The Enemy of my Enemy is Annoyingly Hot

SierraActual #1 · May 2nd, 2020 · · ·

DLS contest is both a blessing and a curse...I can only get through so much in a day. And my read it later keeps growing.

Erebus Cantillon

Erebus Cantillon #2 · May 2nd, 2020 · · ·

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3 fics in 2 weeks? My god... It's like the world is in fast forward

>blatant_smut_description
>interested

Booster Spice

Booster Spice #3 · May 2nd, 2020 · 2 · ·

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And now Gilda and Ember wont be satisfied until theyve prooven their ability to out do each other to their full abilities? No matter how many times it takes over however many meetings and buildings detroyed?

ShadowLDrago

ShadowLDrago #4 · May 2nd, 2020 · 1 · ·

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So, does this count as Hatefucking?

Noc

Noc #5 · May 3rd, 2020 · · ·

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This was fun. Silly, hilarious, sexy fun.

THERDSTORYWHISPERER

THERDSTORYWHISPERER #6 · May 3rd, 2020 · · ·

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Great story!

Frizzy

Frizzy #7 · May 3rd, 2020 · 2 · ·

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Fuck, I like this pairing.

DullDragon2070

DullDragon2070 #8 · May 3rd, 2020 · 2 · ·

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Wow. My two favorite non-pony characters having a brutal and super hot sexfight?

Nice!

OmniFox

OmniFox #9 · May 3rd, 2020 · 2 · ·

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What about The Clash of the Thirstiest?

RK_Striker_JK_5

RK_Striker_JK_5 #10 · May 4th, 2020 · 2 · ·

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First rule of Hate Sex Club. You talk about Hate Sex Club.

dirty little secret

dirty little secret #11 · May 24th, 2020 · 2 · 2 ·

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This is your official review from Dirty Little Secret's Dirty Little Contest!
Remember to vote in the contest's poll -- voting closes at midnight, June 6th.
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------ Review ------

Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-So damn intense!
-Didn't really take the time to get to know their bodies very well.
-The hate sex is interesting ... but fast and often breaking its own spell. The constant wrestling for domination kind of ruins the sexy mood, I think. Seems like it might be better if at some point they get over it -- or just get overwhelmed by hormones -- and get down to some good old-fashioned fucking for the sake of fucking, rather than fucking each other because they hate each other? At least for the space of a scene?
-The climax felt less like a resolution of conflict than just an abandonment of conflict. That fits the characters, of course, but it makes the end feel a bit unfulfilling.
-It's kind of ingenious that they're both furious at Twilight in addition to each other, giving them another potential outlet.

------ Scores ------

To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 67/100
Allure: 64/100
Enticement: 70/100
Immersion: 85/100
Prose Quality: 92/100
Total Score: 378/500
The more specialized scores for individual prizes, as well as the results of the community poll, will be published when the full results are announced. If this story wins any awards, there will be another post in the story comments sometime after June 9th announcing that this story has won.

Thank you for participating, and thank you for contributing to Fimfic's collection of clop!

Pilgrim