It is said, that the gods are petty creatures, whimsical and uncaring of mortals. It is said that nopony can stand against a god. It is said, that when darkness comes to the world a few shall arise to fight it... those chosen will have already proven their worth, for the mantle they must inherit carries the weight of many battles and indomitable will.
Will they be ready? Will Friendship—and love—be enough to succeed?
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lol, omg, you didn't, a Saint Seiya of MLP... oh the humor it will bring
Wait... you JUST posted this, and it is ALREADY on Hiatus?
holy... YES MOAR PLZ
I'm reading this due to that cover image alone. The combination of your history and it promises much on the epic scale!
2573307 I'm debating on whether to continue it or not. I probably will. Also 4 dislikes a minute after posting? Yes! I am hunting non-reading-downvoters now!
Well, I'm interested, if that counts for anything.
2573327
KILL THEM WITH FUCKIN FIRE!!!!
Reading this one as soon as I finish the current story I'm on
2573327
Excuse me while I downvote without reading.
2573346 Eh, they can leave the downvotes for all I care. I care more about people that comment. BUT if one of them is suspicious I'll be checking their history, just to make sure.
Posting story straight to hiatus.
Like a boss.
I'm intrigued...
Also? it's 'Constellations'
*/teacher's foal nitpick*
With a name like that I got to read.
Just a quick question before I even attampt to read this. Why do you put up the first chapter then instantly put it on hiatus? Wouldn't it have been better to wait?
The reason I need to know is cause the worst thing I know is unfinished stories and hiatus is a big warning sign to me.
Oh geez, never mind I just saw someone already asked. I'm sorry. Forgive my ignorance, my Lord.
// Sphex
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Never target the ones who can nuke you, no?
2573364 Thanks, Noble. My derp.
2573355 Well... yes.
a god
Hm, color me interested. I guess I'll see what this is about soon.
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No worries, my friend
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Oh boy. My suspicious history is about to come back to haunt me...
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Okay!
Oh My Celestia!
You actually posted this. I thought it was going to be kept unpublished for all eternity, since you seemed to be really unsure about it and so much interested on other projects. *coughgothiccough* I hope you do continue it, there are not many Saint Seiya Crossovers around.
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You know, I always thought it would have been best to not be able to like/dislike from the front page of a story, while still having them visible. The reason for this is simply a lot of people won't do something if it is more inconvenient. An example is suicide. Yes, that's pretty grim, but bear with me here.
The most common method of suicide around the 1950s was actually people turning their ovens on, and stuffing themselves inside. It was quick and painless because of the way ovens worked back then. But when oven makers decided to make them more efficient (for actual cooking), inadvertently making it a slower and far more painful experience, people simply just stopped doing it. Even to this day, the time when ovens went under renovations was the single biggest drop in suicides on record.
Given the way the internet works, I think this sort of reluctance to actually go through the effort of liking/disliking a story on its front page would apply even more here.
I'm not saying this idea is something that should absolutely be done, but personally I think it could use some attention and consideration.
My thoughts.
2573393 Fixed!
2573479 People dislike for the most pathetic, unrelated reasons. So far I've read two such 'reasons'. But yeah, inconvenience would be a deterrent, but the problem is that the front page is still the fastest way to access a story so...
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Why would it matter? If someone is going to 'like' a story, legitimately, it would most often be done while reading a chapter, either at the beginning or the end. If someone was to legitimately dislike a story, it would pretty much be done in the same manner. In short, if people were doing things the way they're intended (reading the content, then liking/disliking from there) then this would not affect the legitimate users in any way. It would only stop people from liking/disliking on premise/author/tags/etc.
I fail to see the problem here.
DAMNIT D! You gotta continue this!
I don't know what Saint Seiya is, but the story is intriguing, and I really hope there is more.
You have my interest. I look forward to more, whenever it may come. Especially when Twilight tries to examine Cosmo scientifically.
On Hiatus.
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Ya vi lo que hiciste, si estuviera incompleta, mucha gente la favorecerÃa, llegarÃa a la pagina principal, y muchos se quejarÃan de que las historias de los moderadores llegan misteriosamente demasiado rápido al cuadro de honor.
This is a great beginning. I would love for this to continue.
2573327 Personally, I think Fimfic should do away with the dislike/thumbs down. If someone really doesn't like a story, then they should leave a comment saying WHY they don't like it. It would be easier to manage stories based solely on likes and faves, and would force people to say why they don't like something, instead of just insta-hating something for what it IS, rather than how it was/is written. Just a thought, if the mods are taking suggestions.
Also, will I be confused reading this, having NO idea what this is a crossover of/with?
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it's an integrated crossover, not a clash of worlds or characters. Also, it doesnt have a lot of the story as I remember it, so you can choose by yourself if it's a good story or not.
But to make it work as i remember it, Celestia should be probably a little filly, I'm not sure how to work with that.
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: What? This doesn't make any sense!
: Twi, it's like magic. It doesn't have to make sense.
: But magic does make sense!
: Yeah, but it don't have to.
... Or something
This seems like it'll live up to your standard of High-action High-crazy. I approve and request MOAR
Yeah, um... not really all that impressed by this.
I don't really know what it's meant to be a crossover with, so maybe I'm missing out on something important, but as it stands I had three issues with this.
The first is the pace. Especially for and an adventure story, you've covered way too much ground in just four thousand words. The opening chapter of a good adventure story is supposed to do a few things, but one of the most important ones is establish what life is like in the main character's home, before they leave it. You almost completely skipped that. I know this is fanfiction, thus the reader probably already has the context for day to day life in Ponyville, but I still think that's a good excuse to not show it yourself from the character's perspective. It's important for the reader to like and know the character before they get deep into the swashbuckling adventure, that way they actually care about it when things happen to them. That's just one problem with the pacing, the fight scene was rushed, and the way you introduced the villain was seriously ham handed.
The second is the the 'somber' tree funeral. I mean, was I supposed to take that seriously? Really? She broke a tree. That's all she did, and now she's having the big 'with great power comes great responsibility moment'? Do you really want me to take that seriously? Maybe if the tree had fallen on someone, or you'd taken the time before that to really establish how important these trees are to the apple family it'd have had some impact, but as it stands it comes across as goofy and a little silly.
Then there's Gilda. That whole scene wreaked as far as I'm concerned. Her motivation at this point is literally, "You embarrassed me, so I'm going to murder you, everyone you know and love, and burn this town down." This has the dark tag, doesn't it? Where's the moral grey zones, or heroic villain/villainous hero? Where's the actual drama and conflict and depth that makes that genre unique and interesting compared to the others. You want Gilda as a villain? Then go for it, just make her an interesting one. Don't have her explain her (poor) motivations in the first scene she appears in, instead tease them out, make the reader come to understand her over the course of their encounters with her, and then at the end not be entirely sure if they want the hero to win this fight anymore. That's when the dark genre is at it's best.
In short, I think the major problems with this thus far is that you're relying too much on the show for context. Sure, all of your readers have seen the show, and thus you can rely on them knowing what's going on in general, but it still comes across as lazy and pretty sloppy when you don't even take the time to let us get to know your individual takes on the characters before things go to hell.
All in all, this disappointed me. I'm a fan of AJ, dark fics, and adventure fics, so when I saw that you wrote this, I thought it would probably be pretty good. But it wasn't. For me, this is... acceptably mediocre. I haven't really read any of your stories, but I know of you and that you're a big deal on this site so I figured I'd like this, but I really didn't.
If you have any plans on continuing this, I recommend giving this first chapter a re-write.
Oh my god it's a saint Seiya crossover. I love you.
2574230 Very interesting observations. Yes, it is true that for the most part fanfics assume knowledge of at least the primary world, in this case MLP and sometimes too much information is skipped. It is a thing to be careful of and can immediately affect the reader... your points are very good. The only thing is the tree. Applejack explains at one point how the Apples treat their trees like family (i.e. Bloomberg). Given the type of cartoon it is, and how crazy the Apples are... is that really that unrealistic?
"Celestia's sun". -0.5 points.
EDIT: Clarification - I have not finished reading it yet.
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It's realistic in the context, sure, but that's ultimately irrelevant. You should be more concerned by the way the reader perceives that scene, not by how true to the cartoon it is. The scene was written seriously, and felt like you were trying to impact the reader with it, but honestly it just came across as goofy and odd. Sure, for the Apple family this is a serious thing, but for the reader it definitely isn't. If this is a dark fic, shouldn't the moment where Applejack realises the terrible strength she's been cursed with/gifted with have been something a little more serious? Something that the reader will respond to the same way Applejack did. Maybe the tree falls and injures someone, or something along those lines. Anything to help convey to the reader the same emotions she was feeling at that moment, rather than, "It's a tree funeral! Those apple ponies are so zany!"
Getting references or not, I would love to see this story play out. Although...I did see an Fo:E reference.
This looks fucking awesome, so I better read it later :)
I never thought I would see a MLP/Saint Seiya crossover, I think the concept is really good, Saint Seiya is one of my childhood's most favorite anime ever. Don't mind the people who downvote this just because, I would love to see where this is going, keep it up!
And have some cool music.
Never heard of... Whatever it is you're crossovering with, but I'm really enjoying it so far.
Like a Sainy Seiya's fan I have the moral duty to read this fanfic... adn judge it
Bonus IMG
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That's interesting ! I hope you continue it !
Oh boy was I right!
Please do continue with this!
Moar please!
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Sorry, I skimmed over a part of your comment.
As for Gilda, do I have to throw everything out in the very first chapter? {REDACTED. It was a stupid statement anyway.} Just let me say there's a lot more going on with her. It's a bit of a Ragnarok thing, the legend, not the game or anything else.
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I can only judge what I see, and what I see is something I'd expect from a much more mediocre, newby writer than someone with your reputation. I haven't read you other stories, the premises never really intrigued me, but I've been told they're good. I can only tell you my response to what I see here, and what I see her is a bland first chapter. This doesn't feel like the start of something epic, this feels like the start of a story from a writer who has potential, but a bit to learn about structure and pacing.
Go ahead and prove me wrong. Write and utterly excellent story and make me eat my words. I would love to love your story, but I just don't right now. I'm a big fan of good dark fics, have been for some time now, and all I can say is at the moment this doesn't feel like one. By all means, go ahead and write an excellent dark fic, then rub it in my face and tell me how much of an philistine I am for not enjoying this first chapter. I'd actually prefer that result than this simply being another mediocre story.
As for this:
Um...
Look mate, as I've said I haven't read your other stories, so I can't speak about your history as a writer, so for all I know the above statement might be justified. But even so, those kinda sound like the words of an artist with a massive ego. I'm not saying you have one, just that from there it sounds like it. For all I know you could be a really nice guy, but I winced while reading that sentence.
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Y-you!
2575921
Of course I'm right. I'm y1, mother bucker. I can never be wrong.
Well, that was pretty awesome. Makes me want to look up what we're crossing over with, not that I have time for any new anime these days.
congrats on the Feature, D.