- Member Since 11th Aug, 2013
- offline last seen April 7th
SpitFlame
A writer should be like fine wine: get better with age.
SpitFlame
Joined 11th Aug, 2013 ·
Offline
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- Razalon The Lizardman · 14k words · 20 1 · 641 views
- BrittyFIM · 1.3k words · 77 3 · 2.9k views
- Waxworks · 7.4k words · 48 2 · 1.7k views
- orleansII · 1.5k words · 116 1 · 3.7k views
- Zachmoviefan · 2.6k words · 107 3 · 3.5k views
Featured In11
The Writers' Group56,406 stories ·9,292 members
Twilight is Best Pony6,373 stories ·3,071 members
Twilight Sparkle12,272 stories ·4,755 members
- Friendship is Tragic, the Horror writers and readers group686 stories ·325 members
Brony Horror1,378 stories ·1,111 members
The Shameless Self-Promotion Bureau49,243 stories ·5,458 members
Equestria Daily2,248 stories ·708 members
- Mystery Stories273 stories ·198 members
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Stats
Page generated in 0.083 seconds
Total duration
677 users online
879,134 hits today, 1,960,719 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
I feel I've read the aforementioned early story.
Good story
I don't understand the ending. Mind helping me out here? What exactly was the fog, and what was Twilight referring to when she mentioned "Empty Eyes"?
I don't get it
i can feel my brain slowly failing no not from logic decaying fog, no i just have a weakness to a lack of answers i mean what is wrong with the fog? is it even fog? where did the fog come from? is this even the fog in the first place? what are the empty eyes? why can only twilight see the fog/eyes? if so why did she never say anything in the flashbacks?... and honestly after a few moments too let my brain fall apart and pull its self together all i can guess is she is bat crazy or some kind of silent hill/limbo crap is happening... welp time to go digging for the original or let this eat at me for as long as i remember it
I don't know what the ending means, but I like it
Why does it has to be so confused? 😖😖😖
In case anyone is confused, puzzled, or confuzzled.
9061444
Sure. The backstory is that nigh-omnipotent, extraterrestrial entities have invaded Equestria with the intent to absorb all magic and life. These entities transcend our conception of reality à la Lovecraft. Nothing worked, not even the Elements of Harmony, so Twilight offered to sacrifice herself by absorbing the Elements and dispelling these monsters. These entities can drive you insane if you just look at them because of how impossible they are (they defy logic). Twilight, after "dying," went along with them. The fog just symbolizes these entities: it's confusing and contradictory. The "empty eyes" is just how Twilight perceives them.
9062495
Eesh, that's some scary shit, right there.
This was a fantastic read! I love this story in any conceivable way; the horror really crawls under your skin, the suspense makes you forget your surroundings, the mystery really keeps you engaged and pondering what's happening all the way until the conclusion, the drama squeezes your heart when you think Twilight is dead and you captured that mood perfectly with Twilight's choice of words, the unexpected ending and reveal of what it all means, the inherent creepyness with these aliens and what they are able to do as well as just the overall atmosphere (inspiration from Lovecraft, there?) and the writing style's flawless.
I haven't read many horror stories that are this immersive and captivating, this is a work of brilliance.
9124473
Wow, I really gotta thank you for this comment. I can now go to work (I work at a warehouse, picking up heavy boxes) with a smile on my face.
9124589
You're welcome! And I hope there are going to be more MLP: FiM horror fics by you, because you are good at writing them. I'm a huge fan of the horror genre, but I couldn't come up with a horror fic so original and immersive like that to save my life.
And you also nail Lovecraftian style really well, so you should definitely write more of that.^^
Oh, and, I will go also and read the predecessor of this fic on FIMFetch. Because I'm so interested in it now, I want to see how the idea evolved and how your skill increased.
Yes, yes!
The Veiled Ones that glide through the fog that wafts beyond the Nightmare Gate know neither sleep nor pain, for there is no blade that may rend their flesh, no schism that may part their ineffable selves. For they see without eyes, they hear without ears, they know without thought, purest of perceptions and reflections.
And just as plucked string must ring down, just as matter must decay, just as all that was created must return to the nothingness from whence it came, so too, must all those qualities and entities that transcend existence itself refract back unto their archetype.
In time, Twilight Sparkle will learn this, too, and only then will she come to embrace the truth of who she is and never was. She has passed the second gate, yet the Ultimate Gate lies still ahead.
Thank you for a little clarity on this eve of December.
more like this one please
You can has review!
Ahoy -- here's that review you requested!
I firstly wanted to say Lovecraftian, but after reading through this I feel like the threat is less incomprehensible and more the collapse of comprehensibility itself. What do you call such genre of horror anyways?
Oh, and, amazing read.
I am deeply disappointed that no one in the comments brought up Nemesis of Reason considering the flavor text is literally in the story.