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After they set off to meet with Zecora for a spot of tea and a catch up, Fluttershy and her friends find themselves attacked by a large pack of Timberwolves causing Fluttershy to become separated from the group. After becoming wounded and lost deep within an unfamiliar part of the forest and with the wolves on her tail, she is rescued from certain death by the most unusual creature.
(A huge thank you to Cirrus_Brony for his editing.)
(Cover art by me.)
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Hmm... I like this. please do continue,
1906891
Thank you
1906902 You sir are quite welcome. Though the thought of Fluttershy getting hurt, no matter if it gets better, makes me cry a little.
This is good. Good enough for the featured box. But first, there are SO MANY errors in the first 2 chapters I wouldn't be able to say them all. But I can tell you one thing, WORK ON YOUR PUNCTUATION SKILLS!!! I saw at least 50 missing commas, in the first couple of paragraphs. You also put commas where periods should go, there was a 4 line long sentence because of this. There are a few minor spelling errors, and on major one...
That was, BY FAR, the most confusing thing that I've read in a long time. I had to read it 5 times before I found that there was an extra letter. Still a great story, but it needs work.
1906989
First off thank you for that comment it means a lot, secondly thank you for your feedback I’m going to try and get myself a proof reader for this particular story at least and I fixed that small error you mentioned as well.
I'll add this to my read later list. It looks interesting but I'll wait for a few more chapters first.
Can't wait to read it though.
1908625
Thank you
Huzzah! I finally find a HiE where it's not some snot-nosed-16yr old kid or a 20-something Rambo but an actual mage, or a magic user type fellow... and not the World Destroyer kind (god I hope he's not overpowered). Count me terribly interested to see where this goes.
p.s. Injured Fluttershy make me want to cry too.
1908750
and nah he isn’t overpowered, just a run of the mill average mage
Thanks
1908782
Yea!
love it and im horribly sad you picked on fluttershy you horrible roots!!!!
1909087
I didn't enjoy writting her parts and it gets better trust me
I'm sorry
I like this fic, keep it up!
1909231
Thank you
Definitely something I will have to keep tabs on. Seems very interesting to say the least.
1910029
Thank you
Please continue to work on this story to the best of your ability, get some help if ya need for proof reading and keep doing a great job at keeping it interesting for me if ya could.
1910115
I'll do my best
I love it keep it comming
1910403
Thanks
1911000
Thank you, and thank you for the tip
interesting, lets see where you go with this
If you need an editor I'll be happy to help!
1914637
That would be fantastic, I shall PM you in a moment regarding it
Good chapter
1916588
Thank you
OH SHIT SON, Something is going down....
1916713 Speedy reply go!
Yep.
(Joke) Alt. Title: LOTS Of Humans
Good chapter, keep it up
1916786
Thank you
Dafuq?
It seems that Grendel is a runaway or has been forced to flee because of something that happened to his city... And now he's heen found... Uh oh...
Be an editor for someone five time zones away?
The plot line is intriguing. However the prevalence, and the odd nature, of the errors is such that they prevent me from getting into the story leaving me feeling overall.... ambivalent.
1908551 I just noticed that I had misspelled spelling, I fixed it. I should read my comments before posting them.
Praticly all scenes with Fluttershy made me go "daaaaaww!"
Ok, lesson time. I noticed that you did this a lot:
There is supposed to be some sort of punctuation before that second quotation mark, it should look like:
And if it has words after the quotation mark it should look like this:
With a comma instead of a period. If a character asks a question, THEN IT MUST HAVE A QUESTION MARK BEFORE THE SECOND QUOTATION MARK, otherwise people will get confused. Here's an example:
Should look like:
I hope this helps.
Woo!
an update 
1918300
Thanks again for the point outs and yes it did help, I believe I have now fixed the bits you've pointed out.
Nyeeeeeeeeeeeeeeees....
Other than a couple of misplaced quotations, and a very giggly Twilight, great start!
1921885
Thank you, I have someone who is helping me check for errors and the such
goog,good Hunter approves
1926576
I am glad it does so
Since when is he from another world?
He never told Fluttershy that, so she couldn't know.
The question should be, "What's magic in your land like?"
It would've been more interesting if you just made him from another land beyond the Everfree.
Not a bad plot at all, a bit rushed maybe but I still want MOAR.
Maybe she assumed? If humans do not exist in Equestria then I would assume that. I guess land would make more sense though. 1926904
1926904
Bugger, knew I forgot to change something. Thanks for pointing that one out.