In an instant of dance, two mares consider their love for one another
This is a birthday gift for wishcometrue, one of my dearest, closest friends.
Happy birthday Wish.
Thank you to themoontonite and Red for editing help
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This story is so good. It's tender and sweet and alluring in all the ways you would hope this style of romance story would be. Thank you for writing this, I love it.
However, you refuse to spell Cadance properly and for that this fic receives a 0/10.
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alexa pls ban wishcometrue
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You lose another 5 points for asking that loser Red Parade to edit this
Goodness. I'm breathless at this. The dynamic you've conveyed here is incredible, and both characters feel very right. The framing device is really neat, even if Rarity's part is a little hard to read in dark mode. Also, the intensity of this is just... I am in awe of your ability to create a mood/atmosphere with your words.
Wish really needs to threaten to break your kneecaps more often if it gets us stuff like this.
Finally,
I see what you did there, and I love it. I'm now imagining this as taking place in the same continuity as Incandescent, and how unbearably smug Rarity would be of that.
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Wait, wait, wait. Is that a reference to the fact that the show credits misspelled "Cadence?" Ha! Subtle.
This was amazing! I love the portrayal of Rarity and Cadance's thoughts here, and of their love.
Excellent use of color and formatting. They're so often poorly handled, but this leverages them well to create an excellent effect with an already good story.
I'm so relieved that this ended up being a dive into sappy, introspective polyamory instead of (potentially) glamorized cheating of some sort. While the latter isn't what I'd expect from a Seer story, you have a habit of shattering my expectations (which is a good thing) and unfortunately, Fimfic loves its portrayals of relationships gone oh no.