When Lighting Knight, or Light to his friends meets a Changeling in his new home, he has a few choic
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Little over dramatic with that banishing to the moon. Especially it was more symbolic for Luna, you know Princess of night what lower moon etc.
Excellent. I can't wait for the next chapter!
This is a fairly nice story so don’t get me wrong when I say this but it can be a bit jerky sometimes. Often the dialogue don’t quite fit, a prime example being Luna’s talk with Light a few chapters back. The arguments were flat and uncreative to say the least with little effort on Light’s part to properly express his views.
There are also a few continuity errors here and there along with a lot of plot relevant information that feels like it’s being chucked in as it goes. This means you might want to look into rewriting it a bit, I know it’s a pain but it’s necessary at this point if you want the narrative to flow properly.
Either way, best of luck with it.
PLEASE BE A HAPPY ENDING!
MOAR!!!
This is AWESOME!
Love the story, love the character development, but most of all LOVE THE WRITING STYLE!! I have always been a fan of stories that start out as the end and the character(s) recall or tell their tale with either: A: A book, B: Simply talking to someone or something, C: Recalling in First-person, or D: Any combination of the former.
You sir(or ma'am) has combined A B and C EPIC!!!!!
Have them ALL!
Sweet Celestia, the feels!!!!
This is one of the very few stories i have read and felt something...
Keep up the excellent work!
Saki makes fourth place one my top 10 changeling so far
This story is pretty good, but I have to ask, is English your first language?
I know Tia, and I never would have thought I'd hear here say that...
But it happened years before? Or not, maybe? I think this sub-plot would really benefit from a better ordering of events, currently it is unclear.
But she was with Granny for years.
Ok, so Granny was killed about the time Luna returned from the moon. How does Saki know Fang?
Luna isn't black.
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"the black Alicorn looked to me as I could only nod.
Luna isn't black."
Stop being racist