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eragon13666
I'm a writer, always have been always will be. My intrests are for making stories mostly about Changelings, because really; they need love to. Enjoy my stories, leave a like and comments.
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Yes, another changling story
You just made my day
The typo on the title will make people assume this is a sub par story, like judging a book for it's cover. Correct it.
Fun fact, changelings originated from an old legend about spirits that would take children then change into the child and pretend to be them
Keep up the story, it's got my attention
1663640 yeha i found that out when i had to do a histor report on them
1663665 I just googled changeling, but I do love changeling fanfics, seriously, this is good
1663679 Thanks, i'm glad so far, even though it was a short start lol
1663553fixed thanks
1663523Thank you, i've noticed what you mean and have changed it, thank you.
1663488well then im glad
This is a good beginning so far, but I feel like the wording of how things occur is just... off.
Don't misjudge my opinion though, I really like the idea you came up with, I just feel some descriptions could've been written better.
Please accept my up rate.
This has great potential, and is well-written for the most part--I think all you need to do is give this (and future chapters) a few more runs over with self-correcting to catch all the little things like typos and missing/misplaced words.
Awesome start, man! Looking forward to reading more of this!
a changeling fic?!
insta fav!
I look forward to more.
Unusual good start, but I think you need to improve the word selection for your narration.
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I felt the same way.
1664032Yes i see what you mean after rereading it, thank you.
I like the idea, but the execution is lackluster. Your story is riddled with incorrect words. Your word choice is a little wierd at times as well. I've tracked it for now and if you can polish it up I'll certainly look forward to the next few chapters
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I really feel as if I was just thrown into the circumstances of the story, as well.
You mention how Lightning meets this Changeling, but where is the bonding that occurs between them?
Or will that all become clear later in the story?
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Sweet!
More please! 
Nice.
I love the update and have been waiting for it.
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this is all my feels
This...I like. Dis gon be gud.
1670363 funny
Good story, I love it
1693890 thanks
1668301 This will indeed become clearer in the story late ron, what happen is two diffrent things, Light is telling hs story when when he first meets Saki, and also the part when he can Saki are in prsion, so pretty much it's two diffrent stories in one.
You spelt "bowl" blow and you spelt months as mouths.... twice I laughed at the Princess wanting to know what Lightning did to Saki's mouth.
1694550 fixed and thanks
Update yay
(to point out something wierd: you wrote tried twice turing the last part, where I think it should have been tired?)
“So…are you really going to fill that book with or story?” she asked me as I thought about it and nodded.
just a quick point out but i'm loving the story so far just saw the tragedy tag so my heart sunk a lil but I'm sure the end will still be good in its own little way.
A great story so far, looking forward to much much more of it
1701283 Well the day i posted this i was under the weather, and still wrote it, because i had this chapter in my head. i was worried that if i did not write it, i would lose it in my crazy mind forever lol. but yeah, i was slightly tried and i wanted Light to be like that as well.
THE GRAMMAR IT BURNS!!!!
ya noticed a lot of errors... a LOT
good thing I don't care too much about things like that so long as i know what was meant
Short but none the less good, I'm really looking forward to reading more of this story as soon as the next chapter is out
is good. anyway the story looks like it needs an editor i'd be willing to help if you want.
1713206 go right ahead then please
Liking the character development so far as well as the relationship's tale. But it seems just ever so slightly rushed, as if you are going to skip telling the WHOLE bonding story and just stick with the big parts.
I love lots of detail when it comes to developing the characters and their relationships. It makes it easier and better to "relate" to in a sense. That way, when something something sad, scary, happy or touching happens, it hits you, right in the feels.
Looking forward to the next chapter, keep up the good work!
Over all good chapter. some minor errors however that can be overlooked as there not that distracting. cheers
last part of chapter in a nut shell: D'awwwwwwwwwwwww
Hm... I wonder if the little "argument" with Luna will help or harm in the long run. It could go either way, depending on what Luna thinks about this "immune to Changeling powers" thing he's got and whether Luna manages to see past her anger in order to move beyond Light's words and understand what he actually said.
A lot of little typos in this chapter; might want to go over it a couple times (more).
Still a good chapter, content-wise! Nice, slow progress on the plot.
Please keep writing! This is so good
1793964 Saki would agree
Little over dramatic with that banishing to the moon. Especially it was more symbolic for Luna, you know Princess of night what lower moon etc.
Excellent. I can't wait for the next chapter!
This is a fairly nice story so don’t get me wrong when I say this but it can be a bit jerky sometimes. Often the dialogue don’t quite fit, a prime example being Luna’s talk with Light a few chapters back. The arguments were flat and uncreative to say the least with little effort on Light’s part to properly express his views.
There are also a few continuity errors here and there along with a lot of plot relevant information that feels like it’s being chucked in as it goes. This means you might want to look into rewriting it a bit, I know it’s a pain but it’s necessary at this point if you want the narrative to flow properly.
Either way, best of luck with it.
PLEASE BE A HAPPY ENDING!
well ship we got some awsome shit happening right here