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Now you fucked up Celestia!
Awww buck
Holy shit.
another chapter, another day full of rape :3
This is what I like to see. Anon now has a mission, a backbone, and some new teeth! I have no idea what wallies are, but they sound awesome.
I'm not surprised that Twilight fell to the dark side. She's purple. That's, like, one of the most evil colors there is. I'm guessing that her evil, purple dragon is still serving under her?
With the last chapter and Anon's reactions, I really thought you had taken my advice to make Anon properly traumatized after taking all this abuse. I was really pleased with that change in his characterization, because it was realistic. His almost constant abuse has been building over the course of 120,000 words, he really should act like like he's traumatized!
...Then, instead of showing us how Anon deals with the trauma he endured and how he overcomes it with the help of his friends, thus helping exonerate them of their past transgressions against him... you undid it in less than 1000 words with an instant magic fix, handwaving all of it away with the cheapest, laziest bullshit excuse ever!
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THIS IS NOT GOOD STORYTELLING
And on the subject of this action adventure plot that has suddenly appeared, and the contrived changes in Anon's personality... really doesn't fit the theme of rest of the story thus far. Over 120,000 words of unwarranted physical, mental, and sexual abuse from hypocritical Ponies, violent Griffons, manipulative Changelings, and everything else between, with Anon reacting as if all just relatively minor inconveniences to him and not traumatizing, mind-warping events. Suddenly, he's off on a mission to save the kingdom from Dark King Sombra?
Here I was hoping you would improve your story, but it has gotten worse. I can't say I'm willing to follow updates on this anymore. I just can't bring myself to care about the characters in this story.
Celestia has apologized to Anon more times than everybody else in this entire fiction put together. This fact is both funny and disappointing.
I'm disappointed, this Story is sliding down the hill... you destroying its potential. there IS still potential, but it became less the last two chapters in an horrifying rate.
PLEASE continue with much caution.
Dammit Celestia, why does she never ask for her father's guidence and power? I can help I can fight the darkness within ones heart and show it the light. My last name is Sol for god's sake! And with my years of experience you'd think she would go to me first, unless she forgot me entirely.
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And thus another reader is gone from this story.
I have to tell you that he's right, even though I liked the changes in Anon now, I don't think that the mental barriar shouldn't break down in a fear years but more like in a few months or days. You could make it happened in the way of Chrysalis exclaiming, "This is too soon. It shouldn't break that fast!" when it does break or it could be Twilight be the one to reopen those wounds when drunk on the dark side only to realize Anon's true horrors over the course of this story when she's trying to get rid of whatever courage he has left and turned back good because now she realizes her mistakes and now she has broken a friend that really needs help from his "friends" more than ever. Maybe Anon can have some true friendship with the ponies during this journey to help them, especially if he really was the cause of their break up in the first place.
I am really, really, worried about how the girls all split up BECAUSE of him and I can't say I'm really okay with Spitfire's reaction to being told that Anon was taken when he tried to look visit. I'm not sure if that line is also about her worries like "if I caught her sooner, this wouldn't have happened" instead of "this is all my fault, if I only I came to talk about this with Anon personally, this wouldn't have happened." Since technically Spitfire caused this whole mess in the first place even though it's also Anon's fault for going to visit Spitfire with no friends to accompany him. I wonder how he's going to get everyone back now.
Oh yeah I forgot to say something Anon's look, I'm pretty sure he doesn't look too pretty anymore with all those missing teeth. I just hope he doesn't run into someone like this:
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The writing in this story is all over the place but considering that this is coming from a greentext story It's a lot better than It could be. Not to say your complaints aren't valid of course.
This fic, in my mind, is a trollfic. over abundance of memes and an Anon for the protagonist is very trollish to me. not to mention the second person perspective where 'you' get raped repeatedly.
dude, i'm trying but it's just one fucked up thing after another. not sure how much more i can take of this.
Nice chapter
The only thing that pisses me off about this story is how he is such a pacifist even if he is weaker he can fight back
Only if Twilight wouldn't have earased the combat training from his memory then he would be alot better off
meh....the story is kinda going down the drain a little bit. i can see why its cancelled.
Man, this guy does not like soup.