My name is Ryan Chaser. I am currently the only human living in a world filled with sapient ponies. I have lived in solitude on this world for almost seven years now, and have so far been able to keep my life a secret. Recently, however, it is getting more and more difficult to stay hidden like I have. It's only a matter of time before something happens and my existence is revealed to the world. Though I am not certain of what their reactions will be...
Just a side note, this will follow cannon episodes from the beginning. This story also goes along the assumption that ponies are officially considered "adult" at a much younger age.
Chapters after 4 edited by: Mourning Zephyr
Chapters (5)
This is an interesting HiE. A different start from the ones I've read so far.
Can't wait for the next chapter! Good story so far!
MOAR!
take your time and don't rush it if you want a good story
I think it has its promises, even though it's a little unbelievable that a twelve-year-old could survive for seven years in the Everfree Forest, without being discovered as well. Still I'll follow and see where this is going. Keep up the good work.
2411324 I'll say this much. One of the things he became very good at during his first few years was running.
Wew! more please you have my favorite!
Hmmm, media.tumblr.com/tumblr_lkketh6WUa1qafrh6.jpg
I will need more before I can decide.
Hmm... this is really good
great chapter
can't wait til' the next one
Good stuff my man, keep it up.
*clapclapclap*
This is good. Keep it up!
This is really good for what little there is so far, there is a lot of potential in the concept.
One thing that is bothering me is that i wanted to know his reaction to Zecoras rejection by Ponyville,
perhaps he would use it to justify his reasons for hiding himself in the Everfree.
Boop.
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That's my opinion on the story.
Also I like it.
Boop.
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boop
tomorrow (in the story) is going to be THE Summer Sun Celebration
I really enjoyed this!
Can't wait until the next chapter
keep it up bro! like and fav
Stuff is about to get real
This is a very good story! You have a very good writing style, and you have very few errors, which makes for a smoother read. Along with this, you have a new and engaging take on the classic Human in Equestria. A solid 8.5/10.
i need more
jajaja this is getting good
and one more cause this is real good
I love this story very much indeed truly alot.
cool
This is very entertaining, first HiE I've seen like this, keep up the good work!.
*sigh*
I don't know how many times I've said this today alone, but here's one more.
sentient = capable of feeling. Therefore, absolutely any animal that isn't a sponge.
sapient = capable of coherent, abstract thought. THIS is the word you're looking for, brony.
Just to note: after the first scene break, there's a paragraph with some awful formatting. You might want to fix that one.
Also:
"I grabbed a container and left an ornate carving of a in its place[...]"
What's the carving he left? Between the 'a' and the 'in', there are two spaces and no word inbetween.
alright this has definitely earned a favorite from me, it is well written and ive never seen a HiE like this before, keep up the good work
2519427 The errors pointed out have (hopefully) been fixed. I'm not so sure about the paragraph after the break though.
Thanks for pointing those out!
Looking forward to the next chapter.
I totally forgot about this thing. Oops!
So Nightmare Moon next chapter, right?
2519586 Glad to see you accept feedback!
You'll see the formatting thing is you set the font to "Large" in the chapter my last comment is posted under. It seems like you used Shift+Enter instead of just Enter, and it messed up formatting bad, as in every other line is made out of one or two words.
EDIT: Wait, hold the phone! Ya didn't correct the sentient/sapient thing in chapter 1, foo'!
2524896 the sapient error should be fixed. Now I gotta get on an actual computer to fix the sizing issue.
Again, thanks for pointing those out!
I really enjoyed this chapter and I look forward to more
Interesting. I've never seen this concept, of gaining the general respect of the Everfree creatures, in a fanfic before, despite the many shows of semi-complex intelligence the beasts have shown. Another point for you, S-B.
2528268 Why, thank you, my good sir. Have a moustache
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ETU? (Estimated Time of Update)
This is very interesting, can't wait for next update.
Interesting.
Please continue! I love this story.
Typo right off the bat. While not technically any worse than a typo somewhere else, I think it's important to start a story with your best foot forward. Speaking of which, I've noticed a lot of telling instead of showing in this chapter. This is somewhat understandable, seeing as it's being related as a summary of previous events, but still feels dubious. I'll probably leave some more detailed thoughts once I've read more, but I just felt the need to point out that typo.
2566138 Should be fixed now. Thanks for pointing that out! Meanwhile, I await your opinion on the rest. Here's hoping it leaves a good impression.
Hmmm... Despite being less than impressed by that first chapter, I like where this is going. Well, where I'm guessing it's going, anyway. >_>
I still think you have a bit of an issue with telling what could be (and would be better if) shown, but it's not as bad as in the first chapter, and it's mostly mitigated by the first person perspective, because it, you know, necessitates some degree of telling. I haven't spotted any errors other than the one I commented on back in chapter one, and things stay pretty interesting despite the subject (most of wilderness survival is boring, from a narrative perspective). So, nicely done! I eagerly await additional chapters. :P
2568772 In all honesty, I expected something else was wrong, but I guess I thought wrong.
Thanks for the feedback!
I hope the next chapter really does come quickly
>it'll also come out fairly quickly
I was going to rant about the short chapter until I saw this.
Now I can't wait.
2612091 Well, I'm glad I mentioned that then. I'm not sure how good your ranting skills are, and I'd rather not find out.
Sorry bout this mate but, I can't help it any longer. So to quote the heavy from TF2... "SANDVICH IS KREDIT TO TEAM!"
Once again sorry bout that mate. But, you're doing a really bang-up job of writing a story not to mention using an unexplored or at least uncommon type of HiE which is rather engaging so far. So keep up the good work and hope to see the next chapter soon.