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Rarity finds herself especially intrigued by the dresses of Ponyville's newest dressmaker. Struggling under the burden of her own adoration she finds herself trapped within an existential crisis. In this nihilistic twilight, she clings onto the last of her creative sanity, trying to pierce through the mysterium that is the new dressmaker's identity. A story that deals with what it is to be and, subsequently, what it is to not be in the world of creativity.

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Wow, very deep. I like how you likened the three dresses to Rarity's projected life from her self-assessment. I even wonder if the other dress designer or dresses were even real. :unsuresweetie:

I personally think that the ending was wrapped up alittle fast. I was expecting some self-searching while getting sewn up by the nurse. that's the only reason I voted 4.5 instead of 5. :duck:

#4 · Dec 6th, 2011 · · ·

Oh... Oh my... Omigosh omigosh omigosh omigosh!! :rainbowkiss: This is so beautiful! I wish I could favorite this!

#5 · Dec 6th, 2011 · · 1 ·

Oh... Oh my... Omigosh omigosh omigosh omigosh!! :rainbowkiss: This is so beautiful! I wish I could favorite this!

#6 · Dec 6th, 2011 · · ·

I figure you've seen this coming - you've earned it, after all - so here it is:

Brilliant.

Besides a few typos and misplaced words here and there, you've managed to bring this story to life, and I'm fairly certain that it will speak certain truths to everybody who reads and understands it. You deserve nothing but 5 out of 5 stars for this work, and, contrary to the person who stole a 5/5 from you, I believe that the terse ending was entirely appropriate. "This was the real. The now." It's that snap back to reality...

I might just lose sleep over this - your work makes mine seem pale in comparison. Then again, we're our own harshest critics - I'm sure that you know that. :twilightsmile:

#7 · Dec 6th, 2011 · · ·

not my kinda story, too much internal conflict that doesn't get dealt with. A lot of 'woe is me' only to be wrapped up in the end with a pretty, ambiguous bow.

/critique sry:fluttercry:

The story was very well put together.
Not my kind of read, to be honest, but you did so well I finished easily, and still checked to see if there was a chapter two.
Your writing skills are brilliant.

PS. There wasn't a chapter two.

#9 · Dec 8th, 2011 · · ·

I really enjoyed this story! I love internal conflict and how characters deal with it. I think you bound Rarity to her struggles perfectly and, for that, I applaud you. Perfection is so hard to obtain when it is intangible and unrealistic. Even though we all know this, we still strive for it. But, truly, this was very well written and realistic. A 5 for you! :raritywink:

damn this is....very familiar to me actually. easy relation = easy read in my case. nice wright. :pinkiecrazy:

You have a way of words, a very good read.

Someone made me read this.

I'm glad they did. :raritywink:

Sweetie Belle nodded enthusiastically as Rarity perused the book-self for a likely entry [...]

I'm guessing that should be "book-shelf".

Rarity’s mane was dishevelled beyond any state should recall it being in [...]

Should be "she could recall it being in".

[...] she splashed a drought of cold water on to her face [...]

A "draught" of cold water, perchance?

Minor typos in an otherwise excellent story...

///SPOILER ALERT///

...though I have to say that the ending wasn't quite dark enough for my tastes. The story, in my rather warped view, should have ended with Rarity lain dead/dying amidst the shattered, illusory fragments of her futile dreams of perfection. But that's a matter of personal preference and most likely attributable, in this instance, to me just not "getting" it.

Dress-making is, after all, a complicated subject.

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That was the original ending to the story, but many people said they 'didn't get it', or didn't feel it had a real enough conclusion, so I added the bit about the hospital and picking up the pieces, etc.

I don't think it detracts from the story a ton, but I can see how it would work either way. Thanks for the feedback.

Hm. Good read. Going to have to let this one sink in for a little while.

Random formatting question for you. Are the ragged left indents (i.e., every new paragraph starting with a slightly different number of spaces) an intentional stylistic choice? I couldn't quite tell. Part of me feels like there's a subtle message in there which complements the story, but I couldn't see any particular pattern to them.

Could I please get the source of the fic's picture?

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"three dresses" by aisu isme, on DeviantArt

Wow. All I can say is wow.

This was a masterfully crafted work of art, I dare say.

Okay, that was cheesy.

I really liked it. It was incredibly thought-provoking, and my heart was beating loudly in my chest – for reasons I'm not entirely sure of. I'm curious as to why this doesn't have many views or likes or anything, considering how mind-shattering it is. All I can say is that it was amazing. I literally can't think of any other way to describe it.

Okay, I honestly don't know why, but I really don't get the endings to some of the dark stories like this. Can someone tell me exactly what happened at the end? Some people are saying that she died, some are saying she didn't die. I'm sorry about this, I can be really thick-headed sometimes. :twilightsheepish:

The Royal Canterlot Library fan site has interviewed the author about this story. Here is the interview (and its site-wide post on FIMFiction.net).

3638157 No. No I can't. Honestly, I have no idea what this story was trying to do. Whatever it is, I can't see it.

2200924 Ironically, having read your comment I find myself thinking that I might have 'gotten' that version of the end. This one felt more like the crescendo spotted a squirrel and got distracted; as if it stopped not so much in the vein of leaving me wanting more but not quite being complete. There was definitely a sense of some final punch missing.

Beyond that, I kinda felt this was straddling two styles and getting the best out of neither. Telling me a bit too much be a piece-things-together story, but not enough to get entirely inside Rarity's head. That dissonance made the whole thing a little uncomfortable for me to read and I didn't really feel like it added up by the end.

-M

Raritys dreams have been crushed. she will now quit her job and be unfancy.....unperfect a hillbilly...dirty...insane :raritydespair::raritydespair:

Raritys dreams have been crushed. she will now quit her job and be unfancy.....unperfect a hillbilly...dirty...insane :raritydespair::raritydespair:

:moustache: "Rarity. You really need to take a vacation , Lets go to Prance , Just you & I". Spike tosses The local news paper on the table.

:raritydespair: " What about the competition? They are still going strong, I have no time. . ."

:moustache: "You have all the time in the world. . ." Spike opens the fish wrap.

:twilightsheepish:"All but one clothing manufacture are under criminal investigation , You two go on and enjoy yourselves".

:moustache: "When you're a Dragon prince , Stuff happens".
:raritystarry: "friends in high places?"
:facehoof:

Surreal.

I'm ashamed I'm too stupid to understand this.

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