I am practically Twilight Sparkle.
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Twilight Sparkle: magician, scholar, bearer of the element Magic, and most of all, friend.
A bat, a book, and a bite can change so much of that, and bring darkness to her heart.
Can you keep your friendships when you might hurt those around you?
If you want to hurt them?
Bloodlust can bring an end.
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Switching between here and metal videos on youtube gives me the strangest ads.
As long as Twilight Sparkle doesn't actually sparkle like twilight this will be a good story.
Okay, first things first, I like the writing of the story so far, no mistakes of any sort that I could recall.
Now, for the story in general, I like the thought and idea of Twilight being a vampire; which raises questions, and sparks my curiousity on what is going to happen, surely she can't keep depriving herself of blood for too long, which makes me think she might eat out one of her friends. <- (No puns intented.)
So, now, time for my main question; does this mean that Twilight is going to be more powerful? Considering the coverart and idea in general of the vampony, unless the author intented Twilight to be stopped then most likely her powers would be feeble, which wouldn't be too interesting because she would just be stopped before her rain of fun could happen.
Anyway, looking forward to more, I like it so far overall.
Ehh.... This amuses me. I shall mark it for later dissection shall I?
I don't think I've read this particular breed of fanfic before... and I scoured at least a fifth of the adventure-tagged stories for good reads. Consider me intrigued.
Oh yeah, and also, could this be added in the 'Alicorn Twilight' group or is this only temporary?
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As a metalhead myself, I agree to this relevancy.
Also, a vampire story that isn't related to Twilight (The book)?
Color me interested.
DUD DUH DUH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I'm gonna have to be "that guy" who nitpicks over every little thing wrong, right?
*sigh* Right...
The first thing i see wrong is: As an afterthought, she told him he could help himself to their store of ice cream in down there.
The "in" should not be in that sentence.
The second: Curled up in a little ball, Fluttershy was softly weeping into her hair.
Shouldn't that be "mane" instead of "hair"?
Next: “Fluttershy, everything will be alright, but only if let me do this,”
Insert "you" in between "if" and "let."
Yet another: “”Can you make sure it doesn’t hurt like last time?”
Take out one of the quotation marks at the beginning.
Largest mistake so far: Her horn glowed and her eyes turned white momentarily. Her horn glowed and her eyes turned white momentarily.
Duplicate sentence, I think the solution is obvious.
Next: Then she noticed the smell, burnt wood.
Replace the comma (,) with a colon (:).
Spelling error: Had her baby dragon been spared form the explosion?
Form->From.
Extremely interesting story idea. I sense much potential with this one, but I would strongly suggest you invest in a competent pre-reader and/or editor. I look forward to seeing this story unfold.
~The Anonymous Troll
This is better than the twilight saga!....ok that's not fair I shouldn't be comparing them, twilight sux and this should be the movie
Also i thought vampires didn't have a reflection?
its vamponies so shush they have reflection it is cannon now
kinda like these vamponies stories
yey; another twi goes vampony story!
i love these, to bad the there ain't that many 
on the story, awesome, others have already pointed out the problems i noticed so i wont go into that
This story has potential, definetly tracking
please write more soon
406150 Believe me, that will NOT happen.
407157 Writing right now! I'm just taking a small break to rid me of writer's block.
This is going to be one epic adventure!
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Sorry, but if you recall, all twilight's magic has sparkles.
Ironically, this looks good enough (at least as far as I have read) to be worth a read despite the obvious hurricane of puns that will be rearing it's ugly head as the story continues. I await more.
Interesting. I can see you worked hard on this, though for some reason it feels like you rushed the ending. Thats not to say it's bad, just rushed. I think it a good start at least, and I hope to see more soon.
406186 Well, it certainly isn't going to be like Cupcakes, but you will see some grossness in a few chapters.
where twilight gets knocked out "eventualy she became uncousous" or something like that doesnt make sense somethng like that should knock you out when she hits the wall but greaat story (fluttershys faces when twilights spell wnet bloom in order
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dont know why she was happy seeing how twlight is awsome n all mabey she was jealous
I shall review this further when it has been updated. tracking this.
Probally the third fic I've seen with that cover, and the second I've favorited, but...
Now the question to ask is "Why does Zecora have that particular book handy?"
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Indeed.
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Well, she is a very wise zebra, she probably has it so she can make or try to make cures of it.
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Loving this idea so far, though I have to wonder why she is able to go out into the daylight, or are we playing by Twilight rules? (no pun intended, I am referring to the book series)
413878 My own version of vampires, although someone most likely done it before.
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Mmk, well looking forward to it, and glad to know you're not attached to to Twilight idea going into this. Keep up the good work
414268 Gah, the Twilight series. I used to like them, then I actually looked at the books, and went, "Nah, these suck, I'll stick to LOTR."
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Fair enough, at least you can say you gave them a chance. 
Bwahhaa!
I wonder, Is she an actual alicorn? The whole 9 yards? I suppose her form of longevity and strength are different, but she seems to have all the basics covered... and If her magic got any stronger with the affliction...
Oh well, I can;t wait to see how Celestia reacts. I can see one of two things, one she will be exasperated and mournful. Two, she will be ecstatic and happy that she will never have to lose her faithful student... who knows What she may have come up with in those thousand years. Or what if.... Dun Dun Duuuuun shes a vampire too!
What a tweeest!
414629 You'll see, you'll see. Anyways, love your avatar!
414007 So... Vampies without the weakness to the sun? I'm scared now.
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I'm sorry I had to I just had to
Interesting. Are we playing by the "Vampires are immortal unless killed in a certain way" rule?
413393 Why indeed.
413393 come on its zecora that like asking how does pinkie pie do half teh stuff she does
So the vampires in this story are like skyrim vampires? Cept the wings
Im liking the story so far
A Disease called Sanguine Vampris? Somepony's been playing Skyrim. :3c
Heavy approves of dis new story.
416356 Yep, it seemed to go well with the story idea. And, just look at my username!
Hey Twi has one advantage... now she and Luna can go flying together.
And I certainly hope the "sun burns you into ashes" thing doesn't hold for her... at least not at first. Maybe later as a result of trying to fix the problem, but not at the start!
I can't wait for more of this.
there's been a few ideas pertaining to vampires and sunlight. i think the original mytho had them weakened by sunlight but not necessary destroyed instantly and turned to ash. personally i think sunscreen prevents vampires from being too affected by the sun
Love the story so far!
414950 Looks so. Time to get my Plasma Cutter.
413393 The question is, "Why not?"
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422332 Heh.. sorry. My writing was not up to its usual quality, so I scratched what work I had. I don't what to give you guys a crappy chapter. Should be up by tomorrow.
interesting tidbits here, needs more meat though
FIRST!
Not bad, but it feels a bit rushed. Kind of like you wrote a draft but didn't feel the need, or maybe didn't have the time, to double check it. Oh well, it's still good, just not your best.
Ok. Idea is good and interesting.
The writing is a bit dry and quite accelerated. Everything feels like it's moving at too fast of a pace.
Sorry guys, it's my first time writing something this big. This was a hard chapter to get through, one of those that you don't want to do but have to. I'll work on modifying it.
423867 I can barely convince myself to make any chapters! You actually get work done.
If I got turned into a vampire, I'd probably spend the first while flying around too. Then depending on whether or not I could surpress my bloodlust, I'd either become a vigilante hero or take over the world.