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Charming Change

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Master king

Master king #1 · May 23rd, 2020 · · ·

This was a super interesting beginning.

Dragonslayer Ornstein

Dragonslayer Ornstein #2 · May 25th, 2020 · · ·

Interesting start, a bit fast paced and a few grammatical errors to stumble over but otherwise a good effort! Look into a proof reader if you can otherwise read your work aloud, if you stumble on anything or you feel it’s a bit off, try rereading it a few times. Sometimes you’ll need an extra word in places or to get rid of one that isn’t necessary.