i like how Anon didn't get rape in this chapter, and finally badass Anon returns

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agreed. in almost every single chapter he has someone abusing him. the guy doesn't even knows what is going on, give him a break. first he is all wimpy and now he is going psychotic murder. i guess the stuff crysalis did so he doesn't kill everyone got removed or worn off over time

2265113 Or there where actually two "worms", in his mind, one normal, with Chrysalis removed and a second security replacement worm which is far more extreme than the original one to be activated if the first one will be incapable of action.
2264946 Jup, that was quite nice. ^^

I have a feeling that Twilight or King Sombra is watching him and giving him the nightmares and it's probably why everything in Ponyville became so unbearable. But I'm glad that he's able to take care of himself once again, but I really hope they'll go back on the journey once the week is over. You got friends to save and reunite Anon.

i need moar of this, why did it stopped so suddenly?

I am trying to give annon some of my power, it will prove to be verry useful especially if he gets some magic with my power most of what I'm giving him is strength and knowlage.

With fatherly love
The cosmic patriarch,
King Lazaro Sol of Ziolia

You have some kind of a baton in your hand, it feels strangely familiar.

I'm not picking up that can mate.

Im just trying to figure this out was it realy necessaire for him to get butt fucked from all most every one who he met and have him being a wimp the HOLE story it just seams like that killer in him would have come out a long while ago but one way or a nother FUCKING AWSOME story keep it up

what happened to the little girl dragon

2264946 yes

What happened to the girl dragon

2343937 exactly, what I was wondering is what they were TRYING to say....you got an idea mebbe?

Please tell me that when you do manage to update, that Anon will no longer by a wimp. Please, I've had just about enough of him being abused and him not fighting back. He has paid his Karmic debt by now!

Also, at this point I'd have imagined Applejack had finally gotten over him. Guess not

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2265360 I agree with you on the Ponyville part. The nightmares though...I thought Chrysalis and Celestia took all the "worms" out but now I dont know. I think it might still be having some influence in him.

Fuck
This is too painful to read
Gets raped and brutalized and doesn't really fight back
Doesn't go to law enforcement either
Welp
I'm out
PEACE

This is just like nickel back its only good with weed

I'm discontinuing this story now officially.
This is actually the first story I've ever written (more or less) seriously, I didn't even try my hand at oneshots first. You may have noticed that I just kept shoving new ideas into this thing relentlessly, not thinking of what would actually happen to it as a whole.
I think it kinda turned out as an inconsistent abomination, that's only my opinion though and I'd like to hear yours. Don't hold yourself back, hit me as hard as you can but please take it serious.

2734264 I loved the first couple chapters, even though I prefer my humans to stay badass.
This stories concept was okay, but after a while most readers get sick a weak protagonist. For future reference, remember that Anon is our connection to the story world, so you have to be careful with him. I think the reason this story went downhill is because of inconsistency with Anon's actions. One second he's some hermaphrodite's sex toy(where certain readers would rather see him die), and later he stands up to Celestia(where certain readers want him to be her bitch or something).
Just my thoughts, I still enjoyed reading this

2734264 this was a awesome story. I wish to see more. my only complaint was all the rapeing.

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Well they never worked on an apple farm or got raped by ponies and griffons on a daily basis. No wonder this story got cancelled and I unfavorited it.

It pains to see the cancelled mark on a great story....we can only use our imaginations to think of what happens afterwards by ourselves.

But alas....with all good things they do come to an end. Either from natural end, or sudden they do end.

And with that, it pains my to say....
This story is Ded

2734264

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You were the only author who I liked your story with anon and Gilda please at least put it on hitos instead of cancelled

3127686 The irony is that he was feared by them he was a weapon and now that Twilight has wiped them the pony's have shown there true colours. oh he is evil and he hurt and beat us up. What he wasn't in control well then we will rape humiliate and allow him to be tortured by gryphon's Friendship is magic

I want more.

well shit, took me a small eternity to check the coments, i really wanted to see how it turned out, really really liked the story; yeah, there were disturbing moments BUT... there's the big red tag that reads Dark, so i don't see why complain when the readers pretty much asked for it.

character development, it went better than expected, protagonist isn't an overpowered super hero, he screws up, just like any human would, and the reaction from the other characters was... interesting to say the least.

i wonder how would have turned things for apples and mr. man at the end.

well i'm cool with some 'dark' in a story to a certain level. ok...here i go. (reads story)

More please.

Have no fear! I am taking up a mighty endeavor to continue the story! I have requested his permission to do so but with the inactivity I fear he may no longer visit here. Nonetheless I will wait a couple weeks for a reply and if there isnt one I will start work on the next chapter.2264946 2265113 2265344>>2266461>>2477798>>2843967>>3344934

3510257 I hope there's no more pussy Anon.

That's all i'll ask.

3510317 Haha dont worry I've thought up a couple ways to fix that. He was Combine after all. If no one here knew what the Uniform, gas mask, shock stick was. I think I can turn him into a Sombra stomping badass.

3320655 Well if all goes well Im going to fix that.

3510257
Do it

3843571 I liked it better the way you re-imagined it in your comment. Sorry for so little critique. I don't usually critique, but it didn't seem like you were going to get a response so I decided to give my two cents.

That description pic looks suspiciously like
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I think it's worth putting out there both as a partial announcement and partly as a frame of 'is this a good idea?'. I'm honestly thinking I'm going to try and take this story and rework it. Someone tried to pick this story up after it died, and they disappeared after a fairly mediocre first attempt...but, while I'm not positive of my abilities in creativity or even schedule keeping, I enjoy this story and don't want to just let it sit here and fester. A lot of stuff from the first half or so is pretty solid, I think we can all agree. But the downturn of content and the lack of real character 'development' with anon himself leaves us all a bit perplexed and torn between how relateable he is, not being insane and all, and how realistic it feels, him...not being insane and all. I've already made an open attempt to recreate a scene in a more 'believable' way and got positive feedback from it and have been considering my options and capability to handle this sort of thing, so my only question now is whether anyone still looking through these comments would support the idea because I don't think it's fair to let someone that the majority disapproves of handle a story they enjoy. Granted I have no credentials here, but I guess I'm just putting out that I'm going to be taking this story and re-arranging it and reworking it and those who wanna know more can let me know and contact me. Maybe even give me ideas or help along the way.

Aw yeah, you're a badass motherfucker!

that's a first for this downward spiral of a story

4448284 Well if you're gonna remake it get permission to do so and do so, cuz it's obvious this story is gonna stay dead otherwise at this point.

3320716 because of all your comments i can now say without a shadow of a doubt that reading this story will give me some kind of brain tumor manifest purely from rage should i read it.
Thank you for nipping that shit in the bud

Why cancel it?

AUTHOR!!!!

Y U CANCEL STORY?!?!?!?

This is an interesting story to say the least. While there are alot of rage inducing moments in terms of the injustice but also the stupidity of some of the characters from both the MC and other casts. I still like it in a lot of ways and don't in many shades. I like the interactions overall between the characters and the possible world building you could achieve.

What I come to like about this story is the idea of the griffon flock and how you handle the idea overall. I think this is a first time for me ever reading about the concept that someone written. I usually only see about just 1 or 2 griffons in a story with maybe a mention of a flock and would like to know if they're more like that concept of a flock in this site or others.

I try looking for more griffon harem but no luck.

I hope in the future you come back to redo this story or make another with the concept involving either a pure griffon flock or griffon flock with other species joining.

It's sad to see the story die

Love this!

no other fic had me so torn apart about rating its quality. if i would rate it just by its story excluding sex scenes.its absolutely nonsensical and really bad.

yet when i would rate it based on smut and treat the story part just as support to the sex scenes. its sooo good! absolutely incredible what you achieved. what a unique story!

Always enjoy reading this