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Sometimes, Pinkie sees things that aren't there.
Sometimes, those things are there.
Sometimes, they see her back.
Written for the A Judge Prize winner in the A Thousand Words Contest II in the horror category. Find the other entries here!
Editing and prereading provided by Perfectly Insane, ChudoJogurt, TheManFromAnotherTime, and Thesmokinguy, who are all fantastic people. Partly inspired by the Horslips song of the same name.
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Ngl, I like the premise of it a lot, mainly with giving Pinkie Pie a deeper character.
I don't know if I'm imagining now stuff because I once learned to take things slow, but it feels for me like 1000 words is way not enough for what could be done. Granted, it's written for the 1000 words contest, but I honestly would want to also read a version without the word cap.
Nonetheless, I liked it. Pinkie Pie keeping on how she is, her self crisis personalised, all an interesting plot which makes it seem like the inevitable was merely prolonged
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Indeed, this could make for an interesting story of her struggling with herself, yet keeping up a facade in frong of her friends. Of course, this was probably done lots of times, but I believe the Harlequin could put a nice spin on that.
Ooo creepy. Have a like for the first horror fic I've read on the site.
A deeper, darker, Pinkie is always appreciated.
I’m usually not a fan of horror, but this was done tastefully. It kept the tension and gave a more depth to Pinkie. I can only imagine what you could explore with this concept if you weren’t limited by the word cap. Well done and I wish you the best in the contest!
What about this version of The Hall of Mirrors? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_TPAySIthMo
Flurry Heart would unload the Harlequin! Haha
This was pretty cool. I really enjoy the theme you were going for, I think it not only deepens Pinkie as a character but it also speaks to more than a few of the readers that are here right now. I will admit that the story is not precisely subtle, it wants to speak its mind and leave the reader with a sense of unease in regards to how Pinkie feels and acts. I prefer a more subdued, meditative kind of horror, but I quite enjoyed the story despite my preferences. You made good use of the word count, and I have to praise the small bits of foreshadowing regarding Pinkie's mental issues. The idea is pretty solid and the execution works well within the limitations the contest imposes. Well done!
aww, Pinkie is on something that would give her hallucinations without it?
hmm Pinkie being replaced by the part of her dedicated to being wacky all of the time would explain a lot…
aww, poor Pinks, struggling with this part of her all the time!
Brilliant moment of both psychological and physical peril, especially since the last bit shows that Pinkie didn’t escape quite as thoroughly as she thought. Impressive work in getting a full, suspenseful narrative arc and an ominous stinger out of a thousand words. Thank you for it; you more than earned my judge prize.
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I’m really honoured, thank you!
Hello! A belated courtesy note for my review of this. Mirrors are pretty creepy in themselves, really, and I enjoyed this -- even if Pinkie didn't. A somewhat unreliable narrator, methinks, but that just heightens the effect. Have a fave.