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A Spartan of the UNSC falls into Equestria and has various shenanigans in the land. First chapters revolve around how he meets the royalty, the mane six, and the new world in general.

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Not bad, needs a bit of polish but it's a good start with pacing and motives compared to others.
A pre-reader or editor may help.

Good luck.

do you like mathamathecs ?:trollestia:

lol. good. needs more words for me to read.

at the end celestia called him spartan not silent warrior, also i know this story is not to be taken seriously but spartans are not very expendable you could have had a way better reason than "banished".

Very good, keep it up!

Argh¡! Luna puppy eyes, too much for me. I lived well..................

BWHAHAHAHA BLUEBLOOD GOT WHAT HE DESROVED:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

grammar errors? i don't give a shit, if it means you can write these faster.

This is quite a great story!
There are a few grammatical and punctual errors, but overall a good story. You should probably find someone to help you out with proof-reading (I could do it, if you want).

Celestia called him Spartan...

Well, this is certainly interesting. I am so used to the more action styles of Spartans in Equestria that I never considered a comical one. SW seems like an ordinary guy, minus the ultra deadly training and high powered super suit...ok normal guy is pushing it, but I am sure you all know what I mean. :pinkiehappy:

Keep it up make sure to study hard with your math, even if you will never use most of it in real life. :rainbowhuh: Seriously, I would have rather studied doing taxes than trigonometry. I actually could use that.

I......think you just destroyed my hopes of becoming a robot.........THIS WAS SO FRICKIN CUTE LUNA IS BEST PONI!!!!

this is a very good story so far. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

i can't wait to read the next chapter. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

wow, only a few grammar mistakes.... that i noticed, i think i started ignoring them. Whatever, keep doing what you're doing

Moar. Now. Please.

another good chapter. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

too much :raritywink::moustache:
needs more :moustache::unsuresweetie:
then rarity will :raritydespair::raritycry:

This is Missing one thing.
:facehoof::facehoof::facehoof:

Hello my name is Silent Warrior and I need a home and someone to take care of me as I’m new to this world and kind of clumsy. I like macaroni art and playing hide and seek. I’m also very shy and don’t talk much. Please don’t let my cold external appearances fool you; in the inside I really just want a hug. XOXO

Lol wat :rainbowhuh:
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I want him to trip down some stairs

As i read through this i thought of something really funny. You should make the Spartan fall through the wooden floor of some ponies house. That would be hilarious!!!!

make more pleas:fluttershysad:

This is hilarious. I love this so much. :rainbowlaugh:

Hmm, his personality isn't very...Spartan-like, but I still think for the kind of story that you're writing it works.

This just gets better and better.

“Yes, umm, could I please have the salad with hay bacon strips, also some tea for the drink?” replied Luna.

:derpyderp2:

Hay mocking the god fruit bacon?
this is HERESY!:flutterrage:

I can't wait for the next chapter.:pinkiesmile:

Update
Or dicsord will fucking haunt you FFFOOORRREEEEVVVVEEEERRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:flutterrage:

This guy's like Deadpool in Mjolnir Armor. Me gusta! Have a fave and like! :twilightsmile:

Uhm... I like the look of this, but your grammar is a little bit... ugly. Don't worry, though! I like the idea. Our Spartan's deadpan snarking skills are excellent, so that caught my attention. Well, I'm just gonna like and follow now... see ya later!

‘AAAAaaaand record.’ Thought the Spartan as the red REC icon appeared in his visuals of the mess of a unicorn stallion that was before him.

Yep, that's going straight onto YouTube.

Oh God that letter from Celestia had me in stitches!

the grammar and word structure needs to be refined but this is fantastic

"sound wave of the face palm the spartan did" MY. FUCKING. SIDES.


CHappy 2:

luna said nice to john? SO MUCH WIN. also blue blood pissed himself? sounds like something the panssy would do.

....just like the guards to attack first and ask later....

and holy crap john can speak after only three weeks? dayum.

and where the hell is cortana?

chappy 3:(:3)


BE STRONG DAMMIT!!! SHE WILL NOT COERCE YOU INTO THIS! YOU ARE A POWERFUL MACHINE!!!!’

:facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof: :facehoof:

COME ON! JUST A LITTLE MORE! YOU WILL BREAK SILENT! HOW ARE YOU RESISTING SO MUCH OF THIS!!? YOU KNOW WHAT!? FINE! YOU LEAVE ME NO CHOICE, YOU HAVE FORCED MY HAND INTO THE LAST AND ULTIMATE PLAY!

:facehoof: :trollestia: :rainbowlaugh:

‘OH YOU FUCKING BITCH!!!!!!!! GOD DAMMIT!!!!!!! FINE!!! ILL FUCKING DO IT!’

O______________________________O T-t-the chief....she...she broke him??!?!?!?! WAT :rainbowderp: :raritystarry: :twilightoops:

Thank You, Thank You, Thank You!” said Luna in rapid succession, “You don’t know how much this means for me!”

-_____________- "luna......."

They looked at their plates and went ahead to devour their breakfast

how the fuck does MC eat with a mask/helmet on 24/7 -_- besides he doesnt EVER take it off...



chappy 4;










~Nightmare demon of the shadows.

Can he see the top part of the letter? Please? I want to see his response.

3323254 Let's hope he breaks his neck and dies, so this can end already.

Finally he reached the conclusion that they must’ve thought their retainer unbreakable and would have him there as a permanent trophy. He saw many other statues and saw many other statues of equine origin and one that simply looked like a failed genetic experiment.

This is repeated in CHP.1 twice.

3324696
No, he has to die by something even stupider..... He drowns in a rain storm!!!!
That is good, kill him that way

3324743 I don't really care how he dies, as long he does and this shit ends.

3324504 This isn't MC at all...
According to the story, he is just another recruit for the Spartan project.
And as for eating, it said that he lifted up the mask a bit, just showing only his mouth.

buck all you haters!!!

117th like!!! IT BELONGS TO MEEEEEE!!!!

3322994 I've been looking everywhere for a picture like that! :pinkiehappy:

So I take it the horrible grammar is purposeful?

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