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Bronze Pocket is many things: a clever earth pony, a wealthy landowner, and a father of three children—Cluster Tale, the eldest and most intelligent son; Nova Steel, the brash middle-child; and Airglow Sky, humble and fresh-faced, as well as the youngest (and only) daughter. Very few of them like or trust one another, and would rather take their time and energy to other places, to simply avoid any blood-tied complications which always seem to arise from their father's antics.

And when they're together, as fate would sometimes have it, things escalate into volatility and resentment. It all starts when the siblings find themselves back at their father's house for vastly different reasons. What good, one may be inclined to ask, can come of it?

Thanks to Soge for editing the first couple of chapters, as well as to 0_0 for being my proof-reader up to Part III.

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Chapters (54)
Comments ( 11 )

Bronze has some Incredible timing. I wonder if we was listening in somehow.

I do hope that Airglows talk with Nova goes well.

If the main OCs in this story were voiced, what would they sound like?

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Huh, not sure. Never really thought about it.

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Well, if you do think of anything, could you please PM me? Knowing who'd voice what character helps my reading experience.

A very interesting story so far. I'm looking forward to reading more of it. (I don't have much time right now so that might be a bit.)
The characters as they're described are pretty interesting, and I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.
It may have a small issue with purple prose, but honestly it seemed a bit more like a stylistic choice to me and wasn't very distracting in more than one or two places. I just thought I'd mention it in case you want to look it over yourself.

I didn't even finish the first chapter before I had to resist the urge to repeatedly click the "Like" button there. I'm captivated, so now not reading will be the challenge.

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