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He's the official Time Keeper of Ponyville. He is the one who keeps the clock tower of Ponyville in working order. He makes clocks and sells them in his shop as well as reparing any clocks that need to be fixed for the citizens of the town. His life is pretty normal, but it may be changing. He has begun to realize that he's attracted to the local mail mare but he's far too nervous to do much about it. Other things also distract him as the clock tower needs minor repairs and he gets a new employee at his shop. Then things go south when the mare he loves has some trouble with her daughter's father.


This story is part of The Equestria Tales series

Pre-story to "Return of the Dark Ponies" story arc.

Unofficial side story to "The story of Tango and Snow Heart"

Has two technical sequels:
Tango
Possession in the Crystal Empire

Chapters (15)
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Comments ( 88 )

You probably got a downvote just because you used the name "Time Turner".:fluttershysad:

Love it. I find I get a little bored reading Doctor Whooves fics so much (which is odd because I'm currently writing one), so it's kind of a refreshing change of pace to find one about him as a normal pony instead of a Time Lord. Plus I love him and Derpy together. They are friggin adorable.:derpytongue2:

Doctor or not, you still got "the old girl" in there.
The clock tower is the TARDIS. It's her. :derpytongue2:

1843482 I wouldn't be surprised, ah well can't please everyone :twilightsmile:

1843491 I love having those two together too, I just can't imagine Derpy really with any other pony :twilightsmile:

1843522 Hehe, glad you liked the reference. He may not be the Doctor, but that doesn't mean I won't have a little fun :rainbowlaugh:

If you want to tie in the Doctor Whooves aspect, you'd imply that Time Turner is his persona under a Chameleon Arch. Just throw in a reference to a fob watch (which is where The Doctor keeps his Time Lordiness when he's being human/not a Time Lord), keep it as a Red Herring, and you should be fine.

1844179 Thanks for the tip, though I'm not really looking to tie it in, more like putting few hidden nods here and there as easter eggs for those like Doctor Who (or at least Doctor Whooves). But I appreciate the suggestion :twilightsmile:

1844737 Like I said, just make mention of a fob watch without expanding on it, and you'll get your nod to Doctor Who fans without having to do anything else.

1844792 Ah I gotcha now, I probably misread your original comment :pinkiehappy: Hm that might work actually, thank again :twilightsmile:

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Dude that was very well written. You deserve this mustache :moustache:

I expect more of this writing skills in the future.

Yes, that mustache and all of these:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

1871080 Thank you, I hope I won't disappoint :twilightsmile:

1871466 So much mustache, :pinkiegasp: Thanks :twilightsmile:

Wibbly wobbly, timey wimey:derpytongue2:

Well done Sir. :moustache:
Keep the chapters rolling in for us to read and comment.

Poor poor Caramel. Story is still going great though :pinkiehappy:
*sidenote* you put prize tag when I think you meant price tag.

1887957 The best explanation I've heard about Time and Time travel, ever :pinkiehappy:

1969342 I shall do my best :rainbowdetermined2:

1969369 Thank you for catching prize vs price error, that has been fixed. And yes poor Caramel, he just isn't catching a break so far. :pinkiehappy:

I doubt Caramel can do much damage as a cashier: he picks things up, rings up purchases and greets customers. I really wish I could say more, but not much happens outside of character development for Turner and Caramel, and Caramel is given a description of the task preformed by the average cashier/sales associate.

It was a good chapter. :scootangel:

Inside the clockmaker saw a large pile of blue Wonderbolt clocks. Each one had a different image of a member of the famous areal team on the face.

I believe you mean "aerial" my good friend.

Awesome chapter, but it begs the question: when is the Derpy/Time Turner mushiness!?:raritycry: I want to know!

1971045 Thanks and yes the whole purpose of this chapter was to get a bit of character developement for Turner and Caramel :pinkiehappy:

1973852 Thanks for pointing out the error, it's been fixed. :pinkiegasp: And don't worry, we'll get to the Turner/Derpy mushiness eventually :pinkiehappy:

There are some odd phrases here and there that could use some polish, things like

Derpy reacted in such a way that Carrot Top nearly fell to the floor laughing.

However, I enjoy the story immensely. The characterization is endearing, and I look forward to the next update. :twilightsmile:

Damn! Misunderstanding right there! Happens to some families out there.
Quick! Make Derpy do an embarrassing moment and get Time Turner and her a date!!!

I'm so glad there is another chapter for this. As much as I like Doctor Whooves, it is definitely interesting to see Time Turner's life as the clock maker and not the Doctor. After reading Caramel's light I think there is a better fillyfriend out there for Caramel. Really looking forward to see where you take this. Don't make us wait too long please.

Damn, how long has it been? I was beginning to think you died! :rainbowderp:
Anywho, I like this chapter. It made me laugh at the end. Dinky is smarter then her mom and Carrot Top give her credit for. Update soon. And I mean, SOON!

2460676 Can you believe it? :pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy:


2461445 Ah thanks for pointing those out, I'll try and fix them when I get the chance. Glad you're enjoying the story. :twilightsmile:

2461541 Without spoiling anything all I will say is. A certain Pony has ideas. :scootangel:

2461641 Thanks, glad you like it :twilightsmile:

2462102 Reports of my death have been greatly exaggerated :pinkiehappy: And don't worry I promise the next update will be soon-ish. :derpyderp1:

Keep it rolling dude. I just love reading this story!

Very much enjoyed the story so far.
Condolences for the loss, understandable that it would take time to return to a project linked to such a thing.
I've got such a soft spot for Slice of Life and for Derpy. And a well written Slice of Life story with Derpy as a main character? You've got your hooks into me well and truly.
Crazy face of approval. :pinkiecrazy:

4450423 Thank you and I'm glad you like it. :twilightsmile:

It would be easy to blame all this on Caramel, but part of the issue goes to Time Turner for giving his employee a proper run down of the merchandise. You expect that Caramel's handling of this was a bad decision, but by selling them off quicker will increase profits because the longer products sit the more money the company loses. This fic is: Small Business Economics is Magic.

Hmmm Dinky's father sending an "apology letter" with currency at the same time new (in more than one way) social service workers specifically inquire about them? I smell a rat, heck even Dinky smells something.

All we're missing is motive, some ancestors will saying he has to have a foal to gain some bits, tax benefits for supporting a child, some illusion of power and control over others, keep up appearances with his social crowd, a matter of pride and can't take the fact "his" child prefers her "dimwitted clumsy" mother over him, some more sinister things that I'd rather not voice at this moment... what's his game? And how is he to be made to lose.

Thank Celestia, you're alive! I thought we'd lost you for sure! Well, maybe not for sure...in fact I hadn't really given it much thought. Like, at all...in fact I kinda forgot this story existed...or you, for that matter...now it's awkward. I need a distraction.
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I had to reread the story so I could remember what was happening.

And it wasn't a bad thing. :rainbowwild:

4451261 That's exactly why I had Time Turner realize he was partly at fault as well and Caramel was not fully to blame. This is a learning experience for both of them, Caramel is learning that there are nice bosses out there and Time Turner is learning to actually be an employer. :pinkiehappy: I have to admit that I've been unsure how well I'm really portraying the business aspect of this story, I did some research and I have listened to family members who know business a hundred times better than me, but I have to admit I'm being pretty ambitious using a subject matter I'm not that familiar with so prominently. :derpyderp2:


4451408 Very interesting theories you got going there. All I can say is, all will be revealed :pinkiehappy:


4453144 Yes I'm alive and what distraction? I don't see any distraction. I see a tree, is that the distraction? Okay I'll look at the tree but then I'll have to move on. That is a nice looking tree though. All right I'll stare at the tree for five more minutes...


4455625 That's not a bad thing indeed :pinkiehappy: Glad you liked it. :twilightsmile:

Don't worry about taking so long with this chapter. I have a story I've neglected for the better part of the year too. Writing is just so hard, how do people do it for a living?

Wow interesting story. I hope Derpy keeps her children. Great job, and I can't wait to read more of this story.

Wow. That is great. I loved the mutal love that Time and Derpy have. I can't wait for the next chapter. Thanks for the long awaited update.

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Glad you're liking it. Hopefully people don't have to wait for so long for future updates again. :twilightblush:

I have to read this entire story every time a new update comes out, 'cause I keep forgetting what happens in the story between updates.

That was interesting. I never thought that that would happen. Dinky you really don't know the trouble that you put your mom in. Great chapter. Good luck with the next one.

5875576 Thank you, glad you're enjoying the story.

Yes Dinky has some 'splaining to do. :derpyderp2:

5871196 Hehe, sorry about that :twilightblush: Hopefully though I'll manage to update with more regularity now. :pinkiehappy:

How old are these foals?
I like this.
I like all of this.
Clocks 4 da win.

I make no sense.
I'm sorry...

I'll go back to my corner and read silently...

I hope you update soon, because I really want to see this....:pinkiehappy:

Holy Celestia, this thing got an update?! Did the laws of magic get Pinkied again?

6477407 Something like that. :pinkiehappy:

I just finally found some time to really get down to do some writing. :twilightsmile:

I read this story in one sitting and am begging for more. Continue please.

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