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SonicBlitz18


A rocking brony with a love for crossover and adventure. Currently part time in college

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If anyone has questions of the lore and universe, go ahead and ask me.

This was a insanely instance and interesting beginning I can't wait to see where this goes,and I hope someone saves her because so far Umbra isn't that bad.

On this was a 100% epic start I can't wait to see what happens next. I also loved the lore of who is who.

This was a gun and funny chapter with some more lore of the world.

Sexy end to that chapter

I'm loving this I am officially hooked. Hopefully they can help Sam ,and this was a epic first battle and info chapter.

This was a fun/funny story with some awesome lore can't wait to see what happens next.

Another awesome and funny chapter it has me hyped to see what happens next. This was also a epic first meet up with the CMC and a awesome and nice DT and SS ,I loved three new personalities.

Nnnnooooooo.not another better version lost I hope they are saved soon . this was a wild one .

This was a awesome and fun lore chapter I hope that Tumble is just acts mean to her crush but is really sweet and kind underneath.

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In that case, let us talk about Sam. Not sure if this is in universe, but that can be asked as well.
Sam mentioned that he has collection of minis. Are they already painted and is everything else done to them? I assume that he has his personal pile of shame that is yet to receive attention.

Lore question is as follows:

Skimpy armor and clothing seems to be norm formed by both religious ideology as well as certain type of functionality. Has there ever been an instance where either local or wider threat has emerged that did not embrace this ideal, as in fully armored troopers doing their thing? If yes, how did the world manage to rise above this threat? Divine intervention? Full plate rejecting OP enchantments thus providing both sides with exploitable flaws?

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His minis were in fact fully painted, homebrew with his own lore behind them. They weren't good quality paints, and the bases were only the stock black plastic ones, but they were his first armies and special to him.

As for the plated mail VS. skimpy, there have been factions who sought to fight with full body armor, and there will be some warriors in the story who wear it, but most don't follow it due to ideologies and religious means. Since magic enchantments have to permeate the entire set of armor you wear, it takes more materials and magic to enchant a single set of full plated armor than a dozen pieces the girls here would wear. Think of the magic acting as innate bonuses to save rolls and invulnerable chances, while full plated only grants toughness but leaves you with no saves. Due to the monsters in the world (that we'll introduce in a few chapters) having full armor is more of a hindrance in the wilds.

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In case you wanted to know, he had an Ork Deathskulls army, with looted Ultrasmurf gear, an Adeptus Mechanicus army of Skitari with an Imperial Knight, and a Chaos faction he homebrewed from World Eaters to be white and purple. He was going to start an Imperial Fist army and had a starter set for T'au, but I doubt he'll have time for those.

The milk thing is kinda off pooting[is that how its spelled?] but i like the giant buff fluttershy.

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Never said she was muscular.

This was a awesomely wild and fun chapter I'm pumped to see what else happens (no rush).

shit this is not good.

Oh this is bad they need to get the hero's now hopefully they can cure them and turn them back.

Please give us more. I don't want this to die like World of Nudist Mares or The Roomates

I thought onigiri was a type of food.

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Correct, but it's also the name of a video game.

This was a wild and hype building chapter, you know a soon as Celestia saw the guy she know shit was officially about to go down. I can't wait to see where this goes (no rush).

crazy and shit. But what gonna happen to poor guys once they be tell them?

I am getting the Rising of the shield hero vibes here.

I hope Button passes his exam.

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Don't worry, there's no one like t h a t here.

Comment posted by Deltafire34 deleted Nov 15th, 2020

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I see.

If I were to change this chapter, what suggestions would you have?

Comment posted by Deltafire34 deleted Nov 19th, 2020

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No, I genuinely want to know if there's something we can work on. I want this to be an enjoyable experience, and every bit of constructive criticism helps.

This was a fun and cute bonding chapter, and the children where adorable. Look's like it's about to get real I hope they can all become closer in the future.

shit what gonna happen next?

Honestly, Zander has some serious anger issues if he uses extreme measures to get back at those who mildly cross him.

Do not like Rarity or Barb in this chapter.

Princess or Queen? Your previous chapters said Princess instead of Queen.

“Are you trying to get us fucking executed!?” Zander whisper-screamed.

Zander snarled quietly. That sounds better do you think.

“Of course, Queen Celestia,” Twilight said. “We planned our attack for a few days while watching its movements. I studied the residues it left behind to figure out its health and what it could be weak to while Sunset and the girls worked on scouting a good place to ambush it so we could-”

My suggestion would be for her to say " My Queen" or "Your Majesty".

Comment posted by Deltafire34 deleted Dec 29th, 2020

Queen Celestia cleared her throat before speaking.

"She" cleared her throat before saying. Add that if you want.

“Well, it goes Scrap, Wood, Bronze, Silver, Gold, Pearl, Ruby, Sapphire, Emerald, Topaz, and Platinum,” Mayor Mare added. “Also, when you rank up there are certain areas that only you can be able to access when you pick a specific class.”

My suggestion in rankings goes- Scrap, Wood, Bronze, Sliver, Gold, Platinum, Pearl, Ruby, Sapphire, Emerald, Topaz, and Diamond.

“Our ears can be pretty sensitive, you asshole,” Bon Bon growled in annoyance as she clenched her fist in anger. “And you’re really trying my patients with the whorse comments.”

Uh it's patience not patients
Also your repeating some of you sentencing after a few paragraphs, like using the word well too much

A tense quiet reigned over the crowd as they silently cursed at whoever dared to speak to the Queen in such a way. Twilight and her party openly gawked in shock that someone would be so bold as to speak like that in front of Queen Celestia. The Queen herself, however, was staring at them with a blank look.

I've also noticed you're repeating in some of the paragraphs in some previous chapters, just a heads up.

Uh is this story still alive?

Comment posted by Fintushamy deleted Jan 19th, 2022

I think its safe to say that they might have moved on from this story, I wish he/they would focus on one story instead of starting a new one till its left incompleted.

Great, another good story I would ever find, seems to be in the limbo...

I got another thing to say. Do you have something against Barb ( Spike Rule 34 )???

I think this is literally the second story where you made her into a bratty, hypocritical, paranoid, being a bit racist/xenophobic, with severe angry issues, and a total bbbbiiiiiiiittttcccchhhh.

I seen better and much nicer versions of Barb from other stories. And even canon Spike isn't this accusing, super rude, or angry!?

I hope I didn't upset you again with this much nicer criticism.

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The man he be spitting facts I just have to ask though what does she have against them what did they do

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