Macintosh has been dating Twilight steadily for over a year and a half now, but as their secret begins to come to light, will their relationship break under the stress as an unforeseen trouble brews on the horizon? Will it remain strong under fire from not one, but two over protective siblings?
And how does Twilight's growing, 'condition', effect all those who call Twilight friend, family, and lover?
<---------------D'awful Twilight and Big Macintosh drawn by cartoonlion on DeviantArt
Chapters (9)
Could use Proof Readers for later chapters... If intrested, please Private message me.
Also, anyone out there who can write could AppleJack/Macintosh dialogue?
P.S. If you Dislike it, please tell me why, don't just hit the dislike button and run off without a reason.
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What do you mean?
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I'll remember that in the future
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Shit no, Applecest just scares me. I was talking about their accent.
Being a southern man ma self, i would happily obligie to assisting you on your southern dialect
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Anyway, great story, definitely tracking and liking. Keep up the good work!
I think he's talking about incest.
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Thank you! When I was writing it I was worried it fell flat in that aspect
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I've heard it called Applecest because it involves the Apple family
barely, not barley
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You'll have to forgive me, I write on the notes on my iPhone.
I think there's already similar story to this: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/33198/Family-Matters
I'm with AJ as being a fan of FlutterMac.
This is a really good story. I noticed some interesting foreshadowing (or I hope it is) that's really peaked my attention. You sir have a thumbs up and fav from me. A well written TwiMac ship. 
1441886 Got it. How often would you need the editor to help?
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I think it's a rather common idea...
If this is anything else like this authors other reads, there should hopefully be a little more action then a normal romance story. And I'm looking forward to it!!
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Depends on how fast I can think up this story
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What do you think I'm foreshadowing?
1441977 I'm interested in editing, but with my own stuff I'm not sure I'll have the time. I think I'll stick to reading it and occasionally fixing mistakes. Good luck finding one though
So far I'd say you have it perfect as far as Mac and AJ speaking. Don't change a thing.
1441820 actually Aj usually says you as you show wise but for fics I've seen ya rather then yew as in "are ya gonna finish that pie?" I think Bronius Maximus did a blog on it once...Nope just this
Thing to remember- they're farmers not hicks, so Country accent
but I should go read this fic now...
1441995 actually their were a few things.
When writing southern style, try using gonna instead of going to
I would happily be an editor and accent assistant if you would like, no offense but you kinda need one
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Be warned, I might take your offer
Lol
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I'll take that as a yes
1442114check ur bio page
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Oh, I didn't notice any. But I don't know the southern accent very well.
I try to avoid writing AJ, Mac and AB because I have a hard time with their southern accents, actually. I try to stick to the 'Ah, Ain't, Yah' trio to get the point across and then just trust the readers minds to fill in the rest. I've read stories that try to phenotically (yikes, I bungled that spelling) spell AJ talking. It's often a disaster to read.
Which is a shame as I love listening to people with southern accents speaking. One of my top 5 favourite accents. 
Don't expect me to respond to anything in the next eight hours, I do have school tomorrow.
So this is Knight Wing retairing for the Night.
1442163 mine too. Its 3rd, right under brittish and russian. But yes, growing up in texas helps with me knowing country accent. And at times i actually have that said accent. But i understand how you can see problem in writing the accent. Most ponies do
Nice! I'm interested and as the other poster said, noticed what I hope is foreshadowing. I'll keep my thoughts to myself though. Best of luck with th e rest of the story!
I'll be watching.
Ok Now I read it, Loved it, fav'd it
small thing: he placed his head on his hand -> i think you meant hoof or hooves
Also if you need any Ideas remember this: he has Smartypants and he licked her during the Discord incident
man great chapter can't wait for more and the dialoge for AJ, Big Mac, and Applebloom seem fine, but try to use gonna and other things like that. this is the time when it payes to live in the souther part of the USA
... Twilight's pregnet isn't she?
You figure that it'd be as simple as Mac being 3-5 years older than Applejack telling her about Twilight and that he doesn't want to date Fluttershy because she mumbles too much and animals like ferrets freak him out.
This is quite similar to family matters which i love i cant wait to see your take on one of my favorite pairs
Have some derpys
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So, I'm not the only one to write stories from a phone!
cant wait till shining armour finds out!
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It can be annoying at times, but then it's every where I go so I can write whenever I feel like it
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Yeah, if she was an over protective little sister how bad does Shining Armor freak out....
Food for Thought
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my brain says thank you for that lunch
1443977 I guess I do have an advantage, where as my slider droid does have an actual keyboard lol
Love the story so far
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Sweet
1442707 i was thinking the same thing
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We shall see
Good so far, keep it going! Not the only TwiMac ship around here by a longshot, but I'm still Watching this.
I can tell you from experience: write AJ and Mac however feels most comfortable to you. Some people will write AJ as a Texas cowgirl, others will paint her as a Southern redneck. Not redneck as in, "ignorant racist stereotype", but redneck as in, "monster truck, country music, small-town farmer girl". I write her and the Apples with a deep-south Southern twang, because I'm a Carolina native, so that's the accent I feel most comfortable giving her. When I read the dialogue I've written for AJ, I want to be able to hear it as if my neighbors and girls I went to school with were speaking it. Whatever works for you. If all else fails, head to the MLP Wikia and read the transcripts of Applebuck Season and The Last Roundup to see what her actual canon dialogue looks like.
Typo:
he didn't injury her but grazed a sore spot. = should be "injure her"
Look at all them likes!!! People love their TwiMac!
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I know right? This story has been up for less than a day and look at it's stats!
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Oopsie
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Hope you don't mind, but I might use those reasons for why Macintosh doesn't really like Flutters...
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So kinda rolling all the advice in one sentence, If I just fall back into old habits and use my old Okie accent, I should be fine?
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I'd follow EbonQuillTheScribe's advice over mine, personally. I'd just suggest keeping it minimalistic in nature. No need to overdo things.
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Oh, please tell me you aren't a Texas Football fan? Please?