Love from the Stars

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PuzzleMaster98

PuzzleMaster98 #1 · Mar 13th, 2023 · 2 · ·

Not a bad story.

Not bad at all

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom #2 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 3 · ·

SanguinePaladin's version of a more grown up Krystal is so hot.

oddmin

oddmin #3 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 3 · ·

more?

Necrogen Lord

Necrogen Lord #4 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 2 · ·

11529697
There may be more one day.

kyubbiman

kyubbiman #5 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 4 · ·

we need a second chapter this is just too funny not to do a follow up.

dirty little secret

dirty little secret #6 · Apr 9th, 2023 · 1 · ·

This is your official review for the Furry Foray Festival Contest!

I've tried to be as objective as possible, but of course there are limits. I've tried to avoid being biased or arbitrary as much as I can, and hopefully I've succeeded at least somewhat. The full, final results will be announced on May 4th, and winners will be contacted shortly afterward to ask how they would like to accept their prizes. When readings these comments, please keep in mind that I know I'm often overly critical -- to the point where I can always find nitpicks even with the greatest works of literature. So don't take anything personally!

Notes:
- Interesting to see Equestria's cosmology from the outside perspective.
- Ah, I was wondering how far I'd get before I found the classic human (or other being) in Equestria trope of the new visitor passing out immediately after arrival...
- The memory transfer thing sure is a convenient way for them to get to know each other and become familiar, lol!
- Five Months Later Well that's a hell of a skip!
- This one took much longer than I expected before getting to the actual sex! But it was worth waiting for.
- Hard to believe there's enough room inside an arwing to do what they're doing inside it... Or even for two passengers at all. Seems a bit odd that Krystal would wait for such an inconvenient time and place to finally make her move.
- The gender-swapped Falco and Fox were definitely a surprise ... but a welcome one!
- Made more extensive use of mind-reading powers than anybody else, and it added a nice flair to the ending.

Scores:
Provocativeness: 80
Progression: 75
Payoff: 80
Pacing: 65
Personality: 80
Prose: 72
Total: 452
For more information on what these scores mean, see the scoring rubric.

Necrogen Lord

Necrogen Lord #7 · Apr 10th, 2023 · · ·

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I'm glad to see such high marks on the scoreboard! (if only my grades were so high).

I feel I could have done better if I started sooner or spent more time on it and expanded a bit, but I'm glad that the mind melding stuck out well enough to be a point of focus! I'm looking forward to any other contest to try and give it my all, it's been a great time reading everyone else's submissions.

Deltafire34