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So there was never a voice, only death. At least we get a... nice death? Meh... I can accept it since Equestria Death stated it.
I love to see us playing the edge of the coin but it was never a voice but a unchangable fate.
Murder him, or just suck him dry. It is Mass Effect 'green/red/blue light ending in the end' ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
At the very least Equestrias Death isn't a asshole
They keep forgetting that death said the multiverse that the largest hint I notice, noone notice it yet
Sooo... Can we kick Chrysalis Ghost flank for fun please? Just once...
Didn't this story used to be complete?
[As Davy Jones]:"Queen Chrysalis, do ye fear death?"
As I may/may not have said before, sometimes there's a huge difference between what you think is right, and what you know is right. This is just what's right, right?
Much like Azura, who spins new souls from the old.
Like if you get that reference.
So a miserable life, an unpleasant death or utter annihilation. Yeesh!
Nice
I'm taking this with a grain of salt.
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Not thrilled with this either. Sometimes andnidea isn't as good as you think. I pray you think really hard on where this story is going.
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I was hoping on a Soul Reaver but got a Mass Effect release date ending in different colors. My dissapointment is about as big as a blowing up Mass Relay in the Batarian systems was glorious.
At least i got you'r storys making good calls and entertaining me to no end
Man, the general gist I got from this chapter is that the ponies are still killing Zack but more humanely. And, how come Discord wasn't there in the afterlife? It would've been nice if the ponies could talk to them. I would've grilled them for their stupid/horrible actions.
There's another issue I want to address. Since Dicord's death led to all the negative karma befalling Zack, how much of Chrysalis actions was actually hers and not the chaotic influence?
foals
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I try to. somethigns i can't change much because of the need for the story. like killign Discord in one of them but i do try to justify my choices.
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The only reason why killing Zack isn't an option is because this is Twilight, and as we've seen so far Twilight has constantly been opposed to Zack's wellbeing and happiness. Hell, ponies as a whole have been opposed to it. From the start they've been intent on saying Zack should be a pony mare, a cheap pallette swap of Twilight. His Cutie Mark is basically just "I am not Zack". I'd even go so far as to say Celestia and Luna never intended for him to be fixed or sent home.
That's why I think killing Zack is the only right thing to do, because it's the only moral choice to end the danger he poses AND send him home. Twilight herself will likely try and force him to be a mare forever, and using the "Magic of Friendship" to choose a third option doesn't seem a possibility because bone of the Elements of Harmony have actually been friends to him. If they were his friends, they would have supported him identifying as a human male and made actual attempts to fix him.
Other way? Using the bell is kill Zack as well, it doesnt matter if they use a knife, or a láser, or any other method, they all kill Zack, at Best, the bell would be painless and liberating, while other method more brutal, anyway, one way to keep Zack, is cleansing him, them make the soul inhabit a body, artificial perhap.
Chapter's good, but it could definitely use some editing. A lot of mistakes that could easily be fixed. I like the picture, draw it yourself?
A lot of people don't potray the world of Equestria in their stories like this, even though this is absolutely what the actual world of Equestria would be like.
I get that having more realistic and darker elements can make an interesting story, but you gotta remember it's a world full of talking peace-loving animals, I didn't exactly come to MLP for realism lol.
Not that there's anything wrong with those kind of stories of course, hell, a lot of my favorite stories use those elements.
An idea for a sequel is that if Zack does die them his soul could be repot as twilights goal with the memory’s of his life in equestra that way he can now have a good life with twilight with out the chaos magic ruining it.
The mist was thinking it was "too thick".
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woops!
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woops!
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understandable, i'm trying to balance both aspects. but i'm not sure if i'm doing it well enough.
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I'll try and fined those little mistakes and edited them. and yes, i did draw the picture of Event Horizon.
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sure, in the end the ponies are still killing him, but remember they are also setting Zack's soul free of the twisted fate that Discord foolishly placed him in. also the point of the story is that Zack dose NOT want to be in Equestria, he wants to be back home on earth. also, killing Zack then having him be reborn as an actual pony instead of a soul being stuck in a fake clone of Twilight with all his memories defeats the point in letting this poor guy go back to his reality while forgetting all of the horrible things that has happened to him in Equestria.
killing someone just to make them be reborn as a pony and again live in a world that they DIDN'T want to even be in with all the memories of what happened to him in his 'past' life seems sick. he would be even more emotionally and mentally traumatized.
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well i originally was going to add Discord to this scene, but i felt like it would just make a pointless scene as the ponies try to argue with a dead person. as the souls of the dead didn't responded or acknowledge the gang was there in the mist with them. also i thought having Discord there would distract to much from the pony reaper.
well the changelings that kidnap Zack were there by coincidence, but by the time they brought Zack to the old Hive and Zack got his 'cutie mark' that's when the forces of chaos started to infect him with bad karma and misfortune, hence why Zack was r***ed and used by Chrysalis and the guards that ganged banged her. everything else was just a further downward spiral.
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i get that you like this Soul Reaver comparison, but this story is not trying to be a 1 for 1 to that game.
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no, it was put on Hiatus while i was dealing with life issues.
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it's more of a 'purge this soul of the evils that are infecting it, and let it be reborn with a clean slate'. also what's with this whole 'coin on the edge thing'? I'm not getting it, or seeing its significance or comparison to my story.
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sorry but there will be no sequel to this story. the point of the story is that Zack dose NOT want to be in Equestria, he wants to be back home on earth. also, killing Zack then having him be reborn as an actual pony instead of a soul being stuck in a fake clone of Twilight with all his memories defeats the point in letting this poor guy go back to his reality while forgetting all of the horrible things that has happened to him in Equestria.
killing someone just to make them be reborn as a pony and again live in a world that they DIDN'T want to even be in with all the memories of what happened to him in his 'past' life seems sick. he would be even more emotionally and mentally traumatized.
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Name derived and obscured in different language, yes.
I was thinking more "line beyond which light doesn't shine", because all the black matter in her abilities.
I know it's late but I enjoy such mental gymnastics, so adding my two bits. His human name meant "(god) remembers" in Hebrew. Antonym in same language could be Ishkah (forgotten, forsaken?).
Ehh, while I understand some/many people are attracted to the idea of reincarnation, it never felt right to me. The "mind is separate from the soul thing" just seems wrong to me. It you lose your memories, skills and knowledge and have to start over a blank slate.... Well it's basically the same as erasing a floppy disk there no point in pretending that the new data you write on the disk was somehow influenced by it's previous use. Except by posibly degrading it in unuseful ways.
Wait, did I accidently guess the pale alicorn's name (I was in chaper 49) or the name had received its own nonlife by power of
Grayskullauthor's pen?My suspicion was that Zack is becoming a Death avatar as an anti-chaos. Death is ultimate order.
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Funny how this fic made us both remember 15 year old movie.
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lol yeah you did guess a characters name, but as of right now Zack is still going to go by the name he had. the ponies probably didn't feel the need to give him a dark title or name of some kind. as for what is currently, he's more of a mentally and emotionally damaged person driven to insanity, he's currently all over the place. i'm not sure if i ended up making him a chaotic person or a anti-chaos, or death character.
and for the 2nd part: that was not my intention!
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true. also if the ponies did make Zack go through reincarnation as a new being with no memories of who he was in a past life, THEY would still know and live with the fact that they still MADE the choice to make this poor bastard live in a world that was not originally his own. so the effort of purging him of his corruption and letting him be re-born anew to start a new life, seemed pointless if they weren't going to allow him to be re-born back in his own reality's and original home world.
one of the things that I've tried to convey in this story (which I'm not sure if i;'m doing a good job on) is that no matter what the ponies do and the sentiment of their actions, if someone is from another world they WOULD WANT to go back. and that the ponies would learn that they would have to let that person go. sure they did that when they DID find a way back for Zack, before finding out about Discord's corruption and manipulation and violation of a multi-verse law that he broke, they tried to make Zack feel like he should just stay in Equestria instead of trying to find another solution to go home.
again, not sure if I've done a good job in conveying what I'm trying to get at over the course of the story.
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It was just an idea sorry
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That should be for him to decide, he Will be reborn on earth, while forgetting everything and start anew, that may as well be non-existence ot it finest, so he literally can't retrun to earth one way or another, staying in Equestria in an artificial body, Will retain what is him, this time without the curse, it should be his decision to go one way or the other, not assuming what his responde would be.
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A shame Good luck with it anyway
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Perhaps one need to know the game Series to get it. Than again the videos are literally self explaining...
It is about choice being presented by the opposition and finding a alternative that noone belived could be archived or was unlikely to be archived.
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Oh, I hope that didn't come off as me knocking your story or anything, I just appreciate the way you potrayed Equestria and the ponies.
I get the feeling what Event Horizon said was more of warning then an inescapable outcome. Like if you miss a step, it will result in loosing Zack. If there is anyone who can figure out a way out of this mess, its Twilight and company.
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But would zack want to die? I think not. Je os making friends evenif he doesn't offically say it. Dash was right in that.
Yes this is your story and you put alot of investment in. And so have we the readers. We don't want to feel our time was wasted. Somebody earlier made a comparison to Mass effect 3. That jives. Twice mow you have made a situation where a choice had to be be made and ultimately despite the debate in the comment section it turned out to not be a choice at all. That bums us.
Frankly if I was Zack i woukd saw fuck you to both deaths saying i am tired of other people deciding whats best for me.
So... Let me get this straight.
The choices are: Kill Zack, or kill Zack with extra steps?
The bell would essentially just be killing Zack, so I'm not sure why the ponies are any happier about this outcome...
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don't worry after going over the chapter again after posting the ch. i realized this, I have an idea that might work. one where Twilight GIVES Zack a choice on what HE wants to do. I haven't gotten that far yet, but i realized i failed to make the 3rd option sound like a better solution. hopefully the next chapter that has the final confrontation will be better.
at least i hope so.
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Really, given all we've seen from the character the question is less whether or not to kill him, but "will this ultimately give Zack what he desires?" As such the Correct Choice is any that allow him to be human and go home.
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don't worry Zack WILL get to choose what he wants his fate to be in the end. i'm already working on the draft.
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It's really kinda funny. Not the idea, but the thought that they'd actually let him have a choice. Last time they did that it was a lie, and they coerced him into carrying Chrysalis' bastard.
Also it's rather sad that Thorax and Spike voted to let him suffer rather than ever go home. I would have expected that from the rest but from them? Ouch.
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they did it because Spike and Thorax thought that if Zack stayed alive then they could help him instead of just ending his life.
just wanted to say that both options can go horribly wrong due to one fact about the mlp universe. Since zacks transformation is similer to luna turning into nightmare moon i guess we can also compare it to the pony of shadows. Something that might worry you is that while nightmare moon was cleansed from luna the pony of shadows seemed to be fully able to exist without stygian. While it might be something from the show what they are doing with the bell could end with similer results, the main diffrence being that the pony of shadows was taken to limbo immidiatly and what comes out of zack is going into a bell.
A bell with a decent ammount of magic still in there.
A bell that will also have the remnent of discord and zacks magic.
So yea this situation is just 1 slight accident away from zack passing on but the ponys being left in a worse situation then before. And since it seems that the deaths can only interact with souls and this thing wouldnt have one and has discords magic then a dimention traveling being of chaos and insanity that the deaths canot touch seems like a good way to get back at both of them for causing this (Earth death let a soul get stolen and equestrian death let zack end up this way when she could have helped or stepped in sooner).
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Go figure ¯\_(ツ)_/¯