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hell00001


Hit 'im wit the dougie.

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This story is a sequel to Roses are Red


Two years since the events of Roses are Red, Lilo and Carbon have come to grow closer to each other more and more. With Lilo now set on having what appears to be a permanent love source, and with Carbon seemingly happier than ever, the two have managed to form a powerful romantic bond. However, when an enemy returns who they had previously thought to be long gone, one of them must come to terms with the horrible realities behind securing their relationship.

Warning: Spoilers in the comments.

The sequel to Roses are Red is finally here! Please make sure you read that story before starting this one. (Optional, of course, but it would be quite silly if you didn't)

A big thanks to Redracer and Happycamper for proofreading my chapters.

Disclaimer: My Little Pony, Friendship is Magic © Hasbro, DHX Media. Certain characters, along with the names of the locations depicted in this story, belong to Hasbro and its respected affiliates. In no way do I plan on redistributing or selling this story in the means to make a profit unless I have consent from Hasbro itself.

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So, he gets arrested in Canterlot. His crimes are known in Canterlot. His face is known in Canterlot.

And he goes back into business in Canterlot immediately after escaping from the dungeon in Canterlot?

Zumas, Zumas, Zumas. When are you going to learn that crime doesn't pay.

Well, except for theft and fraud. They pay pretty well.

Violets are fucking purple. WHY DOES NOBODY UNDERSTAND THIS?!

You're both right actually. It's technically indigo which is a bluish purple color. :twilightsmile: Seems like an interesting enough continuation so far. Fave'd.

Okay, why did they free Zumas? There are plenty of other whorehouses in Canterlot surely.

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Thank you so much! :twilightsmile:

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That's for me to know and for you to find out. :raritywink:

Now for the dreaded waiting, love the story. Can't wait to see my favorite changeling again. And I'm happy I have an account to keep track of my favorite stories now. Thank you for another excellent chapter. I now pray for Lilo and Carbon. Zumas :twilightangry2: .

HOLY KIMCHI THERE'S A SEQUEL?!?!?!?!? SQUEEEEE!!!!!!!!!! :heart::heart::heart::heart::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

3156900 And the evil dude is out for revenge?!?!?!?! :raritydespair::rainbowderp::pinkiegasp::derpyderp1::twilightoops::applejackunsure::fluttershysad:

I will admit, I'm unbelievably tempted to follow this like no other, but...
Tragedy.
That one tag, ten thousand times scarier than all of the darks, humans and crossovers combined is my deepest, darkest fear.
I'll keep tabs on this for the time being, but I think that if this story starts to love up to the tag, the love I have for your characters will scare me away :fluttercry:

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It's what I've had planned from the beginning. I'm hoping that through these stories that I'm writing, I can also express morals and words of wisdom that I find to be important to any person. Perhaps my stories are a bit tragic because of that, and quite a few of my readers have come to call me the "Harbinger of Death," (I feel oddly in tune with G. R. R. Martin) but I feel proud that my readers love my stories and my characters so much. Thank you for that! I really appreciate it knowing that I've left an impression, even if that means you don't want to read this story because of it. :twilightsmile:

“Beautiful, isn’t it?” Carbon asked, looking at a snowman as their boat floated past.

Snow MAN? It happens again later on. Cute chapter :)

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I'll make a blog post the next time I'm streaming! I'm a few hours into the game by now, but never hurts to watch me to shit my pants and run away from things. I'm the biggest baby when it comes to horror games. I might be streaming tomorrow. I'm taking a break tonight.

So, Zumas is an idiot. I mean, staying in Canterlot, after just escaping from jail, in order to get back at the two ponies, who are now probably on terms with the princesses, and Queen Chrysalis. (Zumas has no idea how viscous a changeling queen can be. I hope he likes being torn to shreds.)

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Please don't be in tune with G.R.R. Martin. He's not a good role model. The writing in his stories wasn't bad, in fact I would say that he's quite talented, except that there's one huge, massive, crippling flaw in his stories: It's completely impossible to actually care about anyone in his books.

I read Game of Thrones back before it was popular (:coolphoto:), so I didn't have anyone to warn me about it. By half way through, I had just completely stopped caring what any of the characters did because I knew what the inevitable outcome would be. Oh, look. Things are going well. Who knows, maybe that one character I like won't end up like....oh who am I kidding. Let me go ahead and set the timer to see how long it takes for things to go horribly wrong this time around.....

I got a joke for ya! Why doesn't George R.R. Martin have a Twitter account?
--Cause he'd just end up killing all 140 characters! :rainbowlaugh:

But seriously though, I wish you luck and I'll probably not be reading this (which makes me sad, because I love when good stories get sequels....) because I avoid tragedies. I usually double check with the author to make sure the story will actually be a tragedy and that it's not just a misused tag, but since you've pretty much already cleared that up already I'll be on my way. Maybe I'll check back again later just to see if things have taken an unexpected turn.

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To be honest, I debated a long time on whether or not to use the tragedy tag. It's either I get backlash from one group of people or I get backlash from another, so I have to pick to satisfy one group or another. By trying to avoid spoilers here, you can probably see which group I decided to please based upon FiMFiction trends. (As much as I hate to admit it, perhaps I sold out in this regard.) I would much rather prefer to use the tragedy tag correctly--where some character undergoes a tragic downfall and is left ruined (everyone is familiar with Oedipus)--but judging from what I have read in the comments of other friend's stories, I felt the need to avoid such comments.

Perhaps I will remove the tragedy tag in favor of the sad tag as the ending of this fic has a purpose rather than simply to be an "ending." I'll consider it once I get one or two more chapters out.

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I didn't intend for my comment to come across as a complaint, I just couldn't resist commenting because you mentioned George R.R. Martin. If you want your story to be a tragedy, then do what you gotta do. It's your story so write it the way you want.

I mean, I don't enjoy tragedy myself, but if that's what you wanna write then do it. I just always ask when I see it show up on a story because I've seen more than a few stories pick up a tragedy tag just because tragic things happen and not because the story is an actual tragedy. No sense in missing out on a story I might otherwise enjoy just because it's got an erroneous tag.

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No no, I didn't see your comment as a complaint! I thought it more as criticism and I'm taking it to heart by reevaluating my choice for using the tragedy tag. I feel as though I might have picked the tag so as to appeal to the majority of FimFiction who see tragedy as something tragic in the story happens rather than as a genre. I probably have misused the tag as you have pointed out, so the best I can do is consider what you said. :twilightsmile:

I took into consideration and then replaced the Tragedy tag with the Sad tag.

Good...good...:moustache:

This story is gonna twist on me.
And my heart race with this twisted sad story.:fluttercry:

This chapter is sweet and all.

Roses are red
Violets are blue
This little changeling here
Has fallen for you :heart:

Pink Carbon... I would feel bad for him if I didn't think it was so funny.:rainbowlaugh:

pink? I think I but a gut jest now :rainbowlaugh: . As lovely a story as ever, now with funnies too!:pinkiehappy:

Seriously though I'm so glad to see a story update after going so long without, one of the stories I've been heading just went on hiatus so this is a beacon in the dark for me.

I think it's time I finally browsed your stories.

>>alexanderhunt88 that was so adorable. :heart:

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Oh no, anything but that! The only two even worth reading are Roses are Red and Violets are Blue. The others are just my horrible attempts at trying to wing it and write something with a large universe. Looking back on my unfinished "Lullaby to the Moon" trilogy, I really should have put some more thought and time into the organization, skeleton, and prewriting of the fic. I had just started writing then and had no idea what I was getting myself into. :twilightblush:

>>hell00001

I actually saw two I found interesting, obscurum descensus, and the gift of life. I put them in my read later, because I remembered that I promised a friend I'd read ' Memory Pending ', which I'm finding to be very good at horrifying me, but I like it. I'm starting to realize that I'm addicted to romances despite the fact that I hate getting to close to people and fictional characters. Dysphoria broke my heart in that aspect. Anyways, have a good night:twilightsmile:!

You know the song "Lido Shuffle"? I should write a "Lilo Shuffle".

I don't like this Zumas character one bit.

A surprise in the park? I wonder what it is.:pinkiehappy:

Call an ambulance, I'm having an overdose of cute. :fluttershyouch:

*puts on Batmane mask* get ready, cuz here comes the darkness

Ahhh, why must there be a sad tag??? :fluttercry:
Readers, tell me: Is it worth it?

Nice chapter, im really developing an anger towards zumas and those "hater" ponies.

ohmygoshohmygoshohmygosh!!! Carbon you finaly did it!:pinkiehappy:

Here comes the bad part:ajbemused:

Zumas, if i could travel to your universe as my pony then I would bite you bucking head off and devour you corpse for good measure. Nothing anypony said could save your worthless life.:twilightangry2:

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That's quite an impression he's left on you, there. :scootangel:

Where are the princesses when you need them???

Oh right, up in the castle doing princess stuff :facehoof:

Yes, it's so wonderful to see Chrysalis get such a positive role.:twilightsmile: Don't see that to often.:scootangel:

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Quite. I figured - depending on how you look at Chrysalis' character - that she has some pretty redeeming qualities about her. Just need to get past the arrogant, parasitic, and possibly even succubus nature of herself. :twilightsmile:

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Succubus? Come now it's just the way they were made, unless they live near some sort of corruptive power, or a curse. Honestly, the changelings could be the most useful ponies out there for certain jobs. Just imagine if you had some sort of criminal out there and you didn't know what he looked like but knew he was in the room or in the crowd. If you had a pony with the ability to taste/detect emotion and feelings you have the potential to root them out pretty easily. This however is not said with your story in mind, just an example.

i see all the comments about chryssi being good and all that nice stuff:pinkiehappy:. but did anyone notice how her eyes shined when she agreed to "marry them".:rainbowderp::rainbowhuh:

i sense a non-good intent. . .

idk why but i had sensed that:applejackunsure:. sorry if I screwed over your insights on this chapter. . .:pinkiesad2::twilightsheepish:

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That is true. Changelings can be such useful ponies when it comes espionage, police, acting... and, wow, too many to list off. However, I kind of also figured that because of changeling nature that they would be looked down upon by other Equestrian citizens. Their parasitic abilities and their reliance on stealing love in order to sustain themselves probably would sound unheard of and even nasty or disgusting to a pony's mentality.

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That is a pretty good observation. We'll just have to wait and see. :twilightsmile:

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Seems to me they steal because almost no pony will give. Personally, I could love a changeling if they had a nice personality. and being as my own character is currently studying alteration and transmutation magic, a changeling would be able to help quite a bit in the areas where the body is concerned given there natural talent in the art.

But who would I go to for dark magic? King Sombrero is toast so no help there, and I'm not about to resurrect his flank any time soon either. Nightmare Moon on the other hoof yes.

It seems to make sense that there could be away to resurrect her. the way the Elements of Harmony seem to work is that they don't destroy stuff but rather they neutralize. They stripped the dark powers and corrupted emotions from Luna and they only turned Discord into stone (despite him being the physical manifestation of Chaos and disharmony). And they are represented by the five most important aspects of friendship and friendship itself (Because friendship is magic). :yay::raritywink::ajsmug::pinkiehappy::rainbowwild::twilightsmile:

Now for a funny question: If friendship is magic, then does that mean that Chrysalis has the most friends, or does it mean that Pinkie Pie had the most magic (overflowing, turning into Pinkie Sense and Physics defying everything)?:duck:

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