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Magic, the most powerful of the Elements Of Harmony, it binds them together and helps keep stability over Equestria. Cut that off and what happens? What happens when the threads of friendship are severed, and the flames of chaos are rekindled? For Twilight, her existence's end is simply the beginning to something much bigger. How will she act in a world deprived of the harmony it once held as a creature that must thrive on the blood that Equestria has lost?

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 343 )

Who want's to take the first post, eh, who wants it?

Comments, I want them, and I want them now!

I sense the feature box coming for this, and I haven't even read it yet.

I sense another Vampony Twilight fic. I can never get enough of these.

I saw a few places where the wrong punctuation was used, but otherwise flawless in that respect.

Story was good. Not rushed, but not drawn-out either.

I've never seen you on here, but I'm going to assume you have experience with what you're doing here.[s/]

^Disregard what I said here. I didn't recognize your mastery.^

Am watching, and expecting the next chapter within the next month. (That's the problem with decent fics; they never get past the first chapter. Hopefully this'll be different.)

signaling that a collapse was immanent

'Imminent', my friend.

Still, as soon as the prospect of an assignment from her beloved teacher came up, she ponced at it at a second's notice.

I do believe it's spelled 'pounced'.

This is good. You've got the characters down pat. Maybe a bit more Pinkie talk?

Near the beginning, word choice seems the tiniest bit off. Maybe it's just me, though.

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Thanks, I'll fix those soon.

Off to a good start. I think I'll reserve my reviews until I get a better idea as to where this story is going, but so far, so good.

I WANT MORE! :pinkiecrazy: It seems to to be going in the right direction, Keep up the good work!:twilightsmile:

hope to see more of this :D

MOAR I WANT MOAR *cough* ahem hm yes well good job I like where this is going.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

well shit this is how you start a fic lol chaos and death

Hrm, I should let you know that one of my pet peeves is logical holes in an otherwise excellent story. Having that happen to a pony results in near instant death, and you have written that quite well. But the description says that this story is not done with Twilight yet. I hope you have a good, and more importantly, internally consistant logic behind her resurrection.

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Don't worry, I tend to keep an eye on the story's structure since plot holes can ruin the entire thing in the span of a single chapter.

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Ha, don't fret, dear reader, because I plan on giving you much...
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Why is everyone talking like this? I don't even know! And also, interesting story, time to floow and favourite for more!:pinkiecrazy:

Vampony Twilight... I like the opening! It sets the mood and has a decent fight scene.

I trust your work from Familiar Embrace, so you get an upvote and a favorite from me. :yay:

Keep up the good work sir! :pinkiehappy:

Capter 1

The End

good first chapter!
i still have a few points i would like to address though: everything happened a little quickly; first there's the vague mission from celestia at the very beginning, the girls really took a sudden huge stone golem in strides as well, there was barely any fear or surprise, they then just as quickly started attacking without paus at twilight's command, makes them seem like a trained combat force mentally. twilight was conveniently quickly drained from what didn't seem like very much as well. i would love to see the chapter expanded upon a little.
still, i look forward to seeing more of this, the story line seems very interesting.

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Surprise mate, bigtime, your instincts take over and the adrenaline forces you to use excessive force. Twilight could have killed the golem by concentrating on it's exposed portion, but the rush made her spend all of her power on a spell that deserves to be nerfed.

COMMENTS, SUGGESTIONS, CORRECTIONS GO HERE! AND DON'T LAY OFF ON THEM!
Please.

THAT was amazing, really gripping actually. when i look back on my earlier comment it feels like that chapter was just thrown in there to support this chapter. so really; GREAT chapter!:raritystarry: im so looking forward to more!:pinkiehappy:

i have to ask; who's your editor?

WAKE UP, MUTHAFUCKA!

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:moustache:I don't have one.:moustache:

PS:I write them in one go.

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really?:rainbowhuh: i have to say; you're very good at avoiding mistakes then. you might want to get one anyway though; if only for pre-release feedback, always good to hear someone else's thoughts before submitting it to the masses.

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Yeah, but do you wanna wait the extra week during which they flesh out the story?

i have to say, for having no editor and how quick the chapters come, there is a surprising lack of errors in this story. the pacing is good, and the story flows beautifully. Celestia's reaction is just how id imagine it would be, mind you, i wouldnt have minded some insight on how the mane six feel, you know, besides sad. all in all, another great chapter. eagerly awaiting the next one.

I dunno why, but most vampire-twilight stories work out well...maybe because the Vampire story we gots here in Reality-land using Lady Sparkle's name sucks.

Dis Prinny approves, dood.:twilightsmile:

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Soon we will meet the main six, I avoided them on purpose in order to create the illusion of mystery, and to keep readers on edge.

More. Now. Or die. :trollestia:

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:twilightangry2:-Death? PFFFFT, BIZNATCH PLEASE! I'M TWILIGHT SPARKLE !

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That's counterintuitive, if he's dead, he can't write more pony words, can he?

I like where this is going things are getting good:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Excellent chapter! :pinkiehappy:

I really liked the depiction of the grief. With how deeply ingrained Twilight was in their lives, she would not be easily forgotten. :fluttercry:

Can't wait to see what happens next! :yay:

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Just because I think I should clear things up, but I probably don't need to, it was mostly the ponies who only knew her as a hero to Equestria, not as a friend, who forgot her.

1697711 Ahem...

:flutterrage:: No corrrections to be had as of yet!

But now it's pardon the pun, The Dawn of the Dead.

Wow. Just...wow.

That was an excellent introduction, I am looking forward to the body of the tale!

:pinkiegasp:Alicorn guards

They can fly the carriage AND levitate thier swords:rainbowkiss:

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Shit, i'll steal their magic! Off to the first chapter before anybody else notices!

Sorry for the long delay, but my internet was down for a couple of days, so go ahead and have 7000+ words for waiting. Like always, give me your suggestions, corrections, or just be a good ol' chap and leave a comment.

Also, enjoy the stupid Meme reference, I'm that evil, I'll ruin a scene with just two words.

PS: DAMM, TWO STORIES, TWO FEATURES, just wow.

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its nice to see some awesome stories up in that feature box. congrats on getting them in there.

Seems good. Will read later. Also LOL ive used that exact same pic. Vampire fic?

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