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Pipp 9:35am
Zipp.
Oh Zipp.🐦
Pipp 9:38am
Pipper to Zipp-Zapp!
Answer me!🔔
Zipp 9:39am
💤
Pipp 9:40am
You stayed up late again,
didn't you? 🌕
Pipp 9:41am
Get up Zippyhead. Wake up and
smell the salty, fresh air! 🏖
Pipp 9:42am
ZIPP, GET UP ALREADY! 📣
Zipp 9:42am
What?
Pipp 9:43am
There's a pony here that wants to do an
interview on the Royal Pegasi Sisters! ✨
Pipp 9:43am
You have to come down
to Mane Melody! 🎤
Zipp 9:44am
No.
Pipp 9:44am
Come on, Zipp. You can even wear
your sunglasses if you like. 🕶
Zipp 9:45am
This is just another publicity thing for
you, so handle it yourself.
Pipp 9:45am
But this is about the sisters.
That includes you. 💕
Zipp 9:46am
I don't want any involvement, Pippi.
Pipp 9:46am
Don't call me that! I'm trying to drown
out that 'long stocking' meme! 🌊
Zipp 9:47am
And I'm trying to get some sleep.
Pipp 9:47am
But this'll mean a lot to me. Getting to
spend time with my big sister. 🎀
Pipp 9:49am
Building the special linking bond of love and trust
with somepony who'll always look out for you. 🔗
Pipp 9:52am
I'll tell Mom that you missed this opportunity to connect
with the ponies. Something that a queen would do. 👑
Zipp 9:53am
You're evil.
Pipp 9:53am
I'll be waiting, sis. ⌛
Zipp 10:29am
Alright, I'm here at the salon.
So where are you?
Zipp 10:32am
Pipp?
Pipp 10:33am
Sorry, just left my phone
for a moment.
Zipp 10:33am
Alright, so where
are you?
Zipp 10:34am
What about that interview
you pushed me into?
Pipp 10:35am
They decided to do it another time,
and I had to step out for a moment.
Zipp 10:35am
You can't be serious.
Pipp 10:36am
I'm afraid so.
Zipp 10:37am
I got up for this?
Pipp 10:37am
Let's make the most of it. Maybe using this
time to catch up with each other?
Zipp 10:38am
*sigh* Fine. So where do you
wanna meet up?
Pipp 10:39am
Actually, I was thinking that maybe
we could just spend time like this.
Pipp 10:39am
Sending text messages back
and forth to each other.
Zipp 10:40am
Really?
Pipp 10:40am
Yeah, it'll be like we're having a secret conversation.
Just like when we were foals.
Zipp 10:41am
That's... so unlike you.
Pipp 10:42am
How so?
Zipp 10:42am
How so? You post about
everything to your fans.
Pipp 10:44am
Well let's just keep this one confidential.
Only between the two of us.
Zipp 10:46am
Alright.
Pipp 10:47am
So, have you talked to Mom recently?
Zipp 10:48am
Are you kidding? She keeps checking
up on me almost everyday.
Zipp 10:48am
Asking things like, what I've learned or witnessed today. It
feels like I'm reporting a lesson or something at this point.
Pipp 10:49am
Such as...
Zipp 10:49am
You know, things from the perspective of a standard
pony. Knowledge needed for being Queen.
Pipp 10:50am
Do you think that she might have an ulterior
reason for wanting these reports regularly?
Zipp 10:52am
No.
I don't think she would.
Zipp 10:52am
Are you okay, Pipp? You
seem kinda off to me.
Pipp 10:54am
Off? What? Are you still half
asleep from staying up late?
Zipp 10:56am
Maybe.
Pipp 10:57am
Perhaps Maretime Bay is messing with us.
Zipp 10:57am
What do you mean by that?
Pipp 10:59am
Well we're used to living in the mountains.
Maybe the salty air is bad for us.
Zipp 11:02am
Are you certain about that, Pippi?
Pipp 11:03am
Yeah, it's nothing like
the air back home.
Zipp 11:03am
Who are you?
Pipp 11:05am
It's Pipp, your sister.
Zipp 11:05am
Liar!
Pipp 11:07am
That's hurtful, Zipp.
Zipp 11:07am
Really? Because my real sister would've
used an emoji to express that!
Zipp 11:08am
She doesn't doubt
our mother!
Zipp 11:08am
She enjoys the
salty air!
Zipp 11:08am
And she hates to
be called 'Pippi'!
Zipp 11:09am
You're nothing like Pipp, so you better
start texting and tell me where she is!
Pipp 11:10am
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Zipp 11:11am
Are you texting or hexing?
Pipp 11:12am
Sorry, Cloudpuff must've sent a message
when he retrieved my phone.💦
Zipp 11:12am
What happened?
Pipp 11:13am
Long story short, when I turned to attend to a customer
back at Mane Melody, my phone was stolen. 💢
Pipp 11:13am
That interviewer took it, but thanks to Cloudpuff,
the best puppy in the world! 🐶
Pipp 11:14am
We were able to track them down
and get my phone back. 🎉
Zipp 11:15am
The interviewer stole it?
...that answers some questions.
Pipp 11:16am
The nerve of them! Just why
would they do that? 💭
Zipp 11:17am
Going off the questions, I take it that they're
against the idea of the two of us living here.
Zipp 11:17am
They were suspicious that we were plotting something
and implied that we didn't fit in with Maretime Bay.
Zipp 11:18am
Old habits die hard, I guess.
Pipp 11:18am
Well we're staying no matter what. Nothing
is going to move us out of our new home. ⚓
Zipp 11:19am
I'm happy everything turned out okay,
but something's bothering me...
Zipp 11:19am
That interviewer, they seem to know me pretty well, but
you're the one who has a social media account between us.
Zipp 11:20am
If there was anypony they would be most
familiar with, I'd assume it would be you.
Pipp 11:20am
Yeah... about that. 💧
Zipp 11:21am
...you were giving them information
centered on me, weren't you?
Pipp 11:22am
They likely decided to focus on you, because as we waited,
I was bragging about just how great of a sister I have. 🌟
Pipp 11:23am
A brilliant investigator, a strong mare, and an understanding
sister that shows mercy towards her younger sibling's actions. 💖
Zipp 11:24am
...
Pipp 11:24am
💬
Zipp 11:25am
Scatteredbrain, naive, habits,
and of course, your phone.
Pipp 11:25am
🌱
Zipp 11:26am
I simply, cannot decided,
which part of you.
Pipp 11:26am
🌼
Zipp 11:27am
Which part, THAT DRIVES
ME CRAZY!!!
Pipp 11:27am
Love you too, sis! 
Amereep 7:00pm
This 5th Generation is really starting to rub off on me, but it's not coming here fast enough for me to truly enjoy it. Bridlewood, for example, is a place I wish the show could spend more time in as that place looks like it would have interesting designs, unique elements, and mystical atmospheres. Having more content would've also helped me get a better grasp on these characters for the story. I may have gotten lucky with ponies having Luminescence/Sparkle (a Flux Light in my case), but it doesn't mean that it'll always work.
Amereep 7:03pm
Pipp is such a character that I lack a hold on. She's the kind of character that many teenage girls tend to act like at that age, the ones that casually follow a trend to appear popular and often view themselves as the idol of their story. I'm an old fashioned guy (I still use a flip phone from the start of 2010), so these kinds of characters tend to clash with me in multiple ways, but Pipp keeps finding ways to get me to like her. If it's with her instinctive actions of pulling out her phone to take a picture or her choice of words when giving out nicknames (such as Pippsqueaks and Zippsters), she keeps finding ways to get a smile out of me. She appears to be 'the chaos' of Zipp's life due to her mishaps, but I think Pipp can take it a step further as she has ways to bend her sister into doing something for her. I'm sure that she's more than what's on the surface of that celebrity image, so I'm interested and hopeful that we'll see her in a more mature light at some point in the series.
Amereep 7:07pm
It goes without saying that Pipp is a very social character, but Zipp is the exact opposite as she's camera-shy, prefers solitude, and tends to hold her thoughts instead of sharing them with anyone. She was easier for me to grasp as I've been thinking about a character similar to her (a character that Tempest performs as in a play), but she could still use some more screen time to really dive into the internal conflict of being a princess vs being herself. In the story, I stated that Zipp was up late the night before, but never gave a clear answer as to why. The reason is because of something I call 'Moonlight Flight', where Zipp enjoys some time alone to practice on her flying skills. Call it what you will, but I just love the idea of Zipp flying around on the clear nights of a full moon (it just seems like it would blend perfectly with her character of stealth, wisdom, and discovery).
Amereep 7:11pm
This isn't the first time I've written a story in this kind of format, but it's the first that reaches the thousand word requirement. I tried to make it as believable as possible with the added icons and appropriate timing. For example, did you notice that the time jumps over a minute or two between posts? That's because it was intended to imply that the character was thinking (after noticing and before making a lie). Those icons were a pain as they don't quite work the way I want them to and will likely cause problems if the reader were to view them in a certain way, but I felt that it would be easier on the reader's eyes to allow them to keep track of which text they're on.
Amereep 7:14pm
I didn't have a clear idea of what I wanted when I was going into this, but it started with the idea that Sprout was impersonating Pipp in order to ask Zipp about what 'misdeeds' they were planning, only to be found out through his view of pegasi stereotypes. Sprout was quickly thrown out because he was more of a bigot towards unicorns, and the idea of him asking questions like "Wanna make fun of the Earth ponies because we can fly?" or "Remember what we did to that Earth pony the other day?" seemed too pathetic if I was trying to surprise the reader with this imposter (though I really wish that I could've kept that line about pegasi laying eggs). Eventually, I decided on the idea that the story should be focused on the sisterly bond between Pipp and Zipp while this imposter leaves subtle hints and red herrings for Zipp to see past.
Amereep 7:18pm
As I type this, I feel like I'm pushing the freedom I have on this site with a selcouth story, but that's why my bio says that I'm here to show real creativity. I prefer to give readers a new perspective on things and to amuse them through non-traditional methods, because if I'm being honest, I don't see myself as a writer. I don't tend to find enjoyment from reading and I hardly view the many works around here, leading me to envision my own ways of storytelling with hope that it'll be compelling enough to leave a positive impression on others into wanting more. This format of writing will likely be looked down upon, but I think that as long as it's captivating, innovating, and carries a plot, then it deserves the right to entertain readers like any other story around here.
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First!
This is an amazing story which shows through texts that even though Zipp and Pipp are very different they are still sisters and they love each other!
Amazing story :)
At first I was gonna give you a like because of the sheer amount of work writing in this format must have took, but then I saw your author's notes and knew I must give you a Derpy
Now THIS is a format I have to try!
So, first of all what is the ideal format to adjust to in order to better read this fic for those who are thrown off by it?
Second, very well done. This feels almost like it could be an episode of "Tell Your Tale".
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It varies depending on the device you're using, but a screen with a wide width tends to work best.
I also find that adjusting the formatting to a large font size works. 0.9 messes up many things and 1.0 works if you ignore Pipp's second text. I found no issues with 1.1 and higher, but it still could vary on what you use.
Nice, I really like this! When I found out it was an imposter I had to go back up and reread part of it to see when it happened! I'd love to read more, this really is the perfect format for Pipp.
This reads pretty darn well. I was wondering why she suddenly seemed ok with that nickname. Plus, it reminds me of other silly sisters over text.
Great Story, Amereep.
I've always enjoyed stories with "gimmick" formatting. It's a breath of fresh air in the form of an experimental writing style. Sort of like a Game Jam, but with fiction.
One small mistake that I found:
Saying Pipp & Zipp are "royal pegasi sisters" is the same as saying that Celestia and Luna are "royal alicorns sisters," or that Rarity & Sweetie Belle are "unicorns sisters," or that Applejack and Apple Bloom are "earth ponies sisters." You get my point.
Good show overall.
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You gotta keep in mind that Earth, Pegasi, & Unicorns were all against each other not too long ago and are now just getting over a... century long?... hatred for one another. They developed their own culture during that time, and while there's no sign that suggests it, there could be a royal ruler for the Unicorns and/or Earth ponies as well.
Even if that wasn't the case, Celestia and Luna reigned over pony races that pretty much coexist since Equestria was formed. I have a hard time believing that Unicorns and Earth ponies of G5 would accept the idea of allowing a Pegasus to reign over them without some form of backlash that suggest that they don't follow Pegasi monarchs. Granted that it was a pegasus who typed the message, but she could very well be repeating what she was told, giving a small glimpse into the interviewer's opinion on Pegasi.
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Technically this format is against the rules (#10 in the list of things not to write: "chat format stories"). I'm not going to report it, but be aware that it likely got through on auto-approval. If your stories are still manually approved by the mods it'll probably get rejected.
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Gems like these make me lament that rule. This story was excellent, and more than earned its formatting.
Nicely done!
I wrote a story with elements of texting, although I just used a fake text generator app and inserted the images--on the plus side, as long as they display, I don't have to worry about a user's screen format. On the down side, if the site hosting them stops, a good chunk of the story vanishes. (Also, for a story based entirely on texts, it wouldn't work, since FimFic's word counter wouldn't recognize it.)
Interestingly, very recently somebody won a prize (I think it was a Hugo award) with a short story that was nothing but text messages between two characters who had never met each other before.
It's a challenge to get a cohesive story out of just text messages, so well done! And I appreciate you sticking to the format for the author's notes, too
Not bad.
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That's happened to me a few times, so I have the files saved somewhere in case that ever happens. The cutie mark icon, for example, are files I have saved in my sta.sh over on my DeviantArt account. I'm sure you could also use the Drive in a Google account to do this trick too.
Thank you, but I think this kind of concept of telling a story is something many can imitate and even outdo this tale in more clever ways. As I said in my notes, I'm an old fashioned guy that still uses a 10-year-old flip phone. Others have an advantage over me as they're more familiar with modern phones, so they might know something I don't. I've already developed one style and expanded it with this story, but I recently discovered that a third individual could also be in this layout of left and right alignment (the added icons would also make it easier for readers to follow which would've made it difficult if I stuck with the first style), so it gives a little bit more freedom and possible ways of making a cohesive story.
Now if you want to talk about a challenge, then telling a story through a style akin to the silent movie aspect would be very difficult. Gotta keep an accurate frame size with all of the images, be concerned with the loading of the page, and of course, you would need to make an original story out of the clips of the show (unless you put in some editing or animating into it). I managed to make a flashfic of such a concept once, and it's pretty cheesy, but I'll be amazed if someone manages to pull a cohesive 1k word story under this kind of format.
This brings back found childhood memories. I loved that movie where she fought the pirates.
But don’t worry Pippi. Most memes only have a lifetime of a few months. Just be patient and sit it out.
This caught me off guard. In hindsight the hints were very obvious, like Pipp always posting an emote at the end of her sentences which suddenly stopped. Or her not reacting when Zipp purposly called her Pippi.
While reading this story for the first time I didn’t notice any of this, because it never occurred to me that this wasn’t Pipp. This is basically the best kind of twist: One you don’t see coming but then when you go back with the knowledge of hindsight you notice all the obvious hints you didn’t pay attention too.
I like to imagine the interviewers original plan was to simply steal Pipp’s phone, expecting to find some indiscriminating evidence that the Pegasi are planning to take over Maretime Bay or something like that. When he/she didn’t find anything he/she tried to goad Zipp into revealing their sinister plan by pretending to be Pipp.
Overall a pretty stupid plan, but hey a Q-Anon guy once stormed a pizzeria with a gun to free some children sex-slaves imprisoned in the basement only to realize that there was no basement. :ajbemused So the interviewer being just that stupid is absolutely in the realm of possibility. Of course, that stupidity will most likely result in a meeting with Hitch followed by jail time.
Based on what`The thief never showed any intimate knowledge of Zipp during their short conversation. Sure he/she knew about her mother being the queen, but that is common knowledge.
That’s actually pretty sweet. I think Zipp is a bit unfair, putting the blame on her sister. Who could’ve honestly expected the interviewer having a hidden agenda?
Aww siblings.
I think Sprout is equally biased against Unicorns and Pegasi. If a Pegasus had walked into town instead of Izzy he probably would’ve reacted the same way. Including running away in fear. But yeah, Sprout is an idiot and probably would've give himself away almost immediately.
Then again, in the video game he acted surprisingly smart in his attempts to stir up racial tension.
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A short but nonetheless fun story with a neat twist, I didn’t saw coming. And having this whole story be Pipp and Zipp texting each other gave it an unique touch I really liked. The only thing I felt that could’ve been done better, was having the imposter actually use some intimate knowledge like Zipp claimed.
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I consider it as a tight hug or concerned scolding. Pipp is a casual idol, one that's open to ideas and enjoys ponies that approach her. She seems to lack a forethought of how things can go wrong, flaws that Zipp is likely concerned about for her sister's wellbeing.
There was...
...but I guess I could've presented a few more in some way. Throwing Zipp off by addressing her fatigue kinda helps...
...and it would've sold it if I had them say 'Moonlight Flight', but the only place that I could've brought it up was when Pipp was trying to wake up Zipp.
'Moonlight Flight' seems like a loaded term that needed some explaining as to why she was flying in the moonlight, but for a story that was trying to be sneaky and misleading for the twist, giving exposition (especially from a sister that's familiar with Zipp's habits) seemed too blunt.
That's pretty funny, coming from someone who linked to 'The Twilight Files Contest.'
Then I think you're doing fine.
Can't wait to read this for the contest, and looking forward to the unique format you have in your story!
hehe love the nickname
perfect Zipp response
it's so dang Pipp to end all her texts with an emoji
oh wow, i haven't heard that name in a very long time!
hehehe PIpp holding Zipp's need to rise to her royal expectations above her for something petty, love it
dang this is a sudden vibe shift! i wonder what's going on with Pipp here. and if i were Zipp i would be annoyed by this! hate flaking
huh, she could have done that without making Zipp leave her precious bed! very suspicious...
hehe, like Twilight's letters to Celestia, except Zipp is no Twilight and Haven is no Celestia
yeah, that sounds very off from Pipp...
ooh, and nothing about being annoyed by that name! i'm guessing Queen Haven has Pipp's phone now?
hehe this is fun
aww, this is adorable!
aww, Pipp's responses reducing down to single emoji at the end was a nice mirror of Zipp's first emoji-only message. this was short and sweet and a very fun read, based on the solid core of the contrasting sisterly relationship between Zipp and Pipp, which this fic just captured so well.
and i just loved the format, especially since one of the things i was hoping to see with this contets was just how inventive people could get with their fic formats. i'm sure it must have taken a long time to figure out how to get it to work with fimfiction's bbcode, and the detail down to the timestamps was just so great! thank you so much for writing!
Somehow I missed this one. I like your dynamic between them, and the plot has a surprising amount of twists for a text conversation. Cool stuff.
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Well, this is a first. I've had my story read once before a long time ago, but this one's being told in more broader aspect than just a one-go take and a still image.
The beginning was a bit wobbly, a few emojis were jumped over, but she maintained a stable rythme shortly after. The text message sounds was a nice touch, though I think someone was having an issue with it as the sound was absent during moments where a character had more to say, but had to break it into more than one text. This kind of issue makes me think that they wouldn't be up for the idea of taking further advantage of the setup by posting the text messages in the traditional style as well.
I would've touch upon a few more areas (like some pauses or adding a clock sound between 9:53am and 10:29am), but they did a decent job regardless (but somebody should alert them that they have the wrong title card for the video). Thanks for sharing.
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Be sure to comment on the video, I'm not the reader, but glad you enjoyed it 😁
This was really well done, not just in terms of formatting, but also in making the format matter. :)