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Five years have passed since Spike fulfilled his dream, five years since he got the girl, five years since happiness seemed assured to him in his life. He now lives with a standing relationship with the best dressmaker in Equestria, but it hasn't been all sunshine and smiles for him like he expected it to be. Ever since his departure from Ponyville, his dreams have been plagued by thoughts of what he left behind, what could have been. They are dreams that allow his heart to speak, and they sing out in a beautiful chorus splashed with lavender.

His past has been set, but his future has not. Will he live with what he's got, or will he be the same enthusiastic romancer he once was to try and achieve something better with a faded flame?

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 139 )
Aldon #1 · Jan 13th, 2013 · · 6 · Strife ·

sry but i dont read incomplete stories...tough the sinopsis is really interesting hope to read it soon :twilightsmile:

Here you go, dear readers and/or esteemed followers, I give you the second Spilight fiction I will be working on. I'll warn you, updates may suffer because I'm split by three stories at the same time, but I'll do my best.

Inferno demon Dash, I know you're out there you sneaky little devil,

and Referee, give me a hand (hoof?) with the editing in this, please.

Anyway hope you enjoy if this gets accepted. Also, don't expect that teen tag to stay up there, although you will be able to skip the scene that'll pump it up.

This is quite good to say the least. A little rough with the tones, but that's my taste and not effectively changeable on your end.
The premise has me more intrigued than anything. I do have a single question though. The cover art has Twilight with two hours. Will that be the same in the story?

1952159

Yup, I couldn't find anything different than that, so I decided to go with it. It's just a minor detail that was included with the brief description I gave in the first chapter, although I would love to smooth out the roughness a bit. Where exactly was that at?

Damn your good :rainbowlaugh: I can spot a Spilight a mile away though and will always be there to read my favorite pairing, I'm a loyal bastard like that. Anyway you just reminded :derpytongue2:me of why I dislike Spike/Rarity so much and why Rarity is least favorite pony in my eyes: she's a bitch. Though I am very interested in why Twilight is a dragon and what caused her to change species? You know you have my full attention and support brother, let's see how this plays out. Lol.

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The paragraph starting with:

The ponyequins dressed in his marefriend's creations greeted his arrival to the living room of his house, their faceless heads all seemingly turned to look at him.

seems unnecessary to be placed in and about two sentences in I wasn't sure why I was reading it and skipped to the next paragraph.

The paragraph where Spike steps in front of the mirror seems to detract from the light of observation in the same why the first example did. It made me question what it was doing there and how that was of a certain importance.

These are where I found it rough. I really just think it's how I was reading them and not the words themselves but there you have it.
-Sturrn

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Yeah, you're probably right. Their only purpose there is to add a little more life to the scene, but they're entirely useless to the overall story, except for Spike describing himself to the readers.

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Let's just agree, I should stop nagging on perfectly good narrative and go read the update for Familiar Embrace that I think I may have missed. Not sure.
-Sturrn

not to mention that he wanted to show off his new size

... Mind, get out of the gutter:trollestia:

But on another note; how did Twilight get two horns and became a dragon? That is the million dollar question on my end.

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:moustache: - "You're going to have to wait for the second chapter, my good companion."

PS: Double entendres can be so fun at times, can't they.

>Looks at cover image

"Uh, Twi? Why are ya a dragon?" :applejackunsure:

More Spilight? I feel spoiled. :yay:

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Your cover image is so fitting for your comment, and yes, more Spilight for the dear readers and/or followers that like this story. Not to mention the other 70000 word Spilight I'm writing.

1952342 Familiar embrace was/is awesome, really hope this will be as great as that one, but I'm not really afraid of that not happening :raritywink:

Another TwiSpike from you? And it has dragon Twilight? Why can't I upvote this more often?

CDR

Dragon Ride
Same (cover) Artist?

Thumbs upped and followed. This was interesting. I liked the premise of Rarity and Spike already having been together and him growing dissatisfied with the relationship. It's a fresh take on the subject, and I kinda think this would happen if they ever actually started dating. That and to me Sparity is as interesting as a cardboard box, whereas Twike is my favorite ship :trollestia:
One thing bothers me though. How did Spike get to Ponyville? How far away from Canterlot is it? It's just that the transition was a bit jarring for me. Nothing about how he'd get there or how long it took. Broke me out of the story for a bit :derpytongue2:

:moustache: :You have what you wanted but why am I still crave for more!?
MADMAN03: Damn man this is one good SpiLight can't wait for the next one!

(Joke) Alt. Title: Let The Flames Die, Please

Dragon Twilight? I have been looking for one of these forever! :heart:
:twilightsmile: instafave :moustache:

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Canterlot in this story is about 3/4 of a day ride by train, whereas he can run there in about an hour if he really pushes himself.

If I can, I'll smooth out that scene in the first chapter.

Oh god the suspense :rainbowkiss: After catching up on Familiar Embrace and plannng on reading Twilit Blood Pact, this story appears out fo the blue :twilightsmile: You my friend, have gotten my interest. Please continue.

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Whatever happened to not reading Spilight fanfictions, not that I'm complaining, but I'm just curious?

-Me gusta- Good chapter cousin ^3^ I really like the paragraphs. So... BYE :pinkiesmile:

obsession?:twilightblush:
spellmissfire?:facehoof:
both?:heart:
who knows find out on the next episode of *crash*.....oh ship not again.....*BANG*.........*screeming*
oh god please not th-*CRACK*
welp now thats taken care of cant wait for the next part until then ill be getting rid of some........trash......
laters.:pinkiecrazy:

Yay, dragonXdragon Spilight! :twilightsheepish:

"What kind of witchcraft/blackmagic shizznit/science was Twilight trying to pull off?", you might ask.

"Read on!", I will say.:trollestia:

A dragon Twilight!? :twilightoops:
AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!
This story?
GREAT!
Please continue you really have a talent on your hands here!:pinkiehappy:

To anyone who reads this, would you mind 'liking' this story if you actually like it. I don't want to sound like a greedy whore here, but I don't get why some readers favorite the story without giving it the green thumb.

Any answers to this question of life, or do I have to go and stare into the mystical cup of cocoa?

I WAS just nitpicking last chapter. This one was very similar and I liked it just fine. Only thing I want to know is why Fluttershy donated a grandfather clock. Where did she get it? I look to the cocoa for answers!
-Sturrn

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Stare into the chocolaty goodness, watch as the vision of Fluttershy ripping apart a timberwolf to craft a clock she didn't even want shows up in the abyss of sweetness.

In order to avoid another trip into trip into his subconscious mind
right before she explains why she's a dragon.
only thing i noticed.

Anyway it's bucking awesome so far keep it up:yay:

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Thank you, I redid the chapter and I must have forgotten to take that off.

The buck did I not notice that I had an update on this?:twilightangry2: Would have read in a second:rainbowlaugh: Damn bro, you have some very, very, VERY seriously talent, and your a complete natural at writing Spike, I would love it if you could help me with my own :yay: Poor Spike, he is having second thoughts on his 'love' for Rarity though this makes me wonder what Sweeite Belle's thoughts are? Wonder where Apple Bloom and Scootaloo went? And you put God, are you talking of just one in this story or will there be more? Huh...this really made my night, poor Twi is trapped in that body but I'm glad she's got the hang of it.

GO SPILIGHT!!!!!:yay::moustache:

1957323 And yes, cocoa solves ALLL!!!!

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Truly, you are the most positive commenter I have ever had the pleasure of having.

PS- If you ever need help with brushing up your Spike on a specific scene I can help you out if I have the free time. I'm just sayin', but you manage well on your own, Every writer puts that little flavor into their stories, I for one make Spike seem like a shy teenager who can let his inhibitions go if he really wants to.

1957628 Lol, it's an honor to be told such and to be a fan and author friend of your work my brother:ajsmug:

And thank you, that would mean a lot to me, I like giving Spike a darker view seeing how he is a dragon and that dark and selfish urges don't just disapper like magic, you know?:derpytongue2:

1957654

I hear you, and I've noticed that personalty being used in your stories so you're doing good at implementing it.

On a side note right here I'm just going to say that I've noticed that clop-fics receive abou 4X the views of a regular romance fic with a clop scene. Intersesting.

So, with that in mind, I've decided to post the 18+ goodies as a separate story that'll house the mature chapter(s) of this, post it on the clop-fic only page, and watch as the herd of cloppers gets drawn to it like moths to a fly, potentially trapping many of them with the old phrase,

"Came for the clop, stayed for the story."

I'll see if it's an effective technique or not.

~Ink Stroke The Kind

Well I did clicked the like option and favorite this.
So far I love the whole idea. I specially love Rarity being a selfish btich, wich she actually is anyway, but it's great to see it at full force. Though I have to say that some of the elements are a bit exaggerated, and some other just down right exaggerated.
But so far it's been a very enjoyable. Specially considering this is my fav. couple. But you already now that.
Hope to read more of this, and from Familar Embrace. :twilightsmile:

1957674 Thank you bro:ajsmug:

And wow, seriously? Damn, that's massive, shit I'll be keepiong an eye out for that:yay: And good idea.

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Yeah, I'll try to be better with their emotions, but you have to know something about all of my stories.

Every personality plays a part.

Every exaggerated feeling is matched.

And, especially, anypony can be the main antagonist for this story.

But I already know who that is, and you probably have an idea close to mine too, but I'm gonna spice up the conflict in this.

So... Spilight, where we've Spike dating Rarity, where the bad side of Rarity has been, exaggerated. Turning her into a bitch. Which, she is not. I mean, she is the ELEMENT OF GENEROISTY

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I was reffering more to the elements of the set up, rather than the characters feelings. But it's ok. And I have faith in you.

1958100

Just so you think about what you did with the dislike button, do realize that rarity wasnt being a bitches. We all have our flaws, hers is not being able to listen, and just because shes the elementof honesty doen's give her a free 'mary sue' pass. The exagarations on the other hand are my way emphasizing real world conflicts, the one in this one being dissatisfaction in a relationship due to rushing it. Yes rarity had some issues in the first chapter, hut you've only seen one scene with her and you're already disliking her?

I develop on emotions, just how I could have easily turned this romance into a pure clopfic by the second chapter, so give it a chance of you find the time to actually read more of rarity's internal thoughts befote jus assuming I'm going to turn her into a mega bitch.

-with respect, Ink Stroke.

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Actually, I haven't read this at all, nor disliked it. Just read the comments and made my own comment. Not exactly the nicest thing I admit, but I'm trying to get a feel of the story so I know whenever or not I want to read it.

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Forgive me for the accusation, I just assumed you had pressed it because of the nature of your comment.

Ironic actually, I'm telling you not to make assumptions yet I make one myself.

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Indeed, very ironic. Through I have to say, I'm not using the fact that Rarity is the elemental of generoisty to excuse her, I'm saying that its an important part of her character that shouldn't be forgetting, which has been downplayed if the comments about her being a bitch is true

You sir gave me a boner

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