Basically, the Doctor has been a pony for quite some time now, and he's even got an assistant-Twilight Sparkle! But, things change when he meets a pony he's never seen before, and quickly falls head over heels. My first fic, so be nice.
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Sir.
Sir, step away from the word processor.
PROTIP: Text faces shouldn't be used in the title of your story, or anywhere at all here, barring the comments section.
Sorry. Couldn't resist. I'm pretty sure there's a way to get rid of it, right? I'll make sure to do that. Word processor?
As you asked for constructive criticism, I will give some. I know writing is a long, arduous process (usually), however, I believe it might benefit the story if you elongated the chapters, added more detail, and just in general, more to read while still supporting the story. Also, I would suggest you be a little more subtle. I know I haven't been quite helpful, so I apologize for that. So far a good story.
hi! um i Reeeeeeeeeely like you'r story and cant wate for another chapter!
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Oh no! It's the popo! GET OUT OF HERE! NAO!
Well, first of all. This is getting a bit repetitive. It's always Doctor Hooves <3 Derpy . Now, If you took a different turn on this, It would be great.
Second of all, you need to sharpen your grammar a bit. You can't make a good story without at least decent grammar.
And finally, tacos. :3
Bai.
P.S NEVER. EVER. EVER. EVER. EVER SAY FIRST STORY. It's like jumping into a pit filled with hungry cannibals.
I like it
i like it but the dactor has 2 harts so his harts melted
but also looking forword 2 more
Thanks for the help, everybody! I will be sure to take them into consideration for the next chapter. I really like this couple, and I was pretty sure a lot of other people did to, so imma stick with Doctor and Ditzy for this story at least. Wanted to make something that I liked for my first story, ya know? But anywho. Longer chapters, better grammar, here I come!
And as for the subtle part, the majority of Doctor/Ditzy stories I've read have been Ditzy fawning over the Doctor. So, I wanted to change that a bit. Besides, Ditzy could do with a little fawning. I'm really glad my fix is reaching larger audiences!
P.S- I'm still a tween, so please forgive my grammar.
1900054 This comment made me laugh.
And a little concerned.
Whoever downvoted this has no taste. While this may be a bit rough around the edges, it is still very enjoyable and I beseech you to write more.
She gave him a smile that made his heart melt. See it should be harts
Someone down voted this? Depressing. But oh, well! Thank you and I will be sure to write more. And change my error about the Doctor's heart melting. HEARTS!
Nine someone's downvoted this! Whoops.
i like it to (well i would being a com pleat dr who fan<3)
I STILL LOVE IT!
mind you 10 people have upvoted it so wooo! (i was the 10th
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well i like it being a massive dr who fan and if theirs 1 peace of advice i can give you its haters gonna hate!
so hold your head high and carry on (and yes i know i sound stupid
but its true!) 
1900214 wooo go tweens (if you haven't guessed i'm one to!
*YAAY*)
NEXT CHAPTER! NEXT CHAPTER ! I WANT TO READ THE NEXT CHAPTER!!! sorry i mean i think its reely good
now that i look back i've posted waaay to much on this mhe
Lol thanks and sorry about that but can't wait tell a new chapter
Hah. I like this. It's pretty cute. :3 I've never even seen Doctor Who, nor was I really a big fan of the ship, but this story makes me think twice.
I'm looking forward to another chapter when you are willing and able. <3
I absolutely love this story!
come on wheres is the new chapter its been like a month
9 people are butt-hurt idiots who couldn't see good writing talent if it ran them over with a truck.
Favorited: Yesh.
Spammed like button: Yesh.
MOARZ? NOM! I EAT IT AS A NOM!
I enjoyed it, I saw a few errors, I can gladly message you them if you want!
VV That'd be great, thanks!! And Rainbow Song, I do so apologize for causing any suffering.
Doctor/Ditzy!!!!
so glad you updated it would have been missed if you had left it to rot
Doctor/Ditzy, or die.
Your choice.
I believe I am being threatened. Be warned, I have all the power of ninjas, Chuck Norris, and the heart of the TARDIS on my side.
But i'll stick with Doctor/Ditzy.
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*cocks shotgun*
Oh REALLY?
I am now officially TheOne's bodyguard. Good luck getting through me and my epic skills.
And i've got Flutterguy! Ah-ha! I feel safe now!
best chapter yet! i love it buut i have utterly no flippin' idea with whitch way it should go with the whole ditzy/derpy or twilight situation but what ever I'm sure you'll wright it amazingly!
Glad you like it! Might write the next one tonight, or tomorrow. Or in a few months.
2194961 *loads minigun* try him youre not getting past without going through me cheesy
I feel special now! And not in the bad way. Ya'll are too kind, too kind.
Did I forget to mention that I am a NINJA?
me again! another awesome chapter!
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dashies a fav of mine too 
i love this fanfic so much 
I'm not completely sure so don't hold me to it if it's wrong, but I think the proper grammar for that would be "AJ and mine's bet". Again, I'm not completely sure, but saying it the other way just seemed weird to me.
Also, update. I would very much like to see how the Doctor confesses to the Ditzy of Doo!
Rainbow's reaction was priceless! She probably looked something like this...
Polygrammar, now that you mention it, I do see what you mean. I'll be sure to fix it. And I'm so hyped that so many people like this fanfiction!
yay i'm first to comment btw it was awesome
So much Time Lord d'awws.
One thing, Doctor/Ditzy:
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YESYESYESYESYESYESYESYES!!!