Element of Magic. Student of the magic of friendship under the tutelage of Her Royal Highness Princess Celestia.
Female. Lavender in the coat, indigo in the mane, with purple and pink stripes. Razor straight mane cut, with a little bit of a flip... shimmering ethereal mane and tail possibly pending. Large wings, lavender, barely used.
Beloved daughter of a scientist and a stargazer. Sister to the Captain of the Royal Guard. Sister-in-law to an Empress.
Best friend to five ponies plus one dragon in Ponyville.
Or am I?
Chapters (12)
Interesting. And now it incorporates S3 canon. Currently don't have a lot of time, but there is one possible mistake I found.
This sentence is kinda unfinished.
Oh hey, this is pretty good. My only complaint is that the whole "Twilight is a changeling", which appears to be what you are hinting at, is starting to get a little oversaturated, but I look forwards to seeing what you do with it.
There's some interesting buildup on Twilight's dilemma, not to mention all the Mane Six feel in-character in how they're handling her recent coronation. Looking forward to more!
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To be fair, I had that premise before it was cool.
I originally started writing this at the end of season 2. But when some personal stuff came up, I pulled my entire body of work from the site.
It's my own fault that I'm just one of many now.
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Fair enough. I actually enjoyed they way you built everything up.
Solid pacing, and adorably in character. I especially love Fluttershy telling Twilight she'll always have a place in their hearts and hugging her
As for Twilight's....situation...I'll wait and see where you're going with that, I have a good feeling you'll be able to pull it off
The lack of any apparent shipping is nice, too (Alright, I love TwiShy, and I don't mind shipping done in moderation, but it's waaaaay out of hand in this fanbase, I prefer to stick to the basics on what this show is about)
>>>Rarity looks deep into my eyes, and I can almost see the fire burning within them. "I need you. I need your body."
Apparently Rarity still has a thing for royalty
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I was wondering why this chapter seemed so bucking familiar... Glad to see it back.
2380170 Double entendre is best entendre?
Oh my god, I laughed so hard when saw your avatar
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YEAAAAAAAHHHH
Wow. This is really good! I get a really strong Hard Reset vibe, with the first-person present tense PoV, the slightly snarky Twilight. That's a good thing, as that is one of my favorites on the site.
And yeah, the "X member of the Mane Six is a changeling" is way trope at this point... but you've shown you know how to tell a tale, so I'm willing to stick around for a bit, see where you go with it.
I am so sorry but i have had this grammar lesson screamed at me for my entire life and I HAVE to point it out or i'll EXPLODE
it should be I
once again, so sorry...
a mustache to you for capturing my attention
DAMN CLIFFHANGER
....now i have to wait for the next chapter
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Erm...actually, "me" is the correct choice in that context.
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Well, in first-person/narrative structure that's not really an error per-se, it's just the means thoughts would be phrased in that regard, in a quasi-SoC way.
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Good opening by the way, well put together and I don't see a lot of first-person Twilight stuff that can boast that. Looking forward to seeing how it continues.
2389968.....really?
...................................................now i feel like a total idiot........
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Being compared to Hard Reset is perhaps the highest compliment I could receive. Thank you.
Interestingly enough, the original draft used the third-person limited perspective. It was Hard Reset that inspired the change to first-person, and had perhaps the greatest influence on how Twilight is voiced in this fiction.
Now I wonder what Eakin would think of all this...
...
ooooohhh, something NEW! i haven't heard that take on twilight-changeling, and it's sadistically delightful!
....man i'm weird....
2398219 This, fortunately, is my trump card. The Shyamalan-esque twist in my corner. The thing that - hopefully - will set my fiction apart from the usual "X is a changeling" fare.
...please work please work please work
Now I remember which story this was!
Did I miss something? One moment, Twilight is passing out in the library, the next, she is waking up in the changeling hive?
Also, you clearly wrote this chapter before Magical Mystery Cure. You called Twilight a unicorn a couple times, but in the previous chapters, she is an alicorn.
2398363 And I intend to finish it this time, as Celestia is my witness.
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Well, the short answer is that it's a flashback. Pay close attention to the timing... this scene is happening around the time of the Canterlot Wedding.
Any ideas on how to make that more clear? I didn't want to do anything obnoxious to the formatting, or tack on a poorly-construed framing device, but if I need to, I'll do it.
hmm was twilights mind copied, split or transferred?
after all are there now 2 twilights, 2 "half"-twilights or one changeling-twilight and her non-sentient original body
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It's okay, Rathalos. Aggro Crag wait for you is he's.
Our protagonist has Twilight's mind, in full and with all memories. There's just... something extra.
I go further in depth with this concept as the fiction progresses.
This is actually a really crappy place to leave the story off, isn't it? I'll fix that.
Next chapter update is April 11th.
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while i didn't understand whats the point with the link its good to hear we get an update soon^^
Hm, so was Twilight Chrysalis's backup plan, or her real plan?
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Well, I figure it's more of a Xanatos Gambit thing. "If you lose... I win. If you win... I still win." That kind.
Definitely an interesting twist to the whole "Twi-is-Changeling".
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Do it the easy way. Prefix the chapter with "One year ago", and call it good enough.
Also:
You got me again! I believe I reported this line as an error the first time around, and I almost did it again now, before realizing (and then remembering) that it was a stylization choice. ...mind you, adding a dash or an ellipse might be a good idea, but given what you're going for here, it still works as-is.
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...and then it turned out that the copy could also use the Element of Magic (leaving Equestria's super weapon intact), and has now assended to Greek Demigod/Alicorn Princess status. Unless that "extra" bit you mentioned can manage to take advantage of these two facts, I'd say the Queen's long term gamble has turned up Snake Eyes (, and I don't mean the Joe, unless he's beating her into submission with one of her own severed limbs).
...and now I have a mental picture of Discord following Dusk and co. around with a video camera. There is no way he'd let a ball of confusion this big go by without him. Also, he'd probably want to keep Fluttershy safe as well, presuming she tags along.
Also, Fridge Horror time. Originally, Twilight was only replaced for a few weeks before the call went out. Thanks to the rewrite, however, the poor mare has been held captive for what I presume to be nearly a year. And something I just now realized. Dusk's status as a Princess is probably legally binding at this point. Sure, Dusk can abdicate, but that still means that Celestia's own Xanatos Gambit, to make Twilight an Alicorn, has crashed and burned due to a 30 Xanatos Pileup (minus 28, of course). Dusk has achieved Twilight's destiny, and there is a good chance Twilight can never get it back.
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Can I just take a moment to tell you how awesome you are? Because you are.
Your speculation addresses a lot of interesting points that will actually come up and have resolutions within the course of my fiction.
The Discord thing, though, I can answer right now. He's busy with something else in Canterlot. He won't be taking part in the main story.
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Assuming that Twilight is still sane, not some sort of changeling or even still alive.
A full year alone with a undoubtedly furious Chrysalis with no one even knowing shes gone
2399758 With the absolute horror that I am (allegedly) putting her through, would you believe me if I said that Twilight is my favorite?
Now that I think about it, my original draft fast-forwarded to a few months past the wedding anyway. Plenty of time for Bad Things to happen.
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You remind me of OrphiusOlyandra. He says twilight is best pony, but if you've red any of his stories, you most definitely wouldn't think it.
Heh reminds me of Jack and Will from pirates of the Caribbean
....you're not a eunuch are you?
Time for a original/copy clash, complete with angst.
2409095 Oh, never you worry, there'll be plenty of angst to go around. I'll actually be doing my best to rein it in.
Oh no. The real Twilight can't be dead. No way. There's absolutely no way a potential conflict gets tossed, just like that.
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Like I said, don't worry about it. All will be explained in time.
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I know. I was being genre savvy.
Somepony needs to remind Dusk that she never was a Changeling, hivemind not withstanding. The original Drone was rendered down to subatomic particles. I don't know about most folks, but to me that comes across as something more than simple Clinical Death. She isn't him/her turned into a copy of Twilight Sparkle, she is a Clone of Twilight Sparkle created from the biomass of the above mentioned dead Changeling.
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Ah yes, Cloning Blues, the angst trope that keeps on giving.
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Hmm. I have read and considered your argument, and have concluded that you're absolutely right. You're becoming my new best friend, Starcat.
Now, Dusk's angst isn't so much about "I'm a changeling" so much as it's about "I'm a copy", so I shouldn't have too many problems, but your argument is convincing enough that I'm going to give the rest of my chapter drafts a second look.
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I must be really slow on the uptake this week ... I only just realized that this is a re-write of a fic (that i thought was awesome the first time BTW).
If I am remembering correctly there should be 2 more chapters till it catches up to the original story ...
2409859 Nope. We're all caught up. This is as far as I got.
It seemed longer last time because I had an extremely contrived plot device involving research projects and nightmares that took two prologues and two chapters to resolve. This time around, I did it in one chapter.
The next chapter should be brand new to everyone!
Best chapter title ever.
2409260 Only some of the changeling was blasted into subatomic particles, the rest of it formed a nice changeling stew: Extra Chunky. (Before it was melted down even more.)
Dusk isn't just a clone with Twilight's memories and a copy of her body, she has a piece of Twilight's soul. At least I assume that Chrysalis put the piece of soul that she ripped from Twi into Dusk. She's an echo of Twilight.
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...no, I'm going with "New Soul" with imprinted memories. My point stands. Rebuilt from the composite electrons, neutrons and protons... or simply rearranging the target DNA and RNA, the end result is the same. The Drone is dead, and Queenie is a murderer.
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Well, I was taking some poetic license with that... Twilight's love for Celestia is so great that, when Chrysalis was ripping it from her, it felt like her entire being was being torn apart. Now, it could still be argued that Chrysalis's magic, by stealing love, is essentially taking souls anyway, but I'll leave that to you.
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You're awfully close.
2414948 I'll not argue that the drone is definitely dead.
2414972 I had a feeling that you might be using it in that metaphorical sense, but I chose to take it literally instead. I understand that you were saying that Twilight's love for Celestia is a core component of her being.