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Yoshikage Kira


"Beautiful Duwang" - Crossovers and Sci-Fi. Proud Inquisitor of Protect Flurry Heart and dedicated Video Game Writer.

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I don't know about everyone else, but every time I tried to use Mark V armor in Spartan Ops, I would just appear wearing Recruit armor in-game.:rainbowhuh:
It still works for the wargames, though.

UNSC always the best TAXI COMPANY! CALL: 555-555-555

4012341 You know there is other planets and other countries so that mean there will be more numbers.
So call 555555555-555555-555-55555-55-5555555-55555-555-555555-555555-Alpha-Zooloo-Omega-Bravo-55555...
...
...
5
This is Jimmy and you just called UNSC Taxi Company. How can i help you?
-I'm stock on a planet with ponies.
*Connection over*
-God dammit, I know they wont trust this crap...
555,,,

I just started reading this story and I already love it.Halo was my first FPS game and will always have a special place in my heart I cant wait for halo 5!
Have some moustache:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

JESUS Christ that was rough landing lol!

Holy..... I....missed...this...so.....MUCH! good work! Looking forward to more!

:yay: for an update!

"U-uh... h-hello?"

Hurrreeyyy

"U-uh... h-hello?"

Good job with first contact, twilight. Setting the bar high.
It's good to see ya back Mr author.

Well you sir............Have..made my day

5106329 I'd like to see how well you'd do with eloquence if you were facing down an 8 foot tall walking tank that has just threatened to blast you apart with a piece of alien technology you know absolutely nothing about. In my case I'd probably drop the "fancy metal club" and curl up in a little ball and cry until the mean alien either went away shot me or it tried to initiate contact in a manner that didn't involve blasting me apart with a weapon whose capabilities I don't know.

Fair play to Twilight, she has the self control to actually try to speak to the EIGHT FOOT TALL ALIEN and not curl up and play dead

Re reading the first chapter after you restarted for editing and such. Finding the occasional typo so I'll post them in the order I spot them here.

activates its’ Shaw-Fujikawa

Misplaced apostrophe

the right thruster exploded, along with half of the left wing,

Did the explosion take the entire pelican or just phase through the body of it to take out the left wing when the right thruster exploded, you may want to take out the left and replace it with right.

Good chapter. You've re-imagined it well and I like how the first two chapters are going so far

5106678 I'd use my manly man skills to karate chop the walking tank, like a boss.
No, in reality I'd have much the same reaction purple OCD horse just with much more curiosity.

5106815 Again your self control to not curl up in a ball and cry is extreme

Well, that's a first contact done right.:moustache:

5106678 i would snark :ajbemused:. some people scream when scared, some people get angry, i get sarcastic. did it when i had someone pull a knife on me in NYC and again when i had a bear wandering between me and my house. I then freaked out properly once i was in a safer situation. more so with the bear incident so i couldnt imagine the panic after the SPARTAN situation was resolved.:twilightoops:

Do my eyes decieve me? A first contact gone right?!

You, my man, deserve a Hartman emoticon. :hartmansmile:
And a moustache.:moustache:

I still have the original downloaded. I hold an artefact lost to the depths of deletion. I'm going to go off and read it now.

Also another mooooustache.:moustache:

I Pineapple.

"So, you wanted to talk about something?"

Oh...plenty alots answer.

Yes Mr Spartan, Twillight have PLENTY of things she want to talk about.

Very nice! I demand another!

Opened the flood gates with that last statement, Five.

definitely a better way for him to go 'CHOO-CHOO MUTHAFUKKA"

Its been awhile sceance I read this story, but last time five formed a bond with Chrysilis after saviving some of her changelings from Celestia, and was willing to make peace with ponies right?

5147792
Story's starting over, because every chapter was just a pointless dead-end that I haphazardly threw together.

5147797 I do hope you'll still use the concept where changelings are misunderstood and not evil, like those shallow ponies think.

Way fast paced. Too many events, not enough description or time for any of them to sink in. Currently it reads mostly as a list of events more than a story. More description of the environment, and of the characters' thoughts would help, especially in the case of Five, as atm all we really know about him is that he talks to himself in the middle of unknown territory and that he doesn't really have any knowledge of any first contact protocol for soldiers. Also, there's not really a need for the audience to know the specific names of his guns beyond 'sniper rifle', 'assault rifle', etc., in most cases. saying 'burst-fire assault rifle' is more descriptive and less alienating to non-halo players than calling the battle rifle by it's full name. Those sorts of details are mostly useless to the reader, since they don't really describe anything and they don't usually reflect upon the thoughts or actions of any of the characters.

Comment posted by Mustafa deleted Oct 16th, 2014

5147843 really? I just took it as daddy was busy working and didn't have time to play with the kids. I feel the pacing was more appropriate to his personality than it was before.

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For those that speak like teh nOOb
I have a question for the author regarding why Five refuses to use logic. Why does a Sparten find that a useless weapon, the sniper rifle in this case, is more useful than both the medical supplies and 1 month of food? On an unknown world I would prefer a reliable food source over a weapon. Still going along the lines of logic, why use +6 cans of C7 if only half that amount was needed, a blatant wast of resources.

5151260
He took the food, medical supplies, and the Sniper Rifle, and to answer the second part, Five needed to use that much because UNSC protocol states that the equipment must be thoroughly destroyed.

5151309

Inside of the Pelican, however, were three emergency medkits, a pack with enough MREs to last him a month, and enough C-7 to destroy the Pelican.

This heavily implies that those supplies are inside the pelican. The size of the pelican is 30.5 meters long, with the blast radius of +6 cans of C7 being 60 meters in diameter Five could have easily thoroughly destroyed the pelican while saving 2 cans at a minimum.

Comment posted by Yoshikage Kira deleted Oct 17th, 2014

5151371 Then I would like to ask, why did he take the useless sniper rifle rather than C7?

5151354
The armor of the Pelican is thick, and he needed to coat the engines on the exterior as well as the computational devices in the cockpit.

5151377
So that he could use the Smart-Link scope of the rifle.

5151381 Out of curiosity, how much C7 is contained in one of those cans?

5151383 Doesn't that only require the scope and not the entire rifle

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