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paleowriter


Pinkie Pie is best pony. (Though all my fics are about Spike and Rarity.)

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Rarity has a rather unladylike moment of panic when she thinks Spike has moved away without telling her. Twilight is amused.

Short oneshot that just sort of fell out of my head this evening.

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Adorable.

This should be more than a one shot. Or at the very least get expanded on a bit. It makes it seem like Rarity doesn't know about Spikes feelings for her, but she can't be that dense.

Personally, I'd love to see another chapter or two after Spikes return, or in the lead up to it. Then again, I always want more of good stories.

Oh man that was funny. This feels like if it were stretched out more it could be an episode. At the very least this feels like it could be an animated short. :rainbowlaugh:

This was absolutely awesome for being this short. I loved it :twilightsmile:

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Have a pleasant day indeed...:ajsmug:

I always love how you write Rarity, and the tradition continues in this little bundle of adorable goodness.

This warrants a sequel. Please make it so.

A chuckle worthy story right here.:rainbowlaugh: How sweet of Rarity to be worried about Spike moving. :rainbowkiss:

The only way this could be better is if we saw what happened when Spike actually got home. Would Twi tell? Would Rarity tell thinking Twi did but she didn't? So many possibilities.

Well... was GONNA maybe write my first story about Spike moving back to Canterlot after finally gaining Rarity's feelings... But I guess now I'm not doing that idea, atleast not anytime soon... Oh well, nice fic. :twilightsmile:

:moustache: I like this. One day you should consider making this a longer piece.

I third the motion for expansion or sequel on this story:moustache:


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Do it, Paleowriter at the moment seems to just want keep this as a one shot.
Even if he does expand it, still do it!
Go out there and go nuts with the feels!:pinkiecrazy::heart:

:raritystarry::heart::moustache: :twilightsmile:

Trollight Sparkle at work.

2191603 Go for it! I'd hate to know something I've written has stopped someone else from writing. :twilightsmile:

As far as the cries for "sequel", etc, go...

Who the hay knows. I've got my big multi-chapter fic "Of Age" to work on right now, so I restricted myself with this idea to just a one shot, but my head has it going all sorts of places. If I ever allow myself the time, I might write another scene or two from this short story. But I wouldn't hold your breath, because it might not happen. I have a lot of projects in the fire right now. We shall see. :raritywink:

And thanks to everyone who's commented, and favorited, and thumbs-up-ed-ed! It was a very exciting morning to wake up and see all the notifications. I was a bit flabbergasted, since I didn't expect much out of this little short brain explosion. But I'm glad it was well received! :moustache:

This was enormously entertaining. Thanks for writing it. Though I can't help but feel there's wasted potential here. The situation gives Rarity a fine opportunity to really spill her guts and tear her heart open in front of Twilight. It could've gone so much further, but it's understandable that you didn't have the time to run so far with it.

This. This is good. :eeyup:

this was THE BEST POSSIBLE THING!
Rarity is so cute when she's freaking out... for Spike! xDD

You should write more of these ya know, or maybe a secuel?

I don't know why but when you post a new story I fave it and give a thumb-up to it without even starting reading, of course I don't regret after I actually read it... guess why? YOU'RE JUST TOO AWESOME TO CARE. If you write something I'M SURE I will like :raritystarry:

Twilight is trolling pretty hard here, but she gets away with it because she's Twilightlicious. :twilightsmile:

Also, is Spike playing hard to get? Looks that way to me! :moustache:

lol thats awesome :moustache:

Short and so very sweet. Nice job.

I would have taken the freaking out a little further. Maybe having Rarity think about planning to go to Canterlot and take her Spikey Wikey back...
But then again, I am all about the laughs. This was still very cute and well written. And I feel curious about what happens next...

And then Rarity trotted up to Rainbow Dash and slapped her.

nice job! now i can do my english homework on this story!:twilightsmile:

This story leaves me with the strangest desire to squee or something. Awfully cute despite being so short.

You seem to be one of those authors that everything you write manages to grab my attention before I even notice who wrote it. I really ought to just finally start using the Follow function.

Nicely done. I also wouldn't mind seeing a continuation/sequel - but by all means, do deal with Of Age first! I can wait!

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And Dash would be like "what was that for?" and it would be hilarious...

2194167>>2196714 I'm highly amused at this follow-up scenario you've come up with for Rarity and Dash. :raritydespair: :rainbowhuh: It's like the sequel to this one shot is writing itself through the comment section. :raritywink:

I like how you made this into a one shot. Leaves the "true ending" of the situation up to the readers imagination.

Magnificently entertaining! HILARIOUS, I do say!

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:
Have 5 mustaches, because stars are over-rated.:raritywink:

:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy: oh god this is RICH!!!
does Rarity love Spike or not?
does she like him or not?
because we all know how he feels about her:pinkiecrazy:

Hahahaha Rarity freaking out is the most hilarious thing i've ever read!:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Nice work on this, this is the good sort of one-shot, the kind where you're grinning at the end. If there is a sequel in the future, i will read it. For now, i'll just read some more of your work.

:raritycry::raritydespair: :facehoof::twilightsmile: :raritycry::raritystarry:

For some reason I read the title of the story title as, "Ladies, Don't Freak Out" and was expecting Rarity to say that at some point in the story. Then I got to the point where she did say that, but without the pause after the word "ladies."

Anyway, great little story. I very much enjoyed it! Poor Rarity!

I'm with everyone else...


SEQUEL....NOW!!!!! :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

i also would enjoy to read a sequel :scootangel:

That's one way to see how much she care's, lol.:moustache::raritywink::twilightsmile:

short sweet and to the point. I would love a sequel for when spike does come home again :raritystarry::moustache:

That was absolutely gorgeous!!!

Twilight is totally screwed if, when she develops a crush, Rarity finds out about it.

:) This was a really well-written short story. Maybe Twilight seemed a little too calm, but it IS Rarity. Loved how well you put us inside her head as she thought she lost little Spiky-Wikey. Then her conversation with Twilight, and trying to act normal. XD Loved it. Good work.

Brilliant short story!:raritywink::twilightsmile:

Awww, this was cute. Excellent short!

Spike's career? You mean he is going to get a promotion? What's the next career move, co-librarian?

this made me :twilightsmile::moustache:

Great read. Thanks for sharing.

This is cheesy but...

:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart: out of :heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

Adorable!:twilightsmile:
Rarity approves!:raritywink:

SHL

Cute and good ^^

Her feet pounded along Ponyville’s roads,

Her feet? You mean hooves?

Ha Ha love it. I can imagine Twilight smug look at this :twilightsmile:

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